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Review #1, by BookDinosaur Life, Love and Laughter

3rd January 2014:
Hello! I'm here for the Eighth of the Twelve Days of Reviewing Challenge. :)

I really enjoyed reading this little story, it was really sweet and touching.

I think the whole premise of this story, with Arthur Weasley going out at Christmas to help Muggles, was really believable, it just seems like somthing he would do. I think you really managed to characterise him perfectly, he seemed exactly like the Arthur we know and love from the HP series. I loved how fascinating he found the pepper spray, it was really sweet. :)

There are only two things I'm not sure about. For one, where did Arthur get Fred? I mean, it doesn't seem realistic that he would go to a Muggle pet shop and buy a dog just like that, and secondly, the family just let him into their house, without too much fuss and bother. I can tell you now, my mum would never ever do that. :P

I absolutely loved the ending scene, where Arthur was just spending time with his family, I think you did a really good job creating the holiday cheer there. I really loved James tricking Al into drinking the age potion, it was really funny and I had no problem believing that could happen. I also found it really sweet that Arthur created a 'magic pocket' for Lily, it was adorable. :)

All in all, I really enjoyed reading this story and I'm glad I had the chance to. Congrats on getting an entry in for the Writers' Duel and good luck!

Author's Response: Fred was a stray that he picked up and transfigured to look like Marvel. (Santa reached into his sack, pausing just past the opening to take hold of his son's wand and cast a quick transfiguration spell on the stray dog he had found an hour before. )

I have in my mind Arthur being very careful about what he picks up and what he doesn't, with that many kids and grand kids, and there are kind strays out there. Hagrid may not be so careful, but I think Arthur would.

As for how he got in the house, I think it's a combination of the frayed emotions of the woman and the overall trustworthiness of Arthur. It's also the magic of Christmas.

Thanks for the kind words!


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Review #2, by momotwins Life, Love and Laughter

27th December 2013:
I totally cracked up at James making Albus drink the aging potion and then Albus sulking. Good times.

So this was super adorable and I really enjoyed it. I love an Arthur-centric story. You did well with him, and it was nice to see Kingsley make a cameo too. Perfect Weasley Christmas! The little Muggle or possibly future witch girl was cute too, and so sad, but the story still managed to be light-hearted. Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks!! I hold out hope for the little girl. I was a bone marrow donor once, it does work. Between that and a little secret help from St Mungo's, and Christmas blessings will continue!!!

Thanks for your kind words.


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Review #3, by DracoFerret11 Life, Love and Laughter

22nd December 2013:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums! I decided to read and review all of the Writer's Duel entries! :D So, let's go over things:

Plot: This was such a sweet story! I really loved it. The idea of Arthur doing good deeds for Muggles is so believable. I thought it was a bit odd that he just assumed a stray dog wouldn't be vicious...and that the family let this random stranger into their house, but other than that, it was really cute.

Characterization: I think you hit Arthur's character spot-on. It was really cute for him to be doing good deeds for Muggles and working to preserve Fred's memory. And I loved seeing him amidst his ever-growing family. So cute. :)

Descriptions: I think you did a good job describing the scenes throughout the story, though some of the characters didn't get many details about them. Just remember to emphasize how things look, sound, smell, feel, etc., and it will really bring the story to life. :)

Emotions: I was really sad to realize that Polly had leukemia, and I don't know how I felt about the fact that wizards can cure that and haven't done so in the past...it made me uncomfortable. Good job creating the holiday cheer, though. :) Really cute.

Overall, this was lovely. Good job and good luck in the Duel!

--Emily

Author's Response: Thanks for stopping by!!! I really appreciate the thoughtful review. It's this kind of critique that gives me things to think about and helps me become a better writer.

I had thought of the dog issue in passing, one of the web pages I follow showed a rescue at a puppy mill, and a dog that was just as friendly as can be right off the start. Kind of like Harry- takes all kinds of abuse but he never loses his heart. I think Arthur's personality would be very careful with what kind of dog he put with a young child (unlike oh... say Hagrid...) so I guess I just relied on that. As for Arthur charming his way into the house, yeah. Good point. Write it off to Christmas magic? Sure. We'll go with that. ;-)

I could have done more with smells etcetera, especially once back home at the Burrow, where it is likely to smell of Molly's cooking. I could have done that easily enough with the few hundred words I had left.

Regarding the emotions, I'm sorry to make you sad! My intent was to communicate a desire to help and a willingness skirt the international statute of secrecy to help out. I'm sorry it didn't come out that way.

Thanks for the kind words and the critique. I really appreciate you taking your time and giving me things to think about!

Have a great holiday.


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Review #4, by HPForevermore Life, Love and Laughter

18th December 2013:
LOVED this! Excellent work!

Author's Response: Thank you!! It was a fun challenge.

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