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Review #1, by xTimexTurnerx Retracing dreams.

16th January 2014:
Hello again!

I interested in the role media plays in the story. I feel like I'm peeking in on a real life celebrity, which is cool.

I'm curious as to what Rose has been doing since she graduated college (other than dating Drew). Did she have a job? Did she have hobbies? I'm interested in some more backstory in how they got together and who she was before they started dating.

Just watch the "Lunch/Tea/Meal was a/an (adjective) affair." You used that twice close together.

I like Eliza! I'm excited to see her and Albus's possible relationship develop. She's a good friend for sticking with Rose through the relationship and after.

I like your last line because it makes me wonder what wild thing (other than cutting fringe) Rose will do! I'm glad she's getting back in touch with her passion, applying to far away internships. But personally, is she going to take more risks? Things I'm thinking about waiting for the next chapter.

Good job! Can't wait to read more :)

-Lizzie

Author's Response: Thank you for the things you pointed out, I'll be working on them. :)
I also love Eliza, eventually she and Albus will have their own fanfiction...


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Review #2, by xTimexTurnerx The end of we, us and our.

16th January 2014:
Hey! It's Ms. Lizzie/ xTimexTurnerx here.

I love the way you've captivated Rose's emotions of the break up. It's painfully similar to my first major breakup (we dated for four years) and so I can say from experience the thoughts and feelings are spot on and she's very believable!

This line was the most heart-wrenching for me: "She snapped the door shut behind her. She was afraid that if she stayed to listen to him, afraid that if she let him beg, she would never leave." It's so darn true! Well done there.

I also enjoyed the interaction with Rose's parents. I think you've captured Ron's overprotectiveness well and framed it to now fit his daughter's well being versus Ginny's, which we saw in the books. I like that Rose has a close relationship with her parents.

I'm very excited to see where these new dreams lead her! Great start!

Also, you're very good at descriptions. I'm not. So I noticed it and loved it :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm glad I captured the emotions well, that was my main aim of these first couple of chapters. :)

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Review #3, by UnluckyStar57 The end of we, us and our.

17th December 2013:
Hi! Your story looked lonely, so I thought that I would stop by with a review. :)

I love how this story begins with the break up. Rose is obviously mad at Drew because he was a jerk, and the beginning left me wondering exactly what he did that made her so mad. I am so glad that I got to find out later on, when she explained it to Eliza. What a jerk!!!

The idea of Rose getting a haircut so that she can start anew is really good. It shows that she doesn't want to be tied to Drew any longer, and that's exactly what she should want! I wonder what will happen to the new Rose, who must now reinvent her dreams and rise from the ashes? I guess I'll just have to wait for the next chapter until I can find out!

Your grammar, spelling, syntax, and diction were all VERY nice. It made me happy, because I really love when that happens in fanfiction. :)

I look forward to seeing the next chapter of this story!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing and for helping me to get a better grip on my strengths and weaknesses. :) It makes such a difference to know that people enjoy my story enough to take a second to review!

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