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Review #1, by Soyalie Touch

21st February 2016:
I've literally never even thought of Dean/Luna as a pairing until I reread Deathly Hallows just a few weeks ago and had a short thought of "this could be sweet" so when I found this story I had to read it.

It was lovely, and I think a very believable account of what Dean went through, and it all felt very Luna, she just has a knack for saying whatever people need to hear.

Loved it!

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Review #2, by TreacleTart Touch

21st April 2015:
Hi there!

I'm here for our review swap!

After looking through your stories, I chose this one because it only had a handful of reviews and I've never read a Dean/Luna pairing before, so it seemed like it would be an interesting choice.

The first thing that really struck me in this was your writing style. It's very lovely. It's smooth and flows very easily. I didn't really notice anything that seemed disjointed or out of place, so good work on that!

Your imagery and description is fantastic as well. To me, that is one of the most important parts of a story. All of my favorite authors are capable of painting pictures in my head. Your story did a great job of that, particularly at the end. I could really see Dean sobbing in the darkness and Luna trying to comfort him. I could envision the way they were moving their hands. Very well done.

I enjoyed the different little snippets that you've given us from Dean's perspective. Missing moments are some of my absolute favorite things to read. This filled in different parts of the story nicely and really gave Dean some depth.

While I don't personally ship Dean/Luna, I thought you did a convincing job of explaining why it's plausible within the story. I could see how Luna's actions would bring solace to a very wounded Dean. Maybe they would find some comfort in each other.

Finally, I have a lot of personal experience with PTSD, particularly war related PTSD, so I'm very particular about how accurate people are in their writing about it. Although you didn't delve too far into it, you did do a good job of describing some of the more minor symptoms. Some of the things that stood out to me were how he describes his heightened alertness in the beginning, how at the end he feels empty because he's no longer surviving on sheer adrenaline, and definitely the inability to connect in a more complicated way than hand holding. The idea of expressing all of the messy things he's feeling would probably be a very scary prospect for him and I thought you wrote all of this in a pretty realistic way.

I wish I could offer you some constructive criticism, but I didn't really notice any glaring issues.

Great work! And thank you for an enjoyable swap!


Author's Response: Oh goodness, hi Kaitlin! This late response is going to be so inadequate for your wonderful review, but I did want to take the time to post something to thank you for your time and kind words :)

I'm so glad you liked the style and the imagery. Imagery is something I have been working on for years, and this was a great opportunity to really practice some of those skills. Going into those minute details of their hands moving in that moment was an interesting challenge for me, and I'm proud of how it turned out. It makes me so happy that you enjoyed it as well! And your comments about PTSD made me breathe a sigh of relief. Although I do not have much personal experience with severe trauma, I am actually studying to be a counselor, so it was important to me to paint an accurate and vivid picture of Dean's experience. I'm glad that it rang true for you and that it seemed accurate.

Thank you again, and so sorry for the belated response! This review was so great, and I really do appreciate your time :)


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Review #3, by wolfgirl17 Touch

13th January 2015:

Happy Belated Puff Hot Seat Review Day!

This story was amazing. I really liked the way you told it from Dean's perspective and the way you placed so much importance on the concept of being touched after so long spent on the run, alone and scared.

I think you captured the horror of such circumstances perfectly and that Dean's reactions were spot on to find himself finally safe again, even for just a little while.

Great story!


Author's Response: Hi Wolfgirl! Thank you so much for coming by (even though I am super late in responding) and for your kind words. I'm glad you found Dean to be realistic and that you liked the focus on touch. I'm not sure where the idea came from, tbh. But I thought this pairing would be perfect to showcase that moment of connection. Thank you again for reading and reviewing, it means so much!


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Review #4, by Lucy Touch

22nd June 2014:
This story is absolutely beautiful. I have always shipped Dean and Luna, so to find a wonderfully written fic featuring the two of them really made my day, however cheesy it sounds. You really captured the characters of Luna and Dean, and elaborated upon them in a way the canon never did. So thank you for writing an amazing fic! I am eager to read more of your stuff :)

Author's Response: Oh my goodness, thank you so much! I love Dean/Luna as well, and it's great to hear from someone else who loves them. Haha there aren't many of us aboard this ship :) I'm so happy that you thought I did them justice in this story. Luna's character is especially hard for me to nail down, so I'm very grateful for the reassurance.

Thanks again for such a sweet review! It made my day for sure :)


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Review #5, by Aphoride Touch

17th June 2014:
Hey Maggie! Dropping by from Review Tag! :) I'd never read a Dean/Luna before now, so I thought I'd drop by here rather than your most recent story :)

I love the way you've portrayed Dean. We don't see all that much of him in canon, but he always seemed to me to be a little more serious than, say, Ron or Seamus, you know - a bit more of a down-to-earth and sensible kinda guy, and that's pretty much exactly how you've written him here. Not everyone can be a jokester, and the war isn't the funniest of times, so I love how it's more serious, from what's happening to the actual words and prose themselves. It just seems to fit with his character so well.

The way you talked about him being on the run was just brilliant, too. I loved how you picked up on the things you'd miss most if you had to go on the run - the difficulty finding food and having baths and things which seem so normal to us, but we'd have to do with out. It really highlighted how tough his life must have been on the run, without making it too big a deal, which is almost sadder because it's like it became normal for him, you know? So sad!

Luna. Omigosh, I love your Luna. She's just... wow. So perfect. So in line with canon it's unreal. I find her impossible to write, so I'm amazed at how well you've done here - it's wonderful! I love how you've added another dimension to her, though, with the whole end sequence, where she admits to being scared sometimes, and there's the sense that she hasn't really told anyone that except Dean, which is so sweet.

Your writing, as always, is so lovely. The way you've written this is so serious and so perfectly paced, and your word choice really shows how Dean's feeling and the difference and then spark between him and Luna. It's just really, really great :)

As with Helgazar, haha, you've completely convinced me on this one, too! This will have to become part of my head canon, I think.

I'm so glad I read this - it's a really, really wonderful one-shot :) :)

Aph xx

Author's Response: Hi Aph! Thank you so much for this completely lovely review! I'm slowly making my way through my list of unanswered reviews, so I'm really sorry it's taken me this long. But I so appreciate your time and your kind words, and it's always lovely to see you :)

I always saw Dean as being a pretty serious person. Sure, he can joke around with Seamus and the other Gryffindor guys, but he also seems to hold a lot in reserve. Maybe it's JKR's extensive, fascinating backstory on Dean that makes me feel that way. But anyway, I do normally prefer to show his serious side. Expecially as a contrast to Luna :)

I read and reviewed a oneshot by nott theodore called Snatched, which is about Dean on the run from Snatchers. It's a great oneshot, and it definitely planted the seed for me to write this one. I wanted to show the realities of what life would be like on the run (or at least make it seem as real as I could), and also spend some time showing Dean's thoughts and feelings about it all. I'm glad the details enhanced that for you :) And I guess Dean is very matter of fact about it all, isn't he? I had never thought of it that way, but that really does make it sadder. Thanks for giving me that new insight!

Aw, I'm so glad you liked Luna! She is always a challenge for me, but I'm getting to know her better and better as I write her more. I like to show a more down to earth side to her, because I figure she must have one. But I also tried to keep her sweet strangeness and her talent for saying things that no one else really wants to. It means the world to me that you enjoyed her!

Thank you so much, Aph! I'm just so thrilled to hear that you enjoyed the writing and the story itself. I'm really happy that you decided to read this--your review makes me day every time I read it! You are wonderful :)


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Review #6, by anythingcouldhappen Touch

28th February 2014:
Hi! I'm for the review swap :)

This was beautiful! I think you really managed to capture Dean's emotions in a very realistic way. Dean's always seemed like a very down to earth person, and your writing definitely reflected that. You also did a great job of writing Luna. She can be so hard to write with her wackiness, but you did great!

The theme of touch (especially at the end) was just so perfect. I think we tend to underestimate just how much human contact means, and how much we would miss it if we lost it. Your descriptions at the end about touch were lovely!

I also loved the bit where Dean started crying, because he started thinking. I know from my own experience that often tears come later, after the shock and numbness wears off. You described that really well!

Oh and I love your writing. It's very...crisp? I'm not sure if that's the right word. But its very easy to read, while still providing so much description and capturing the mood of the moment.

Awesome job!


Author's Response: Hi Sam! Thanks so much for swapping with me! I've been really wanting feedback on this story, and I'm so glad you took the time to help me out :)

I'm so happy that you liked it! Dean is one of my favorite characters to portray. And since I love him with Luna, I've had to learn how to portray Luna as well. She's so difficult to get right, just like you said, and I'm so glad she seemed authentic.

I was really interested in exploring Dean's journey back to human contact after being cut off from it for so long. I totally agree with you that we take touch for granted sometimes, so I tried to imagine what it might feel like after months without it. I think it would be an incredibly significant, almost overwhelming experience, and I tried to really show that at the end.

Haha, I'll take crisp! I love hearing that my style is easy to read. That makes me really happy!

Thanks again for swapping with me! I really enjoyed reading your chapter, and I so appreciate you taking a look at mine! I'm so excited that you liked it :)


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Review #7, by marauderfan Touch

8th January 2014:
Hadn't read any Dean/Luna until now but I TOTALLY SHIP THEM NOW. AAH I LOVE THEM. See I've brought this nice flag for the ship and a fancy new oar, glad to be aboard.

I really liked Dean's voice in this, and appreciated the background of his time as a fugitive and his capture by the Snatchers. What a miserable experience :( but you really conveyed the fear in the time of war, the uncertainty and the distrust of everyone else. I really liked the line about "living had become work" - although Dean wasn't at Hogwarts taking exams like everyone else, he was dealing with much harder, real things. The beginning of this chapter is so chilling, well done.

The second section was very subtle. I love missing moments a lot, and it was great to see the other side of the story as Harry and co. are upstairs.

And the third part wahhh. Poor Dean, that is a lot to go through, and to see ahead in your future (especially when the future is so uncertain in a time like that) and to think what everyone else is going through at Hogwarts. Aw I wanted to hug him. So I was really happy when Luna walked in because she's the sort of person who I think can always make a sad person feel better (case in point Harry in OotP.) She has such a sweet way of saying things and connecting with people - despite (or maybe because of?) her eccentricities she really understands people, and is exactly what Dean needed at this point. ♥ ♥ ♥

this part, I supposed social ladders had a way of crashing to the ground in desperate times. -- this is so true. Really liked that line.

I could really gush on and on about this but my internet always cuts out at the same time every day and it's about to, so I'm going to post this really quickly. but I LOVEDDD this, Maggie, this is both a sad and very heartwarming story. Love Dean/Luna so much. Great work!!

Author's Response: Hi Kristin! You are great, as you well know :) It's an honor to have you aboard the Dean/Luna ship!

Thank you so much for the feedback about the beginning. I wasn't sure how to strike the right tone with it, because I've never really done anything too action-y before. But I did feel that Dean's time on the run needed to be addressed in some way. I always saw him as stoic and thoughtful (especially during this dark period of the books), and I tried to bring that part of his personality out while describing his harrowing experience. Glad you enjoyed it!

I felt that the story needed some grounding, so I added the second scene to give readers something familiar. And the third part is definitely my favorite :) Romance is my comfort zone for sure. Luna does have a way about her that makes it really easy for her to connect, and I loved showing that first connection between her and Dean. I also wanted to show a vulnerable, emotional side to her that doesn't really come across in the books.

Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm so so happy you came by, and so proud to have converted you to the Dean/Luna life :) Thanks again, Kristin!


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