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Review #1, by MargaretLane Strands of Sunlight

10th February 2014:
Wow, just reading the first paragraph, I love your style. And that part about him tripping over his robes made me chuckle.

I like the way she notices little details about him. It makes it sound like she has a crush on him, without her saying so outright.

I also like the way he sits at the Gryffindor table. It kind of gives an indication the war has changed things, though there are still clearly people who cling to the old ways.

Yikes, the latter half of the story got a lot more serious, though of course the warnings already indicated that. It makes me wonder how Dominique felt while she was dating him and why they stayed together so long, though of course, people do stay with partners who treat them badly and for so many reasons.

I think it's a rather different picture than one would usually get of Lorcan and I now wonder how his twin reacted and if Luna knew.

Really good story.

Author's Response: Thank you! This was actually very difficult to write because it's not my usual style (the letter format) but when I finished I was plaased with it. Regarding the reactions of Lysander and Luna, I do think that Lorcan would've ended up with a few bruises (from his brother), but I am not sure how Luna would've reacted. And Dominique stayed with him simply because she didn't want any other girl to have to suffer. So really she was protecting the female side of Hogwarts' student body. Thank you again for the awesome review!

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Review #2, by UnluckyStar57 Strands of Sunlight

30th December 2013:
Hello! I'm here for the Fifth Day of the Twelve Days of Reviewing at the forums. :)

Whoa... This is a REALLY interesting story! I think that it's cool that you chose to write it in the form of a letter, and that the writer was Ernie Macmillan's kid. I really enjoyed seeing how her character changed throughout the course of the letter.

I'm not going to lie: When I started reading, I thought that Lorcan was going to be the innocent one. I thought that Dominique was mean and nasty, and that she would be such a jerk that Lorcan would resort to unmentionable things. However, that was not the case! What Nora never knew (until Dominique revealed her bruises) was that Lorcan actually had a very nasty mean streak inside of him that made him hurt his girlfriend. What was going on inside his head?! Why did he do that to Dom?!?! And why did she put up with it? Was she trying to protect the rest of the female population of Hogwarts from getting the same treatment that she did? If so, that was very noble of her, and I'm glad that she got a happy ending.

I am also glad that Eleanor got a happy ending, too. She, unlike Dom, was not directly affected by Lorcan's anger, but she did have feelings for him for a very long time. It's great that she escaped that sort of cruelty and found a man who would be kind to her.

This was a very well-written story! The only thing that would make it better is if you could tighten up the spacing between paragraphs a little bit--it makes the chapter easier to read. But that's a very minor thing, and it isn't any real inconvenience. I think that your writing is great! :D

Happy Holidays!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Thanks! And I did try spacing it normally, but it kept telling me to keep spacing it. It was actually really hard writing it in letter-form (I don't normally do that!) but it was fun getting out of my comfort zone a little. And i would definitely say that Dom was trying to protect the rest of Hogwarts' female population. Thank you for the awesomely enthusiastic review!! I'm glad you enjoyed!

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