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Review #1, by sea hassle Headland

4th January 2014:
There are so many things I want to say, but I cannot form appropriate sentences in my head. This was beautiful and poetic, but sad, and at some points I had to squeeze my eyes shut.

You write so vividly, and this story feels so intimate and personal. It's very easy to relate to, you are a wonderful writer.

Marney

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Review #2, by mcdash Headland

31st December 2013:
I'm collecting my thoughts right now, but none seem to spring to the forefront of my mind except, "This is beautiful and beautiful and beautiful." Rather unspectacular and helpful, I know, but that's the only word I can think to describe this one-shot. Romanticizing depression and the like is a really unhealthy thing to do, but when I say this is beautiful and poetic, I really mean it.

To start off, your diction and choice of words is everything I've ever wanted and more. I had to collect myself when you used 'flotsam' because it's not used enough in writing and gave me fond memories of Neopets, which is really strange but also invoked that warm fuzzy feeling I get when I think of childhood. That feeling didn't stay for the rest of the one-shot though. Freddie's utter emotion, and also lack of emotion, is captured so well within your writing. I could relate to Freddie, not in the extremities that he pursues, but more a hopelessness prevalent in youth. One of the best feelings about this is the choice of third person narration. First person is mostly limited to describing a plot and moving things forward, but third person is the perfect fit for a broader topic like a feeling, such as Freddie's depression. I suppose it also gives a bit leeway to use more dramatic language. :P

The descriptions are the most vivid I've read in a while, honestly. I could picture every scene and every object with clarity, but at the same time, there was just enough to let the reader fill in the blanks. Ocean imagery is my favorite thing to read (scratch that- anything about the ocean), and even though the imagery used here isn't about something beautiful, the words are. I'm particularly in love with this line:

'It came in like the tide, and it crested and caught and crashed and before his head broke the surface - he'd been swept out to sea.'

The comparisons to the whale's blowhole was also every synonym of beautiful out there.

And to end this long-winding review where I mostly talked about word choice and used 'beautiful' too much to describe this one-shot (but honestly it is), I'll just say this will not be the last time I read this story.

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Review #3, by patronus_charm Headland

29th December 2013:
Ah Julia has a new one-shot! Well, two in fact but I felt in the mood for angst and I saw teh recommend this on the forums so I decided to read this one first!

Ah this story was so beautiful and so sensitive for the subject with never dramatizing things and just having the perfect and yeah I loved it. ♥

Fred was the prefect character for it. It was such a refreshing portrayal of him compared to the usual types, and I have to say Iíve never really seen the aspect of his issues with being called Fred explored before and how he compared to the old one, so I really enjoyed that aspect. He was so introspective too which was a nice change, and how measured his thoughts were despite dealing with everything was a new level to his character.

This depression and reminder of Fred seemed to seep into everything he did leaving him no escape and that really made my heart break to see someone suffer so much at the hand of a ghost. I think it was when he was examining his scars which is when it really got to me, just seeing he had reached that level and then to see later on his whole body followed him in that was a great analogy for both his mental and physical state wearing down.

Your descriptions in here just added to the general levels of angst and they were just so beautiful and angsty and Iím going to list my favourites as they deserve to be recognised.

Ď a smudge of peach-pink above his hip-bone with a slight, echoing pain.í It was just a different way to view it and it gave me an insight into how Fred saw that part of himself which really helped me understand him.

Ď Freddie was a portmanteau, a childish nickname that suited the living namesake better. Ď ok this isnít description but this line! It just made me so sad to see what a low opinion he gave himself and it made me want to hug him to make him feel better.

Ď But nothing changed the fact that it was still all in his head. Ď ah I loved this as it was a sort of realisation for Fred that hope could come through.

Aw, this was such a beautiful one-shot which left me close to tears. It was just so well written!

-Kiana

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Review #4, by MissesWeasley123 Headland

29th December 2013:
Whoa. Wow. Ah. Er - this was perfect. I just can't even... Explain... My feelings (?) about this.

I tend to write stories like this too, and in my reviews people tell me that it was so hard to read, and guy wrenching etc. etc. But I've never understood it, until now. So many emotions, and such sadness. I feel like crying because it was so sad.

This story... Is ah. I really not ought to be reading stories like these, because it is in a way a shocking reminder of some problems I've been through. I've thought about writing topics like this, and I have written suicide but particularly never this topic. For me it was either suicide or body image problems that were easy to write. This topic, though, needs to be cared for so tenderly, becauae it's all about pain... And it continues, unlike death where it ends. Gah, I don't make any sense. Let me not ramble.

The point about his name Freddie was beautiful. I admire the way you think because it is so clever. I would have never thought of it that way. You wrote this so beautifully. I think I might have to favourite it.

I admire how you've been working so long on this and am so happy that you posted. It's very rare when a piece manages to leave a mark, and this has. It was mind blowing and life changing. My words for you are not enough praise. I just want you to know that this piece is brilliant, and that you truly are so, so, so talented. And I could not stress that enough.

Bravo!

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Review #5, by teh tarik Headland

29th December 2013:
This was an incredibly difficult story to get through. :( :( It's not a topic I like reading about, and it's one that's incredibly personal for me, too personal for me to ever write it in fic. But oh my god, this story. I'm honestly a mess of feels right now because you've taken such a difficult topic and written it with neither sentimentality nor glorification, and you've made Fred's suffering so real. I'm also so glad you chose Freddie as a character; it's an unexpected choice and I love your examination of him in this perspective. You covered the bit about his name and how he feels, being named after his dead uncle whom he can never replace; you explored his feelings of inadequacy and isolation, but Freddie's situation is so much more than these things...what really got to me were these lines:

There had been no real catalyst. The beautiful thing was that it was all in his head.

^ This is perfect. This really says it all for me: that perhaps Freddie is in fact searching for a reason why he does these things to himself, and not the other way round. It's like he's trying to put a name to all these feelings that come out of nowhere.

Nothing had really gone wrong. Nobody died. Recovery is a constant and this was just the first step of so, so many. He clutched to each word like a lifebelt, learning how to float.

Probably my favourite lines of all.

Ugh, I don't really know how to say anything coherent any longer so I'm going to leave it with this review. This was absolutely fantastic; thank you for writing this.

-teh

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Review #6, by Dirigible_Plums Headland

29th December 2013:
This was so sad & so emotive. I loved it a lot, you truly are a great writer. I would say more but it's half seven in the morning & my mind is too groggy to put my feelings into words. But I can say that you are extremely talented and original. Great work xxx

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Review #7, by UnluckyStar57 Headland

27th December 2013:
Hello. I noticed that this story didn't have any reviews yet, and now at the bottom of this page, I'm wondering why that is.

So here I am to give you a review, if my emotions don't get in the way first.

I'd like to start off by saying that I've never experienced depression or felt the urge to self-harm in any way. But this story made me so sad... Ugh, I'm disgusted with myself, because I didn't know that it was remotely possible to feel so much about something that I've never experienced.

Fred Weasley the Second is usually portrayed as a jokester, like his father and late uncle, but in this story, you've painted him with a whole new set of colors. (I think the predominant ones are navy and grey.) The constant metaphor of drowning and the fact that the family is vacationing by the sea--it all adds up to make a beautifully tragic and sad picture of exactly who Fred Weasley II is at this point in his life.

He obviously has not gone the way of the prankster. Instead, he is haunted by the ghost of his uncle--in his name, in his father's smile, the words that nobody says. And it has depressed him. I love the way you wrote this: "Here was the wave, and here it broke: here was where he washed up on the shore with salt on his lips and his pockets full of stones." It's absolutely beautiful, while also being so sad that I just can't even describe how sad it is without repeating myself over and over.

You mentioned that you drafted this about six times (maybe more?). Well, I think that this finished product is absolutely brilliant. You've managed to take a character that people have set a mold for, pushing him into the shape of a class clown, and you broke that mold--shattered it into a million pieces. I will never look at Fred Weasley II the same way again.

Thank you for that. I hope that you write more fanfiction very soon, and that you feel very proud of the way this story turned out.

Happy Holidays!

~UnluckyStar57

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