Reading Reviews for A Home for the Holidays
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Review #1, by monstrosity A Potter Family Christmas

1st March 2014:

I'm always a big fan of the Christmas themed stories and despite the fact that it is now February, I couldn't help click on this one to review.

It's rare that stories focus on the insecurities of Sirius Black. I'm so used to reading about how brave, popular, funny, handsome or mischievous he is that to see you start on the note of how nervous he is to spend the holidays at James' house was a very pleasant surprise. It's very understandable that Sirius would have second thoughts about how people would treat him.

Sirius actually reminded me of Harry in this story. Harry was as baffled by the warmth and closeness of the Weasleys when he visited the Burrow. It was such a foreign concept to him having been raised by the Dursleys for a majority of his life. Getting Christmas presents from them made Harry react in a similar way to Sirius in this story. Hence, I found it easy to draw parallels between the two.

The imagery and description in this story was stunning, especially when you describe the Christmas decorations in the Potter house. It really made the scene come alive. The dancing snowman really made me laugh and I liked how you described the boys' childhood through the baubles on the tree.

I loved how the emotional bits like the ending are intermixed with references to past pranks. It sort of prevents the situation from dissolving into an emotional mush while also making sure that the reader understands why Sirius felt so uncomfortable.

The Muggle Sweater Party is such a cool idea! I should really put that into practice sometime. It really showed how Dorea Black had let go of her past ideals and embraced a life of equality among all wizards irrespective of their blood status. It was great to see that she had invited other members of the Black family who shared her views on blood purity.

I think the best bit for me was the sentence about how Regulus, Andromeda and Alphard had managed to send him gifts in the nick of time. However hard Sirius had it in his own home, he still had people from his past who cared about him. He was more loved than he thought.

This was a really heartwarming story that I enjoyed reading. As someone who isn't all that familiar with christmas customs in England and America, I really enjoyed how much holiday spirit there was in this story!

Author's Response: Aww thank you sooo much!! I am so glad you liked it!! What an awesome review!

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Review #2, by TheGirlOnFire A Potter Family Christmas

1st March 2014:

So this is for the blackout bingo :).

I really enjoyed reading this story. I've often found myself wondering what it was like for Sirius to move in with the Potters. I like the way you've written this. I think you've captured the way Sirius would act in such situations perfectly.


Author's Response: Aww thanks! I'm so glad you enjoyed this! Thanks for the review!

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Review #3, by daliha A Potter Family Christmas

5th January 2014:
Awww what a beautiful and heartwarming tale of the holidays! Really I didn't expect to have my Christmas spirit renewed so quickly, oh and I have to say I love how you included the Muggle Sweater contest :)

I look forward to reading more of your work :)

Author's Response: Aww thanks so much!! I am very glad that you liked it!

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Review #4, by BookDinosaur A Potter Family Christmas

3rd January 2014:
Hello! I'm here for the Eighth of the Twelve Days of Reviewing Challenge. :)

I really enjoyed reading this, I think you did a great job capturing the Christmas spirit in this oneshot.

Ah, you honestly made me feel so sorry for Sirius here! How he's never really experienced a proper Christmas makes me sad, Christmas is quite a big thing for me and my family haha. He was so adorable when he was worried about not fitting in or not being accepted, I couldn't help but want to hug him here. And I'm so glad that the Potters made them feel so welcome!

I really loved reading about everyone in Godric's Hollow, they were so warm and welcoming and I felt so good for Sirius when his fear slowly slipped away. And I'm so glad that Andromeda and his Uncle Alphard sent him gifts, it would help him feel at least a bit of that family love that Sirius really does deserve.

The Muggle Sweater tradition sounds so fun! How on earth did you think of the winning sweater idea?!

And ah, that last scene was so sweet! I'm so glad that the Potters were so warm and welcoming and I think Sirius would finally be put at ease after that. I really liked hearing about a few of their exploits in first year, how on earth did they get up to all that mischief?

All in all, I really enjoyed reading this fun little oneshot and I'm glad I had the chance to! Congrats on getting an entry into the Writers' Duel, and good luck!

Author's Response: Awww thank you so much! I loved writing this piece. I have always wanted to delve more into the relationship between James & Sirius and one-shots like this give me the perfect opportunity. I'm so glad you like this!

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Review #5, by momotwins A Potter Family Christmas

25th December 2013:
Poor Sirius, he's so awkward and he doesn't know how to be part of a family for a holiday. Aww wee lamb. And James's dad helped him learn to Apparate. Oh this makes me so sad and happy for him at the same time - sad that he's never had parents who love him and happy that he found the Potters, you know? I loved James in this too, he's so adorably childlike and enthusiastic. It's just perfect.

I like your writing style - you do description well, and your characterization and dialogue are very natural. Great job, I liked this story a lot :)

Author's Response: Thank you!! I loved writing this piece. I really am interested in James and Sirius's interactions and plan to do some more just because I have this image in my head of what things were like between them. Thanks again for the awesome review!

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Review #6, by Your Secret Santa A Potter Family Christmas

25th December 2013:
So much preciousness! It was so wonderful to see Sirius get a proper Christmas. Poor thing. I love how you characterized the Potters as so warm and bubbly--it really fit them well, and makes sense with James’ character. Unsurprising that he’d be so confident after being surrounded by that kind of love the entire time.

The “Muggle Christmas Sweater” bit was a wonderful idea, and I laughed aloud at your depiction of Frank Longbottom’s sweater--how on earth did you come up with that?! Bahaha.

My favorite part was how you imagined a wizarding Christmas, especially all the decorations. Of course the magic light show and the blooming Christmas roses, and who wouldn’t love a dancing snowman? But by far my favorite was the idea of the orbs filled with happy memories. That was just so lovely and fit the warmth of the gathering you’d created so well. All in all, it was just a really cute Christmas story that gave me the warm fuzzies!

Merry Christmas!

P.S. Sorry I’m running a bit behind, but I’m planning to write you more reviews and such throughout the day, so when you check back, hopefully you’ll see several Christmas surprises!

Author's Response: Aww thank you so much! This was my first attempt at writing a fluff story so I'm glad it was received so well!!

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Review #7, by DracoFerret11 A Potter Family Christmas

20th December 2013:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums! I decided to read and review all of the Writer's Duel entries! :D So, let's go over things:

Grammar/Spelling: I don't know if you did this on purpose, but is James's dad's name supposed to be "Charles" or "Charlus" (as you wrote it)?

Plot Errors: There was a really minor canon-to-fic error where you mention that Andromeda looks just like her SISTERS, Bellatrix and Narcissa. But Andromeda doesn't look like Narcissa. Narcissa is the only one who actually looks different (being blonde and such), but Bella and Andromeda do look alike. ;)

Plot: This was a really charming story! I loved the idea of seeing Sirius at the Potters'. We don't get many instances of Marauders stories that aren't set with them doing mischief at Hogwarts, so this was a nice divergence from that trope. I really enjoyed the plot and the idea of the sweater party, something that Sirius could participate in that was so different than his own experiences, and could forge him a new idea of the holidays.

Characterization: I think you wrote Sirius and James perfectly. It was a great addition to bring Sirius's uncertainty into the story. His worry and nervousness really made him very realistic. And James not really getting it, trying to just get him in on the fun--great! Mr. and Mrs. Potter fell a little flat for me, though. They were a bit too generic. The scene where Mrs. Potter cries and tells Sirius that he's a member of the family was a good SCENE, but her characterization came off as awkward and misplaced for some reason. So if you were to edit this, I think it would be a good idea to find some sort of realism in the parents that you did so well in the two boys.

Descriptions: I really liked the details about how the house looked! I felt like I was there. And I loved the sweater descriptions--so funny! It was sad to think of the Longbottoms whose family would so soon be broken, but I liked that they were there. I can only imagine Augusta in an ugly Muggle sweater! Well done!

Interactions: I'm really glad you added Andromeda into this story. It makes a lot of sense that she would come--and she would probably be with Ted by this point, which would be cool! And it was nice to see the relationship between her and Sirius blossom again. That in and of itself would be a good story.

Overall, you did a really good job! Well done and good luck in the Duel!


Author's Response: Thanks for the read & review!!

Mr. Potter's name was actually not a typo. I did some research and found that it is possible that Harry's parents' names may have been Dorea (Black) & Charlus Potter.

As for their characterization...I kind of wanted James's parents to be fairly cookie-cutter and stereotypical to contrast Sirius's own parents. I wanted the readers to be able to see a version of their own parents in them. I also wanted to try to highlight the fact that Sirius finds them to be so incredible and perfect, despite what we all find to be relatively boring & drab. (If that makes any sense.)

I'm glad you enjoyed it, for the most part, and I really appreciate the feedback & review. I will definitely be going back to fix the Narcissa/Bellatrix/Andromeda thing when I can. :)


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