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Reading Reviews for A Man Named Neville.
  
4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Reena The Dungeons

3rd March 2015:
Blaise Zabini is a girl.

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Review #2, by patronus_charm The Station

27th December 2013:
Hi there, here for the 12 days of Christmas review challenge :D

I thought this was a really wonderful one-shot because you got Neville's air perfectly! I really felt for him here with him constantly being lambested by Augusta to be a good grandson and student and not embarrass her when it really isn't his fault when he does so. Then that girl at the end carried it on even more so.

I liked his nervousness too, because it does make sense for him to be like that as he was always a nervous sort of person. The way the crowds seem to swarm over him was captured perfectly especially with him searching for his toad too.

The only CC I would give is perhaps make your spacing and size of paragraphs more uniform. The difference in all the sizing was rather large and proved distracting at times so that would help a lot!

Great one-shot though!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'll definitely keep an eye on my spacing inn future; you should check out the new instalments. I'm continuing the one-shot into a chaptered fic. Let me know what you think? I appreciate your review. :)

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Review #3, by MissesWeasley123 The Station

27th December 2013:
I love Neville, Neville is awesome yes. Hi, I'm here for the 12 Days of Reviewing from over at the forums. This story seemed awesome and fit the task too!

What a unique idea. He's a Slytherin! That is so wicked. I myself am writing a novel(la?) on Neville turning bad, and so I understand and have come to love his character a lot. I wonder if Neville's going to turn to the dark side in this... That would be very interesting. Anyway, I've rambled a bit so in short, I'd like to commend you on your idea, very unique.

One of the things I also enjoyed in this was the use of description. Your sceneries and images are vividly painted and detailed, so keep that up. The only bit of constructive criticism I could provide is maybe you ought to fix up the spacing, it was a bit brutal to the eye :P But that doesn't have to do with you so don't fret it too much.

A really nice intro, and I cannot wait to see where you go with this. I await your update!

Author's Response: Eep! Thank you so much!! I'm putting up the next couple of chapters soon, thank you for reviewing me. I'll watch my spacing definitely. :D

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Review #4, by shez The Station

24th December 2013:
Aww poor Neville :((

I really like your writing style and I hope you continue this fic. It's a very interesting premise. One minor thing I would edit, though, is the spacing --it's all uneven. All in all, good read, if a bit sad.

Author's Response: Hey, thank you for reviewing! I'm definitely continuing this fic, the next chapters are going up today; let me know what you think? On my way to fix the spacing now! :)

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