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Review #1, by maraudertimes Six

2nd February 2014:
Hiya!

So wow! This is at the same time creepy and sweet and sad, so I don't know how to feel. I feel so bad for Zach, because he doesn't understand that his father has passed away. I feel bad for his mother, who is trying her best but can see that it's not good enough for Zach. I feel happy that Zach found a friend. I'm a little scared that only Zach can see this friend.

Could Bronwyn be a ghost? Perhaps something bad happened to her and now she plays with other young children because otherwise she's lonely? Her attitude towards adults is a little bit unnerving, and I wonder why she has such strong feelings against them. Surely they can't all be bad. Especially Uncle Noah. He seems sweet!

This is a really cool premise and your writing style complements it beautifully. The only thing that I would suggest, is reading through it again because you spelled Zach's mother's name differently about three or four different time. I think it's supposed to be Cecelie, but I'm not sure, so just double checking those should help! :)

This was really well executed, so great job!
Lo:)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review! It really made my day :)
Thank you so much for your lovely comments and for pointing out my appaling name-spelling inconsistency - I will go through and check it asap.


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