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Review #1, by shez Of Bets and Broom Cupboards

4th January 2015:
Here for the review swap but I'm definitely planning to stay ;)

So I'll preface this by saying I was originally going to do your Tom Riddle fic (but then I realized I'd already R&Red it. Then I was all OMG WHY HAVEN'T I READ HER OTHER WORKS??) And I don't usually read fluff, but this was so witty and refreshing I COULDN'T RESIST.

So. I love this. I don't usually like next gen but this is just PLAIN GOOD. I love the sex-deprived ultra obnoxious and yet somehow still endearing internal world of James . I love your "little shit" Slytherin!Albus a more though. I love how this didn't meander into a love story, and Ursula remains obnoxious from beginning to end. I love how the Wotters give James such a hard time (and just the whole conversation between them. It's a rare feat to write group conversation so well). But mostly, I love the dynamic between the brothers. Can this be a full fledged fic? I'd love to read more ways Albus ticks off James.

EDIT: Oh, just one concrit: dialogue tags!

If you're describing the way someone says something, it's a comma and a continuation of the sentence. Otherwise, fullstop.

Ex.

"Shut up," she says breathlessly. (COMMA, LOWERCASE)

"There, there." Freddie smirks, patting my head.
(PERIOD. NEXT SENTENCE)

s'ok. I screw this up all the time too :)

And since I realize my review is pretty lame in comparison to yours, I just wanted to say that I really genuinely enjoyed this story. Enough to favorite it, actually. You're a very good writer technically, and you write the sort of stuff I like (Tom Riddle, Slytherin!Al-- I need to get to your Sirius Azkaban fic next since I'm sure I'll end up liking that too).

Can I somehow bribe you to write more stuff?

Author's Response: Hi! I haven't checked out 'Of Bets and Broom Cupboards' in ages so I don't really remember most of the dialogue, only the fundamental plot. Either way, thank you for the compliments. They're always nice to hear ;)

As for the dialogue tags, I completely forgot about them! I uploaded this AGES ago before I went through the crash course and forgot to edit this along with other one shots. I'm planning on doing that soon so thank you for the reminder!

As cliche as this portrayal of James can be, I remember it being surprisingly easy to write him and enjoyed doing so. I might upload a longer fic of him, but it'd be months before that happens. I'd have to plan and write a few chapters before I actually upload it.

I love the Potter boys. That is all I can say.

Thank you for stopping by. It's always nice to see you around :)

Dirigible_Plums xo

(But really Slytherin!Al and Tom Riddle are what I live for, I really don't think any other explanation is necessary??)


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Review #2, by ladymarauder85 Of Bets and Broom Cupboards

14th January 2014:
Brilliant! I love this already!
I've read a few stories where the blokes are on a no sex bet but this one has been done to perfection - no cliches and over within a chapter - great job! I love your Al and James too. They've got really distinct voices if that makes sense? I loved James comment about Slytherin and how Al's different there and then Al being warmer when he was with his girlfriend. It's going to be great seeing more of him.
Oh god, Umbridge!
Just please hurry with the next chapter because I'm dying to find out what happens to your characters!
:)

Author's Response: Well thank you for all of the compliments, I'm looking like a Weasley right now...except I'm not ginger. Unfortunately "Of Bets and Broom Cupboards" is only a one-shot but I wouldn't mind doing more of them and possibly writing a novel(la) later on. Hope that doesn't disappoint you too much.

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Review #3, by Zqad Of Bets and Broom Cupboards

14th January 2014:
This was a fun trip :) Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you xx

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Review #4, by BBWotter Of Bets and Broom Cupboards

6th January 2014:
Oh my gosh this is hilarious!! I love it! Can't wait for the next update :) xx

Author's Response: Haha thank you, I'm glad you found it good. I was a teeny bit worried because it was my first ever Next Gen one shot & my first time writing in James' voice

-Dirigible_Plums xx


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Review #5, by newgenerationlover Of Bets and Broom Cupboards

20th December 2013:
Absolutely love it!!

Author's Response: Haha I'm glad! Hope the unedited version didn't annoy you though, I'll fix it in the New Year, I promise x
Thanks for R+R+Ring!


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Review #6, by Fonzzx Of Bets and Broom Cupboards

20th December 2013:
I LOVED this :D it was brilliant!

Author's Response: Oh stop it, you're making me blush ;)
I'm glad that you loved it though because after I'd put it up, I freaked out about it because, well, what if it was HORRIBLE? But I'm glad you liked it.
Thanks for R+R+Ring!


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