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Review #1, by Flying mandarin i. beginnings

2nd April 2014:
I really like your style! This was breathtaking. Great one shot/shortstory and I'm intrigued as to whom Margaret would grow up to be!

Going to read your other work now!
-Louise

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I appreciate the review very much. :)

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Review #2, by MissesWeasley123 i. beginnings

6th January 2014:
Hello, I'm here for day 11 of the 12 Days of Reviewing from the forums!

I really loved this and am so glad someone out there wrote it. It was brilliant to be honest. I always find it really weird when people are writing about witches and wizards in America, it just seams so blegh and unreal to me, so I try to avoid it. You wrote this beautifully.

Your descriptions are great. The intro was superb, and filled with such beautiful imagery. You really keep in mind all the details, which I applaud you on.

Margaret's a really good character. It's so unique for you to be talking about witch burnings, so awesome. When she sees her family dead, that was absolutely heartbreaking.

I'm actually sad that this is a one shot, because how cool would it e if you continued this? It would be pretty awesome, I think. I'd definitely read it.

You're a really good writer. I didn't spot any typos at all, and your story flows naturally. So yes, you have excellent story telling skills.

Congrats on writing such a brilliant story! You did a great job with it, I really enjoyed getting to know Margaret.

Happy New Year!

Author's Response: *squeals* Thank you for this lovely review! I'm happy you didn't notice any typos, because I barely edited this one-shot. I suppose I just got lucky in having few grammar mistakes! I'm not usually that way.

I've been thinking about making this into a short story or novella, but I have *so* many ideas already that I need to work on, but somewhere along the line I could squeeze this in.

Again, thank you for the review! :)


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Review #3, by Lululuna i. beginnings

30th December 2013:
Hello! :) I'm here from Day 4 of the 12 Days of Reviewing Challenge on the forums!

Ah, I just loved this so much. I've never read a story which focused on American witches but this was a really fascinating look into that world. I think you did an amazing job of capturing the feel of colonial America. The lack of extensive historical details didn't really matter since the story was told from Margaret's point of view and she had no idea what was going on from her childlike perspective, and that increased the mystery and the horror of the story as well as the very tense and frightening tone.

I really loved how you began the story with the paragraph to set the idealistic and peaceful scene of the family home, and when that was destroyed it contrasted even more strongly with the horrific ruin of the family and the house. The line "darling little Margaret Brockwell" was wonderful in my opinion as it showed how simple and lovely her life was before that night, and it really captured the moment for me. When Margaret asks her nurse about the witch who was burned that was a great hint at the tensions in the town as well before all chaos breaks loose.

The moment where she discovers her family hanging was so sad and very vivid, and I can't even imagine how awful that would be for a little girl like Margaret. I'm very curious about whether the witch who killed her family (at least I thin that's what happened) was a good character who wanted to help Margaret or whether the witches here are a sort of greater-good minded group who are willing to do horrible things.

This was a wonderful story, and I hope you do decide to add to it someday as I would love to find out what happens in those twenty years and more about the Salems Witches Institute! Margaret is a lovely character and your writing is brilliant - I'd love to see more of it! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! The more I think about it, the more I'd like to return to the idea of it being longer. I'm not sure I have time for it now, but surely in the future I could handle a short story or novella based off this. Your review was very much appreciated! And have fun in the challenge. :)

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