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Review #1, by UH60TI Tiny Tim, a Shaggy Kneazle Story

24th December 2013:
Very nice. I really liked how you placed the story in the "Almost Happily Ever After" universe.

Merry Christmas from the bottom of the world (literally).

Author's Response: Thank you!

It is some years ahead of where I am now. This was totally new, inspired by the challenge. There is a lot more written, but much of it has to be posted in chronological order or it would have spoilers or you wouldn't understand the background.

Meanwhile the next chapter is almost ready. Neither my beta nor I were happy with it. She says I am getting close, but I'm still not quite satisfied.

I'm thinking of making you have to stir some potions backwards, counter clockwise (or is it anti clockwise) instead of clockwise etc. south of the equator.

Jet


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Review #2, by Wildmoon Tiny Tim, a Shaggy Kneazle Story

21st December 2013:
You've got a lovely little story of redemption here, redemption on multiple levels.

Personally, I love the bit of "true love waits" that you have at the ending, it's refreshing to see.

Nice job!!!

Author's Response: Thank you!

I think even Harry is redeemed by turning what could be anger at Christmas around and making it a season for giving instead. In an un-posted chapter you will see how Harry decides that since he doesn't have any family to visit Christmas Eve, unlike his brothers-in-law, he is going to do something nice for his staff and work Christmas Eve.

Lilly is escaping from at least two generations of abuse, and Timothy three generations. And part of that escape for Lilly is not having sex until after she is married, being what is called in some circles a "born again virgin. I'm glad you liked it.

Jet


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Review #3, by Lululuna Tiny Tim, a Shaggy Kneazle Story

20th December 2013:
Hello! :) I really enjoyed this story and the allusion to A Christmas Carol with tiny Tim! Lilly was a great character and really dynamic in my opinion. I thought the reference to Harry's mum was an interesting parallel, and their family's involvement with the Potters and how the Potters helped Lilly get her life on track was really heartwarming. It's been so interesting seeing how people approach the fourth prompt for the Duel, and this was a really unique and creative approach, and though very heavy it also had an uplifting ending and moments.

The reunion between Lilly and Timothy was really sweet, and I loved hearing about the gifts Harry got for them and how they got involved with the Weasley family as well. I always imagined the Weasleys are being so welcoming and taking in people who don't have anyone else - like Harry when he was a child - so that seemed very in character. Harry mentioning how awful his Christmases were at the Dursleys was a great reference as well and fit in with his generosity and why he would want to help someone like Lilly. Nicely done, and good luck with the Duel! :)

Author's Response: Thank you!

The reference to Tiny Tim was pretty obvious, but I'm glad you got it and appreciated it.

There are some really awful characters in both the Potter books and my stories. I refuse to portray any of the Weasley family that way. They have their struggles, but I just have to see all of Arthur and Molly's children as fundamentally good. I have seen families that accept outsiders and families that make even some of their own outsiders. I have always admired the accepting families. We have a sort of foster granddaughter that came into the family at almost 18. She is still our granddaughter.

I have read some of the other stories. This may be the heaviest, but the prompt was pretty heavy, and I just didn't feel like making light of it. With something this tragic you do want a happy ending. I'm glad you liked it.

Jet


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Review #4, by FriendofMolly Tiny Tim, a Shaggy Kneazle Story

16th December 2013:
Jet,
Before I read the post, I checked your first reviewer. Color my face red. I totally missed the misspell. I know you wanted to differentiate between Tim's Mum Lilly and Harry's Mum. Your reviewer, "an elf" was so right, Harry's Mums name was spelled with only one l. Ooops! Otherwise, I am still enthralled with this story. I do hope "an elf" checks out your other stories. I think you will have another loyal reader.
Onward,
FoM

Author's Response: If I win a contest with this one I'm going to have to write more little stories with happy endings. I've enjoyed the writing. Thanks, Jet

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Review #5, by an elf Tiny Tim, a Shaggy Kneazle Story

15th December 2013:
just stopping by to say that it's Lily, not Lilly. And that all Writer Duel entries have to be 15+ or less ;)

Other than that, wow. This was good. I loved everything, a great story.

Author's Response: I've changed it to Lily for Harry's mum, but left it as Lilly for Lilly Hermione Evans. I will post the change after the contest closes. And I've changed the rating and changed the end of the story. I hope you like the new ending as well as the old one. Thank you so much for the review.

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