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Review #1, by patronus_charm Too Old

3rd January 2014:
Hi, here to review your challenge entry!

I really loved this one-shot, because it was just so adorable and sweet and the perfect Christmas story really! Tonks really made this piece with your characterisation of her, because she’s beginning to have the flares of her older self while still maintaining that childlike innocence and the mix of all of that was really great.

You slipped in all of the wotchers really well, and the way she wanted things to aid her in her mischief making was so her because I always imagined her to be a bit of a prankster. The way she felt she was ‘too old’ for this Christmas thing, had me laughing too because she said it in such a determined way and that she was certain she was right but she couldn’t help but give in :P

I thought you caught their family life really well, and even though Ronks is my OTP, I’m glad that you chose to write about this part of her life because it’s so rarely explored so this was a wonderful trip into it. Ted and Andromeda were such wonderful parents too and I could really see how much they cared for her, and you characterised them so well.

I think the most touching section was when Andromeda paused for a moment and said that her daughter was only ten and shouldn’t be acting like this. It was almost as if she didn’t want to let her daughter grow any older which was a great point to include given how turbulent her life became when she reached that age herself.

A small point, but I really liked how you covered several days over this story because it really meant we got to see them in lots of moods, not just one and really got to know their characters as a result.

The ending was so sweet. I was almost tearing up with Andromeda when Tonks began to mention her sisters, and it was so lovely to see that she still missed them, and that sibling bond couldn’t be broken so easily. But then you saved it from going to angsty with Tonks commenting about how Santa wasn’t real, and that just had me laughing.

This was such a brilliant one-shot, so thanks for entering the challenge and the results should be posted soon!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello! Sorry that I took so long to respond to this- I've been incredibly lazy lately.

Ronks is definitely one of my favourite pairings and I was originally going to do a Ronks piece but then I had the idea for this and I just couldn't pass it up.

I always got the vibe from Tonks that she would have been a little troublemaker since a young age. I can't imagine that Ted and Andromeda ever would have been strict with her.

I think that the family dynamics were a really important thing for this story. Most of my stories revolve around families as well as romance etc. and I just adore the Tonks family so much!

Again, I wanted to show the importance of family with the Black sisters. Though there no longer a real family, I wanted to show that Andromeda would never forget them. I like to think that Narcissa and Bellatrix would have felt the same, at least at one point.

I'm so glad you liked it! And thank you so much for third place. It really made my day to hear that!

x Ely


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Review #2, by xTimexTurnerx Too Old

31st December 2013:
Howdy there!

Sorry for my delay in reviewing, it's Ms. Lizzie for the forums.

I really like how you chose to explore young Tonks versus the one that we meet in the books. I think my favorite piece of characterization was this paragraph: "Her mother was the princess- she was beautiful, and she did all the sorts of things princesses did. She cooked, read books, mended clothes and cleaned. Nymphadora climbed trees, played with the boys in the street, rolled in the grass and refused to clean her bedroom. That was before. But now that she was growing up- practically an adult, she understood what the most important thing really was. Jokes." I loved the contrast between Tonks and her mother. Tonks seems very aware of herself and set in herself at a young age, which I would expect from someone who was such a successful Auror.

Her father was very pleasant to read, but I wish I got a little more of his backstory, although I understand the focus was supposed to be on Tonks.

I loved the ending and her mother mourning the loss of her two sisters. This told me a lot about the mother's character without having to rely on descriptions (showing rather than telling) which I think is a real art, so well done!

Thank you for requesting, and I loved reading!

xx Lizzie

Author's Response: Hi! It's perfectly fine- sorry for taking so long to respond! I've been pretty lazy recently.

Due to her being an auror later, I couldn't imagine her being incredibly girly or anything. I wanted her to be a bit more like Ted, rather than Andromeda though still be able to have that love and respect for her mother.

I adore writing Ted, and reading about Ted, especially his backstory. I'm thinking of doing some more Ted/Andromeda stories so that I can get a chance to explore that.

I love writing about Andromeda so I just couldn't resist putting that in. I'm glad you liked it!

Thank you so much for the amazing review!

x Ely


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Review #3, by kenpo Too Old

29th December 2013:
Hey, here with your requested review.
I actually read this and wrote a review a few days ago, but for some reason didn't post it... sorry! I usually don't take this long.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. It was really nice to see a young Tonks. I think her characterisation was fantastic; I could absolutely see how the girl you portrayed would grow up into the Tonks we know and love.

The interactions between her and her parents was adorable. I really liked when Andromeda threw the flour and Nymphadora. It was a nice touch and gave a feeling of playfulness.

The premise of the story was such a great idea! Most people probably would've gone with Remus/Tonks if given that prompt, it's awesome that you took it in a different direction.

I enjoyed reading Ted and Andromeda. They play off each other well.

Ted seems like such a good father!

The transition into the Andromeda being sad was a little confusing, but once I got there it was written really well. It makes sense that she'd miss her sisters around holidays, but at the same time wouldn't want to share too much about them with her daughter.

There are only a few things I'd like to point out...

"Nymphadora moved to look at the cookies, and after looking at each of them, she made her selection."

You use a form of "look" twice. It read as slightly repetitive.

"Mummy?" Andromeda turned around immediately, "Merry Christmas." She smiled up at her mum and...

This was just slightly confusing, because "Andromeda" is the first word after the dialogue, but she isn't the speaker. Then at "She smiled" it is unclear who "she" is until you get to "her mum".

Other than those two things, I didn't really see anything worth mentioning.

You asked about the characters, and I really enjoyed the characters. If I had to say something, I'd say that sometimes Nymphadora seemed younger than ten.

Overall, really enjoyable little story. Sorry I took so long with the review!!

Author's Response: Hi!

That's alright. Sorry that I took so long to respond, to be honest- I've just been a bit lazy lately.

I definitely thought that having child Tonks and her family would be a little bit different than the usual Remus/Tonks (not that I don't adore them). I'm glad that you liked how Tonks and her parents were characterised- I was so worried that they'd be too out of character!

I wanted the bit with Andromeda to be a little confusing, because I wanted the reader to be in Tonks' position. Does that make sense? The same with Nymphadora- I wanted to show how, really, she is still just a little kid.

Thank you so much for the wonderful review!

x Ely


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Review #4, by BookDinosaur Too Old

28th December 2013:
Hello! I'm here for the Second day of the Twelve Days of Reviewing! :D

I really liked looking at Tonks' life as a child, This is the first time I've ever read anything about little-girl Tonks and you did a fantastic job of writing it. From the canon JK gave us, it's easy to imagine her as a mischeivous, tomboyish little girl and you've done a great job characterising her. I loved the little remarks she made about holding the Santa lie above her parents to get her supplies and how she insisted that her days as Princess Nymphadora were long over.:P

Hearing abbout what kind of mischief Tonks got up to as a child made me laugh, it was great when she told us about throwing the tadpoles on Robbie's face and discovering a love of playing 'jokes' on other people, that was just so endearing and lovely.

I think you did a really good job of capturing the happy family life she had as a little kid. It's so clear that she's loved by her parents and she loves them as well, and it was all so sweet, like how her mother kept calling her a little devil but let her get away with eating the gingerbread, I loved reading about it all. :)

Another thing I really enjoyed was the characterisation of Andromeda. It is realistic that she would miss her sisters, because they were sisters and before she was exiled they must have been quite close to each other. And I loved seeing about how Nymphadora comforted her mother, it was such a lovely family moment.

Ted was a wonderful daddy as well, how he cared for his wife and child was just so sweet. I loved the loving relationship you showed between him and his wife as well, they must love each other so much for Andromeda to leave her family for him and I'm so happy you showed us that.

This was a lovely oneshot and I really enjoyed reading it. Great work! :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for reviewing :)

I've only read one or two things about Tonks as a child so I wanted to give it ago. I'm glad that you think that she was characterised well- it was one of my biggest worries about this story.

I don't think that Andromeda could have ever truly gotten over leaving her sisters, no matter what happened. I really wanted to show that.

Ted is just lovely. I think he's fast becoming one of my favourite characters, and he and Andromeda are perfect together.

Thanks again for your lovely review!

x Ely


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Review #5, by Lululuna Too Old

28th December 2013:
Hello! :) I'm here for Day 2 of the 12 Days of Reviewing Challenge, but also because I really enjoyed beta-ing your story and wanted to leave you some non-grammar related comments! :D

I really enjoyed reading this, I think you wrote Tonks just beautifully. She has this amazing sassiness with her parents which just makes me giggle and it's clear how absolutely loved she is. I sort of imagine Andromeda as being a little colder because of her upbringing and not wanting to raise her daughter that way by being extra attentive.

Tonks just made me laugh so much with her jokes. I felt a little bad for poor Robbie, just because he had a toadlike face, but it was a funny if accidental joke. :P And she was so playful and delightful, with carefully picking which cookie she wanted, and holding the Santa story over her parents, and asking for things to do mischief with from her parents without actually specifying what - it really reminds me of being a kid. :)

Ted and Andy were adorable as well. Ted was amazing, and I could really tell what a wonderful Dad he was. The moment the parents have together where they think about Hogwarts was great too and I could feel how it was a little loaded since that must have been a time of choice for Andy to leave her family behind. I thought the mention of the sisters was perfect as well and thinking about that breaks my heart for Andy a little. It's so interesting how Tonks didn't even know her aunts' names, and has this darker undercurrent to the happy family. Another moment I really liked was at the beginning where Andy said how her daughter was "only ten," as if she's afraid of her daughter growing up too fast. It was a wonderful moment and I think you characterized Andromeda beautifully, like all of the characters really.

I don't know how I can express how much I loved Tonks, she was just so spunky and lovely and I wish I had time to re-quote and restate every thing she did and all her little asides, like when she said she wasn't going to fall for being a princess within the narration. You really took her character and turned her into this lovely child whom I felt like I knew.

Lovely job my dear! :)

Author's Response: Hi! I just wanted to thank you again for beta-ing this for me. You were so incredibly quick at it and really helpful too, so thank you!!

I agree with what you said about Andromeda. She was originally quite cold, but then I thought that she wouldn't want to be like her parents. I don't know if I achieved that, but that's where I was going.

I was hoping that people would connect to Tonks as a child. I wanted some nostalgic feelings for Christmas back when you were a child.

I love Ted and Andromeda. I just think they're an absolutely beautiful couple and I always thought they'd be wonderful parents to Tonks. I can't imagine she would grow up the way she did without them. I also wanted to show the darker side of Andy- I felt like her history was something that I just couldn't avoid.

I'm glad you liked Tonks, and everything else. I was so unsure about this story, but your beta-ing and this review has made me feel more confident about it.

I can't express properly how much this means to me.

x Ely


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Review #6, by UnluckyStar57 Too Old

27th December 2013:
Hello! I'm here from the Twelve Days of Reviewing over at the forums. :)

I thought that this was a really good look into Tonks' childhood. I usually see a lot of Remus/Tonks, but this was different. And I liked it!

I can easily imagine Tonks as a little tomboy/prankster, eager to defy anyone who tells her to behave herself. The gingerbread men can certainly attest--she's awfully set on doing what she wants to do, when she wants to do it. :)

Awww, sad Andromeda feels! You've portrayed her as missing her sisters, and I really think that's so true. They stayed with a bad crowd while she was blasted off the family tree, but they loved each other, once upon a time. It is a mark of Tonks' already-showing amazing Hufflepuff-ness that she ocmforted her mother. As Andromeda said, she may not have her sisters any longer, but at least she has Ted and Dora to love her.

I know that this story was supposed to focus on Tonks, but I think it's awesome that you delved into her parents' minds as well. Ted likes A Christmas Carol--probably his mum read it to him growing up. Andromeda misses her sisters, but wouldn't have her current life any other way. Christmas is all about families, and I'm glad that you've shown that in this one-shot. :)

After all, no one is too old for Christmas.

Merry Christmas, and Happy Holidays!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you so much for choosing my story to review!

I'm a massive Remus/Tonks shipper myself and that had originally been my plan, but this came to me and I thought it would be interesting to write.

I got that vibe from the older Tonks. I can't imagine her wearing pretty dresses and playing with dolls, she just doesn't seem like the type to me. I always pictured her as being a little more trouble than that!

I love Andromeda as well. I think that she would miss her sisters- I don't think she ever would have stopped. I wanted to show how she'd still think of them.

I just couldn't pass up the chance to dive into a bit of Ted/Andromeda. I definitely think they would be a big part of Tonks' life, especially at that age.

Thank you so much for this review and I'm sorry I didn't get to it sooner. I hope you had a lovely holidays!

x Ely


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