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Review #1, by sapphyst Apples and Pears

24th June 2014:
Hello!

Dear lord this fic is making me so excited like you cannot believe! I hope you can update it so soon because fics like these are quite rare, not to mention the unique angle that you're taking.

I think it's pretty genius, with a dragon tamer and dancer, and honestly I think this is going to turn out great.The third person point of view is great, but perhaps you could make more clear who's point of view it is? Or maybe spend more time in one character's POV so that the readers don't get confused if you switch every scene or so?

Kezia seems like an amazing character so far, but she is such a flirt. Pascal seems like the arrogant type - kind of like Gaston, from Beauty in the Beast - they both believe they're God's (or Merlin's) gift to women.

I believe that little bit about Pascal's poison skills will come into play when Charlie makes an extended appearance in the Circus' (and one very pretty dragon dancer's) lifestyle. :)

Such an amazing story - hopefully you'll keep it up and I can't wait to see how you portray/write Charlie!

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Review #2, by justbecause000 Apples and Pears

17th March 2014:
Loved it! It's different from all of the other stories I've read on here, but that is definitely a good thing! Really not much else to say, I'm looking forward the next chapter and seeing all these characters develop!!

Author's Response: oh wow, thank you so much!

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Review #3, by patronus_charm Apples and Pears

20th February 2014:
Hi Bea!

Aw I really loved the start to the story as the description was so fab and vivid which was perfect given how the setting was a magical circus with people from all over Europe as it just made everything so much more alive and fun!

Haha, I can't wait to see how this turns into a Charlie/OC but I can already see with a dragon tamer being needed how he might appear on the scene. I can really imagine him there as he was such a rebel guy so this is great for him.

I really liked the intro to Kezia and the other characters too as they seem like an interesting bunch of people and they'll make such a fun group of people it's bound to be an exciting story!

One minor thing I would suggest is that instead of writing numbers in numerical form is that you write them in word rom as it makes it easier to read and looks better but that's a really minor thing for such a great story!

I can't wait to see where this goes!

-Kiana

Author's Response: hey! thank you so much for this review!
i'm so glad you liked the beginning and the concept of it, it's been a plot bunny for almost a year now so yeaa it's just really exciting writing it all out.
i've just gone over it all- thanks for pointing out the numerical format of how i write numbers, you're right it does make the sentence choppier. speak later, bea xx


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Review #4, by Audrey Apples and Pears

14th February 2014:
This is brilliant! I absolutely love the idea and plot line. Charlie's always been one of those characters that are hardly mentioned in books but I still love,so it's going to be fantastic reading about him :) I love Kezia's name by the way, it's very pretty and exotic. Haha I can't help but think of tangled with a Pascal. Update soon please :)

Author's Response: thank you so much! i'll update as soon as i polish off the second chapter. bea xx

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Review #5, by miluv Apples and Pears

30th January 2014:
"It was a good thing that Pascal was so good at brewing poisons from basic ingredients." LOLOLOL

Author's Response: glad you found it funny x

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Review #6, by maraudertimes Apples and Pears

11th January 2014:
Hello! Here for the review swap!

First and foremost, this is a very interesting premise. I think you will do great things with this story! :)

But now, alas, a few CCs...

You do have a handful of typos, but just a read through should clear those up. It wasn't much, so it wasn't distracting, but just enough to be noticed.

Your POV fluctuates quite a bit and it makes it hard to keep track of things. At the start it seems as if the story will follow Kezia (beautiful name by the way - how did you come up with it?), what with the line stating that she knew people talked about her (did she hear the two talking about her and Pascal?) and that she didn't mind. But at the end it follows Pascal's train of thought. Perhaps a smoother transition between the two POVs, or even just a less subtle switch between focusing on Kezia and focusing on Pascal could clear it right up!

Other than that, this was really cool! Pascal sort of scares me with his poison making skills though... But I'm very interested in how Charlie will manage to capture Kezia's heart. And poor Pascal. If I guess correctly, this lunch will lead to the pique-ing of Kezia's interest in another man.

Overall, this is really cool and I have no doubt that you can pull this off! It was really interesting and I hope to see more chapters added, so write, write write! :)

Great job!
Lo:)

Author's Response: hey! i know the pov fluctuates- i'm not very good at writing in 3rd person and this story is written in that form as a way of practise. i also knew that i didn't want the story to be told mainly by any character, but as a free narrative- thanks for pointing that out though, i'll go over it!
thanks so much, your story was brilliant, i absolutely loved it- cheers for a fab swag! bea xx


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Review #7, by Unwritten Curse Apples and Pears

10th January 2014:
Hi Bea! I'm here with the review you requested.

I have a couple of things to squee over, so let's start with that:

1. Your description is beautiful! The description of the countryside at the beginning was so lush and appealing that I wanted to run barefoot through the grass! And I loved Kezia's remark about it being a lovely day to be alive (or something of the sort). You brought me into a vivid, living world.

2. Kezia is great. Her characterization is the strongest of the lot, though I think you do a good job of that throughout. I love the accents and the hints of culture and the differing opinions of the conflicting age groups. But anyway, back to Kezia. My favorite line from her was about not knowing whose clothes she was wearing. It was said so sneakily that I couldn't help but laugh. Be careful with her, though, because she seem a little TOO perfect--and perhaps that's just because what's-his-face is head over heels and perceives no faults. I, however, would love to see her faults.

Okay, a bit of CC before I go. Although I think you do a good job with characterization, I also think there are a LOT of characters to keep up with in this introductory chapter. I felt a bit overwhelmed with names and who's who and whatnot, which makes sense for such a populated, chaotic place as a circus, BUT I still think it could be made less overwhelming for your readers. Perhaps focus on one or two fewer characters, and spend a bit more time introducing the ones that do show up.

Overall, this is a really interesting story. It's very unique and I would be more than glad to read more when you update. I'm not sure I've seen a story quite like it on HPFF! Great work!

-- Gina

Author's Response: omg wow thank you so much this review is so lovely! i'm so glad you like my descriptions, and that i drew you in oh wow thank you ahaha. also i'm glad you like kezia and obviously she's beautiful and talented but pascal sees her with a very biased vision and her bad qualities are revealed throughout the story. but thanks for that warning, there's nothing worse i hate than a mary jane ergh!
most of the characters mentioned are irrelevant. they're honestly just there to create an image of a community! but thanks again for bringing that up.
bea xx


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