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Review #1, by MC_HK To Be Mary

18th January 2014:
Hello! :)

-I think your characterizations are very good! I feel like I don't know too much about Marielle yet, but I do like what you've done with Westley *swoon* and that nasty Capt. Gregson. They are both distinct characters that I enjoy reading because of their strong personalities.

-I don't think the ending was weird, haha.

My Opinions:
-You've got a great start here. I really enjoyed reading this! You have freaking AWESOME descriptive skills that I would kill for, and you definitely have some creative scenes here. The environments you create are phenomenal.

-I do have to wonder if Westley would have recognized Marielle? Just wondering, personally.

-I found a few spelling and grammar hiccups, but those can be fixed with a thorough read-through.

OVERALL I REALLY LIKE IT CAN'T YOU TELL BY MY CAPS LOCK.

--Monica :)

Author's Response: Hi Monica!

Yay for characterizations! Yes, Westley is a doll! I love him! And Captain Gregson is not very nice, whatsoever. But don't worry, he will get what's coming to him! :)

And yay! Thank goodness the ending worked! I was quite worried about that!

Wow! I've never really been that good with description, but I guess I'm getting better! And if I could, I would definitely give you some (even though you don't need it!). And the recognization (is that a word? I don't think so...) of Marielle is something you must wait for!

I will definitely look over this again for the typos, so thanks for pointing those out!

I THINK YOU LIKE IT BUT I'M NOT SURE. DO YOU?
(kidding!)

Thank you so much Monica, this was really helpful!
Lo:)


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Review #2, by Rumpelstiltskin To Be Mary

17th January 2014:
Hello!

Okay, so obviously this is the first story I have to come and love all over because it's a peak at a the sequel to Royal!!

Marielle's sneaking out, and she's a teenager, and she's Queen of Avalyn? She was super adorable as the first-year in Royal, so it's really interesting to see her in this new light. It seems that she has an adventurous side, just like her sister, with sneaking out under the guise of a kitchen maid.

That guard is a piece of work, I'll tell you, praying on young girls. Little did he know, he just messed with royalty... dude's not going to be doing so well after this. Hopefully, he will get what he deserves!

Westley, on the other hand, :D I love Westley! A nice heroic figure to come in and save the day! Hooray!

Loved it!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: Hi Rumpel!

Yay! You're the first, so I'm excited to see what you think!

I know! I loved Marielle, so I knew that the sequel to Royal would be about Marielle. Yes, Carolyn certainly had an effect on little Marielle, what with he adventurous streak!

Yes, that guard needs some punishment! Whoops! Guess Marielle will make sure he gets what's coming to him! And I promise that he will get what he deserves, don't you worry!

Westley! I love Westley! He's like a knight in shining armor, except that he's not a knight, nor does he have armor, nor does Marielle always need his help!

Yay! I'm so happy you liked it! Thank you Rumpel!
Lo:)


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