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Review #1, by DracoFerret11 He Kept Christmas Well

10th January 2014:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums! I decided to attempt to read and review all of the Writer's Duel entries! :D I actually read this a while ago, but I'm just getting to reviewing, sorry! So, let's go over things:

Plot: This was a really interesting take on the prompt! I totally understand that the word count limit didn't allow it, but I wish I had more of a back story about what happened to Harry and how no one ever found him or noticed him in Spain. He doesn't speak Spanish either so I wonder how he got around...I've been to Spain, and the people there definitely don't speak much English. I actually loved that when I was there, but I wonder how a non-Spanish speaker would feel in that country. Also, I wonder how Ginny's family let her fall away from them after such a difficult experience. I would think they would bring her closer to them. She must have been very persistent in pushing them out of her life...

Characterization: I think you wrote a broken-Ginny very well, but it really surprised me that she fell apart without Harry. I'm not a huge Ginny fan, but she always seemed so strong to me, and she had her kids to still look out for. Letting herself go is something that surprised me. Albus and the Weasleys were very good, and memory-loss-Harry was great. Very realistic as someone who doesn't remember his family. It was awkward in a good way.

Descriptions: I liked the details that you provided about the lack of decorations at Ginny's home and the atmosphere at the Burrow. Overall, you did well in this category! :)

Emotions: I really liked that I could feel how empty Ginny was feeling. She seemed very realistic in her handling of loss (even though I don't know if she, specifically, would react that way--I can see a wife acting that way about her husband). The reunion with Harry wasn't as dramatic for her as I thought it would be after not having seen him for so long.

Overall, well done! I'm glad I got to read this.

--Emily

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Review #2, by momotwins He Kept Christmas Well

27th December 2013:
Ah I'm so glad you gave this a happy ending. I was afraid at first he was going to be dead and I would have to throw things at you. Just kidding. Ginny/Harry is one of my favorite ships - I really like them together, and I think she's well suited to him. Ginny in the books is the only one to get through to Harry at his worst temper tantrums and despairs, so I like that you brought that to this story - she gets through to his broken memory. Ah love. I'd make an ASCII heart at you but it messes up the review box. I really enjoyed this story!

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Review #3, by teh tarik He Kept Christmas Well

21st December 2013:
Hello there! Congrats on getting in an entry for the Winter Writers' Duel! This is such a lovely bittersweet story. I love how you've portrayed the relationship between Ginny and Albus, how supportive her son is of her. I've always thought of Ginny as a rather strong and resilient character, so it was quite a shock to see her in such a vulnerable, defeated state, living in complete misery and hopelessness for eight whole years. But I guess this shows how much she loves Harry, how genuine her love is for him, perhaps to such an extent that she is almost crippled in his absence, unable to function properly. But she's not all weak and vulnerable; I definitely sensed a bit of the fiery old Ginny when she hisses at Albus, telling him that she isn't going to give up on Harry and stop the search.

I loved that anecdote with the eggs! It was funny and at the end, I'm glad that Harry remembers it, because it really is such a memorable scene, with a lovely touch of humour, which really made the ending so bittersweet and hopeful.

I think you wrote the Weasleys at the Burrow really well. Harry being there was a huge surprise to me. I wonder why Ginny's family didn't let her know right away...I suppose maybe it's because he just turned up? But then again, I wonder where her large supportive family have been during those eight desolate years for her. I'm guessing she would have pushed them away, told them to leave her alone, but still, I'm finding it hard picturing that any of the Weasleys would even have let her live in such a way for so long.

As I said earlier, the ending is absolutely lovely. Eggs! Harry remembers eggs! And that cute little egg anecdote, of course.

This is a fantastic entry to the Writers' Duel; I wish you best of luck in this. :)

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Review #4, by Lululuna He Kept Christmas Well

20th December 2013:
Hello! :) I loved this entry, it was so creative how you took on the fourth prompt. I've never read this kind of story before, where Harry loses his memories and how the effects might be on his family, but it was really interesting and tragic, especially happening when Harry has a family and of course his children. The characterization of Harry at the beginning was really interesting what with his love for muggle things and Christmas. I especially liked the logic for the latter as since he had such a horrible time growing up with the Dursleys it would make sense that he would love making Christmas special for his kids. The anecdote about the eggs really made me giggle!

For some reason it was almost more heartbreaking for me that Harry didn't recognize Ron than that he didn't recognize Ginny... I guess I'm just quite attached to their bromance. :P Another great detail was how you tied in the picture again at the end to help prompt Harry's memory, it was a great moment in keeping the parts of the story all tied in.

Poor Harry, he really reminded me of Lockhart post-Obliviation here, with his inappropriate laughing and silliness. It was quite tragic to see but I loved the little glimmer of hope and how Ginny thought she saw a sign of recognition which made the story end on a lighter note. Well done with this, and best of luck in the Duel! :D

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Review #5, by Manwe Valarian He Kept Christmas Well

19th December 2013:
Good story you wove together. I liked the ending and the recognition Harry had of the tree. Something like the smell of a dozen rotten eggs would stick with a person fro years and years.

Author's Response: Thanks! I thought the story came out decently considering how little time I actually put into it. Not sure if it will be a winner, though. I've read some of the other stories written for the challenge and there are a couple of really good ones done.

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