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Review #1, by SaritaMalfoy22 I Love Them

15th September 2014:
Hi Emz!

It's weird to be the reviewer instead of the author, but here goes :)

I loved it, it was gripping, intense, convincing and genuinely frightening at points! It was interesting to see Lily so young, and so innocent, and the simple 'I was scared' etc was a nice touch - you don't need too many words cluttering up the place when you're a child - there are easier ways to say everything. It was interesting to see her point of view as she grew up and began to find ways to deal with her experience.

James and Albus (or Jamesy and Alby as she sweetly calls them) are well developed characters at a good age to know to protect their sister and each other. Harry and Ginny are wonderfully portrayed too, fretting and running around and worrying.

It was all soo convincing and like I said, honestly scary through the eyes of a little girl. The lengths the boys go to in order to make her feel safe are really touching, e.g. coming home every week when at Hogwarts, it was a lovely touch.

I have just one question - who were the men? Are we supposed to figure it out (am I being dim?!) haha :)

The only thing I would say about this is to go back over it at some point and correct a few little grammatical errors e.g. they're/their/there, you're/your etc. but other than that it was so gripping.

Well done!

-Sarita x

Author's Response: Hey Sarita!

What you doing here?! This is a twist in the plot!
Not that I'm incredibly glad to see you of course, because I totally am!

Oh my stars! It is so lovely of you to say those things! Thank you!

I think if you're writing about a child they don't need many words to make an impression and I'm sure in a situation like that words would more than likely escape her.

Thank you! I'm quite comfortable writing my version of James and Al but I ALWAYS fret about writing Ginny and Harry! I mean, they are them! I really don't want to mess with that!

I honestly believe that the Potter family would be close. Close enough (and perhaps stupid enough) to risk everything for the CHANCE of saving one another. Therefore in this case the boys silently decided their sister was far more important to save than themselves.

That's the thing... I don't know. They're mean men who are just being mean. They are someone that obviously has been affected by Harry but that's a large amount of people, so really, it could be anyone. They are the embodiment of anyone bad in the world, especially because they picked on innocent little kids.

That sounds like a good plan! I shall do that!

Thank you so much for travelling to my end of the woods!
*BIG HUGS*

ScoroseOTP
Emz xxx


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Review #2, by lovegoodlooney I Love Them

21st April 2014:
Wow!!! :) This is amazing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I'm just about to head over and check out your story now.
Keep me updated on your thoughts for my other stories!
ScoroseOTP
Emz xxx


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Review #3, by magicalmayhem I Love Them

8th February 2014:
Great explanation of the relationship between the Potter kids and addressing the fears and dangers that would surely have followed Harry and Ginny in the years after the war.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!
It means a lot that you took the time to read and review!
ScoroseOTP xxx


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Review #4, by SilverPatronus I Love Them

15th January 2014:
it's really scary! but i liked it!

Author's Response: I thought it was writing it! But thank you! xxx

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Review #5, by SilverPatronus I Love Them

15th January 2014:
it's really scary! but i liked it!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I love getting reviews, this is great! xxx

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