Reading Reviews for Care for Magical Humans
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Review #1, by SeverusLove Life Itself

10th July 2014:

Wow. That was quite the story. I feel like I've gone through a whole lifetime in one chapter.

The tone made it flow incredibly well. At first the pacing was odd and I recognised you were trying to tell the story in flashes, brief moments that tried to sum up the situation in years. I thought that maybe you would try to cram too much information in a really short chapter but as I went along for the ride, I realised that your length was actually all right - not as short as I'd expected. The plot progressed smoothly.

You were right in the beginning when you warned us not to be surprised by the awkward writing, but in this I managed to find that the sentence structure and grammar characterised your Rolf perfectly, which I'm sure is what you intended for. The way he made lists, the way he saw the world, the way he saw Luna. Kudos to research and creativity about the Fwoopers and the Fire Crabs. I found the comparison with the Fwoopers accurate but although on the other hand, I didn't understand the comparison with the Fire Crabs, the cheesiness made me smile nonetheless.

I'm the type who likes to have characterisations as close to canon as possible, but so little is known about the Scamander family so I was more accepting of any new creativity you could insert there. The only major canon character you had to work with, you nailed really well! I especially loved Rolf and Luna's first conversation. The way he was so nervous and she was so calm; I could almost see their differences click together into an understanding.

I found the whole thing with Rolf's father especially sad. I'm still bitter about the fact there's really no mention of any meetings anymore after that. I mean...he's his father. I would have liked to at least see him in Rolf's wedding. :'( But woe is me, not everything has a happy ending.

The twist about Newt leaving for travel because he had a squib son was quite the unexpected twist, I like that. But he almost seemed somewhat distant towards his son, though it isn't something completely unexpected. I did wonder about where Xenophilius was in the story and his reaction to all that happened, but he didn't seem too vital to give too much space to. :'D

There were some spelling typos I managed to spot and the format was a bit off at times with two spaces in between paragraphs instead of three, but that might be just my nitpicks talking.

This sentence, for example, -- "She held up my notebook opened to the page where my most recent list ("Luna's Most Desirable Qualities"-my lists had been becoming more subjective and less based on fact)." -- felt incomplete to me. ['where my most recent list' what?]

These sentences - "One species I was utterly unsure of how to interact with was fellow wizards my own age." and "The words on the page look like a formal report of observation about a human female. How would I explain the sound of her laugh?" had to be the most vivid for me. Another favourite is the "And all the reading and biological diagrams fluttered into my mind briefly before (their) was no room for anything other than this moment, and Luna and feeling." part.

By the end, as soon as I read the opening lines of Rolf's speech, I was thinking, 'Wait a minute, is this what I think it is? Please don't tell me this is what I think it is.' and then went on with 'No, no, no, no.' and then finished with a really big scowl in my face. Which you should take an accomplishment, really. The ending was tragic and sad and beautiful and kudos all around!

I had so much fun reading this, it was quite the journey. Thank you.

Best Regards,
- House Cup 2014 Review -
Go Gryffies!

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Review #2, by Karou_Marauder Life Itself

19th April 2014:
jhdbvhdsbvhjbdshvj < that is how I feel right now. This is just so perfect and amazing and heart-breaking and can someone get me a thesaurus because I can't think of anymore adjectives to sum up this masterpiece.

You have converted me to shipping Rolf/Luna (Runa? Lolf?).

Way to rip my heart out right at the end there. I nearly cried. This is amazing.

*adds to favourites*

Thank you for writing this one-shot.


Author's Response: Ah I cried writing it!!! Thank you so much for your kind and positive feedback! I'm so glad you liked it!

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Review #3, by Some That Likes This Life Itself

16th December 2013:
Wow. That was amazing. You wrote it perfectly and it was beautiful. It's a wonderful story of love. Fantastic use of the quote also. I love it .

Author's Response: I'm so glad! Thank you so much for reading!

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Review #4, by MrsKatieGrint Life Itself

10th December 2013:
Hey there, KatieRoo from the forums here with your challenge review!(:

OH GOODNESS WAY TO RIP MY HEART OUT THERE AT THE END!! Oh geez this was seriously beautiful. Way way better than the original quote.

Honest to goodness, I have never read a Rolf/Luna anything, and if they're all pretty like yours, consider me a major shipper now. I simply adore that this story was set in the lifespan of Rolf. He was a very pleasant character, and very admirable. I absolutely adore the characterization you have of Rolf, it was so heartbreaking to have his own father make him make a super important choice in his life, like you said, to be the person he wanted, or to be the person her was. Simply heartbreaking that his father couldn't understand that. The insight there just fit so perfectly with Rolf's personality from there on out, because if his father couldn't love him, who could?
I am so glad though that Newt took him under his wing, and let Rolf become the person he was suppose to be.(:

Dear Luna, I'm so so impressed/awed/amazed at how WONDERFULLY you made her. I have so much respect for Luna, and I'm so glad you did the poor girl justice in your writing. She was a beautiful character here in your story, just stunning. And I love that you didn't rush the two's love. The awkward dialogue between the two is so cute and wonderful, and was just plain adorable. But it was so cute how they decided to go on adventures together! I seriously don't think the two could of had a date any other way, because who doesn't love looking for crazy/nonexistent creature together?:P Totally adorable.

Again, the scene where they send the twins off to Hogwarts, you just captured that moment perfectly. Like, I don't think anyone could have written that scene better, like not even JK R. Just so so beautiful, and heartwarming. Like its freezing in my apartment at the moment, and I'm still warm because my heart was so happy at that scene. I have an incredibly happy warm heart right now.:P

AGH! Okay, just rip out my warm fuzzy heart now. I'm so sad that Luna died before Rolf. All couples should just die happy together. Lol unrealistic, but moving on. I think that yet again, everything Rolf spoke was perfect for Luna. It was just a perfect ending scene, but beautifully, beautifully written. Just gah. I keep saying the same things over again, I just can't effectively type what I want to say!

Wow, I'm seriously so happy with this one-shot, and I hope you're beaming too. I literally cannot type you high enough praise because I do not have the word to say how much I ADORED this one-shot!(:

I thank you so much for participating in my challenge, and doing such an incredible job, and good luck to you!(:


Author's Response: Um, seriously your review just made my life.

I've never read a Luna/Rolf either! So now that I'm so attached I'll have to go check out the ship waters!

I've been so nervous with this posted with no feedback because writing Luna, my favorite canon character, for the first time was ABSOLUTELY TERRIFYING.

I'm glad you like Rolf! It was hard to get into his head and I made the writing a bit more formal and choppy than my typical style really trying to emulate him (and by 'him' I mean the 'him' I made up in my head). I wanted the transformation for him to be a bit circular--love dad, love no one, love Luna, but for the second love to show him that it doesn't mean giving up who you are. It means embracing them. Sorry, that's the English major in me analyzing my own work :) I've had to write a lot of essays this week for finals.

I know, it was way sad. I actually cried writing it. Which, is huge, because I NEVER cry during fics/movies/books. I really connected with them. Thank you SO MUCH for hosting this challenge so I got a chance to think of this. It was an eye-opening experience.

Thanks for your review!!!

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