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Review #1, by newgenerationlover Unfaithful

23rd April 2014:
Wow, Dom sure went crazy here.

Just wanted to say that this is impeccably written. Dom's voice is incredible. She is obviously off her rocker, but in a cool and collected way that makes her much more scary. In the last scene I could just imagine it in my head and the flint of craziness that flashed across Dom's eyes and really alerted William that he was in danger. You really made this story come to life and the whole thing just flowed together, never seeming forced. Great job with this!

xoxo from the Review Tag 3.0

Author's Response: Yeah, everyone seems to be of the opinion that Dom just went nuts in this story.

I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed it! I myself have always found that the quiet ones are the ones who can cause the most damage because they're in control of themselves and all of their movements. I'm very happy to hear that it flowed really well, I was worried that a few scenes here and there might have been a little forced and wouldn't work as well but it's great to hear that that's not the case.

Thank you so much for your lovely review!


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Review #2, by LavenderBlue Unfaithful

21st April 2014:
Reporting for duty from Review Tag! :]

Okay, not going to lie: I was scrolling through potential stories to review, and the moment my eyes caught SYLVIA PLATH CHALLENGE, I knew this was the story for me.

DOMINIQUE WEASLEY: MANEATING REVENGE MACHINE. You had me intrigued from the start, because of all the fics I've read on Dominique Weasley, I've never seen her characterized in this way. The femme fatale characterization is made even more potent by the fact that your storyline reads like a film noir: all business, but with shady undertones.

I especially love the tension you create within Dominique's identity as a famous Weasley. On the one hand, she recognizable enough for a coffee server to know who she is, but on the other hand, she's completely misunderstood by the press and therefore might as well possess no notoriety whatsoever. It's a fascinating balance, especially when considered in contrast to some of the more blatantly famous Next Gens, like the Trio's kids.

Dominique and Amelia joining forces? Classic. I'm a sucker for gurrrl power, and this read like a page straight out of the Thelma and Louise playbook.

This is a concise, compelling one-shot. You've got motivation, intrigue, and a killer (haha, see what I did there?) ending. Bravo!

Ickle typo I caught: "Of yes, he would be very sorry" --> "Oh yes, he would..."

This was a wickedly fun one-shot, and I'm so glad that I got the chance to read! Great work. :]

Author's Response: There do seem to be a lot of Sylvia Path fans on this site, but I'm glad that this caught your eye!

I'm very happy to hear that this Dominique is different from all of the other Dom stories that you've read. I kind of had that idea in mind when I made her a psychopath so it's good to see that that aspect came through. You have no idea how much I giggled when I read that this read like a film noir, I feel even more pleased with this story now.

I didn't really picture Dom as the famous Weasley either because she's not the child of the Golden Trio, she's related to them, sure, but she's not actually as important as them to warrant constant attention. Dom obviously used this to her advantage.

I felt like we needed some girl power going on here in the midst of all of these romance novels that I keep reading.

That was a great pun my friend, I applaud you on it! Thanks for pointing out the typo and thanks for reviewing!


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Review #3, by bellatrixlestrange123 Unfaithful

10th February 2014:
Oh wow, what a brilliant plot!

I've never really read a story like this before but it was great to feel that strong sisterhood vibe from Dom! haha,

I think that you did a brilliant job writing this; you got across Dom's thoughts and views and justified them perfectly. Hey, who wouldn't want to do that to a cheating cheater :p

And also, poor Amelia! your emotive side of writing is really good because I felt so sorry for her from the start!

All I can say Is I have no CC on this because it is so well written!

Keep up the great work!

Bella :)

Author's Response: Thank you, I thought it was a pretty good idea when I wrote the one-shot as well!

I'm glad that you liked the sisterhood vibe from Dom. I feel like Dom did what I personally think most girls do in general, we band together to take down a common enemy if we have one.

As someone who doesn't deal with emotions all that well, to hear for someone that I write emotion well is a huge thing for me and I'm very happy to hear that I really made you feel something for Amelia considering there isn't a lot to know about her in the one-shot.

I'm so happy to hear that you enjoyed it and thank you so much for your lovely review!


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Review #4, by patronus_charm Unfaithful

19th January 2014:
Hi Grace! Here with review number four :)

This was such a great one-shot. I honestly didn’t know what to expect when I clicked on it but I really loved it! Dominique’s characterisation was really fantastic and I loved how cunning and full of vengeance she was. I rarely ever get to see characters like that so reading her here was a really nice surprise. I have seen her as a bit of prankster before in stories but what she was like here with each step she played being full of tactics and thought was really great. I guess the best word for her was conniving but in a really good way.

The plot of this story was really fantastic too. William was such a vile man and I could tell he was one of those people who just wanted more and more so he went to great lengths to get it. I really love how Dom just sussed him out straight away and began plotting because it was such fun to read. Then the way she got Amelia to join their plan too was really fun. I felt a little sorry for her when she realised that her ‘boyfriend’ had just been lying all along but it was worth it for the end result.

I thought the way you fitted the quote around what happened to William in the end was really great and I have to admit I do feel a little worried for him now because they were very menacing. The atmosphere at the end was really great too with the shock of William contrasting with the confidence of the girls. Even if the wearing of the black was a little cliché it fitted with the mood completely and was so much fun!

I noticed a tiny typo here ‘I’ll be lat e at the office again’ but other than that it was a really great one-shot and an enjoyable read. :)

Author's Response: I'm quite proud of this one-shot to be perfectly honest. It was one of my first attempts at doing something dark that didn't include a relative dying. I think Dominique has the mind of a murderer to be honest, because just the way that she thought everything out seemed planned so that nobody would ever figure out that she was responsible for anything.

I was originally only going to have Dom do the entire plan in this but then I thought that it would probably be better if she recruited someone to commit the crime with her. Plus, if she can plan things with such accuracy, she;s got to be good at persuading people in doing what she wants.

Thanks for noticing the typo, I'll get to fixing it as soon as possible! Thank you so much for your review!


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Review #5, by SilentConfession Unfaithful

31st December 2013:
This is such an interesting story. Something I wouldn't have clicked on without the TGS review swap and I'm really pleased we were able to exchange, this is a really nicely written tale.

I love how you've characterized Dominique. I've seen her with similar traits to how you've done her, but you've taken her a lot further than most. I really like how you've done that and made her truly a hate able character. She's really well written, in how we see next to no remorse for her actions. She seems to be simply going through the motions of her rituals and it has no effect. She's perfected her craft to this point that it's second nature. It almost seems like she seeks these men out rather than all the male species being crap and trying to take advantage of her. I found myself not believing her when she was going on about the Weasley fame. Although I think there would be a certain type of notoriety with the name, it seemed to be warped by her current perception. I felt like that bit was her own delusions and incapability to see reality clearly. So she's come up with her own motivations to live like she does. It gives her a sort of 'go' on the whole they deserve this because they use my family name and want to abuse me. So i thought you wrote all that really well.

The tone of the story was also really well done too. It fit Dominique perfectly! I love stories which the tone of the writing fits the characterization. It seemed a bit detached and cold which is exactly like your main character. It really helped get inside Dominique's mind and feel what she's feeling. You've also really subtly fitted in bits of her backstory that gives us a glimpse of the steps that have led her up to this point, but there are still loads of questions in my head about that. Which I really like to see in a story as it makes me feel like the story is fully and more complete (if that makes any sense, it just has the sense that there is more to it, that someone else could come into this story and write their own interpretations of it).

I also really like how you've added Amelia into the game. It really gives the story a dark turn as Dominique brings down another woman who could have just been heartbroken, but moved on. Now, however, she's going down a tunnel that will make her more and more withdrawn like Dom.

Really lovely job here. Really happy wIw as able to read this.

Author's Response: Hello there, I've finally gotten around to answering this review fourteen days after you left it.

It has been mentioned that I've taken her a lot further than most people have when it comes to writing her personality. I was quite proud of the fact that I made Dom downright psychopathic. It does seem like she's seeking these men out, after doing this so many times it's like she ends up finding these type of men without really realising that she's doing it.

I've been working on making the tone fit the story because it's been pointed out to me that it's something that I need to work on. I'm glad that you like the little pieces of backstory. When I read through it the first time it seemed to me like Dom was doing all of this just because she could, she was going to such extremes just because she knew she could get away with it and that didn't seem like a good enough reason to me for her to do something like harm William. People more often than not have reasons for doing things and something had to have happened in her past in order to set her on the road to being the person that she currently is.

Thank you so much for this absolutely lovely review!


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Review #6, by milominderbinder Unfaithful

14th December 2013:
Hiya! I've come to review your challenge entry :) Sorry it's taken me so long to get around to it, haha.

Well, I really liked this. I feel like you really made perfect use of the quote's tone and meaning, which is really what the challenge was all about!

Dominique is definitely a force to be reckoned with! I could almost taste her fury here, and I loved how you characterised her. She's searing and dangerous and all edge - she was kind of thrilling to read. While Dom's often characterised a little like this in fic, people rarely take it to the extremes you have here, having her be almost twisted but in a thrilling way - I really enjoyed reading this version of her because it was really fresh. At the same time, you didn't make her totally unrelatable - her hurt at being cheated on, even if she masks it and tries to play it cool, shows through and makes her relatable and also makes me really feel bad for her!

I liked Amelia a lot, too, which is good because OCs can be a bit hit and miss in stories like this, but you did it well here. She was a good supporting character and I liked the idea of her and Dom banding up to take this guy down!

The plot was great and, though probably not what I would have imagined myself for this quote, it fit in perfectly. It was intense to read and it kept my attention the whole way through! This is one of my favourite quotes from any of Sylvia Plath's work so I very much enjoyed reading this story based around it!

And my favourite line was:

"Are you scared, sweetie?"

It's so sinister because it plays on the cutesy nickname so it makes it sound almost like someone's talking to a child! It really sent shivers down my spine and was a fantastic point to end this on.

Overall, well done, this was a good read and great for this quote! The challenge results will be up soon - probably in the next few days as the deadline is tomorrow and I hope to get the results out nice and fast! - so keep an eye out on the forums, and good luck!

~Maia

Author's Response: Sorry that it's taken me so long to respond to this review! I've been lazy and busy and there's really no excuse but either way, I'm answering it right now.

I thought I was taking it to a bit of an extreme there with her but it was a lot of fun and besides, she's Dominique Weasley, everyone adores her, why wouldn't she get away with something like this. I'm also glad that you saw the hurt that was shining through her. I wanted to show that as cold as Dominique played it, she was still hurt by what had happened to her.

I thought that I'd brought Amelia in a bit abruptly and then I was even more worried when I realised that I hadn't even mentioned her name but it's good to hear that I have nothing to worry about!

I had a little bit of trouble coming up with a story for the quote that you gave me but finally this came to mind so I was quite happy with the result and I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

I'm so glad that you liked that last line, I like that last line as well. I'm pretty sure I almost started cackling when I wrote it.

But anyway, thank you for the review!


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Review #7, by monstrosity Unfaithful

8th December 2013:
Hello! Saw that you wanted feedback :)

It certainly is true that hell hath no fury like Dominique scorned. I'm shuddering at the thought of what she plans to do to William, not that he doesn't deserve it.

Dominique is a very strong female character. That being said, you've shown some chinks in her armor that make her more relatable. The fact that she seems so cool and calm at the thought of William cheating on her shows how used to the situation she is. I actually pity her for that. It seemed pretty impossible that someone as beautiful as she is could get cheated on. What hope does that give the rest of us who don't have an ounce of Veela blood in her veins? ;)

I suppose the Veela blood had something to do with the manner in which she planned to exact her revenge on William. That last line sure was a chiller. You built up the suspense and ended on that high note. It really kept me engrossed for the entire length of the story.

As I mentioned earlier, I enjoyed seeing the chinks in Dominique's armor. It goes to remind the readers that she still is human. She still is young and having been cheated on several times cannot have been easy on her. She has every right to be furious and I'm amazed at how well she manages to contain that fury.

Amelia is a great supporting character. There is nothing I like more than reading stories with girl power. What I do find a bit hard to believe that Dominique had never felt fear before. I was also a bit curious to know why she suddenly felt fear when Amelia had this scary expression. Surely Dom must be used to women scorned.

Anyway, it was a wonderfully written story with just the right amount of mystery and description to get me hooked. Your writing style is wonderful and the story was a pleasure to read :)

Author's Response: Hey there, I actually read this a while ago so sorry for the fact that it took me this long to get to it.

I was trying to decide what she would to William to get back at him but I thought death was a bit of a drastic measure but at the same time I wanted to make her sinister. The obvious answer was just leaving it up for everyone else to decide with their imagination.

I was hoping that the chinks would show a little bit and make her more human without becoming the main focus of the story. That being said, just because Dominique was extremely attractive doesn't mean that she was a nice person (as you could see from the story). It takes a lot more than looks to keep someone interested in you.

I am so very proud of that last line in the story, it was my favourite part of the entire thing and I'm glad that it gave you shivers!

I think that if Dom didn't have control over her anger then she would've made some very big mistakes in all of her plans. I wasn't sure about Amelia, I wanted to bring her in but I felt like maybe it was too sudden and I wasn't completely certain.

I took into consideration what you said about the bit with Dom and fear and decided that you were right. That part did seem a little silly so thank you for pointing it out to me! I went and took it out when I read this review the first time.

Thanks for taking the time to give me feedback, it was really appreciated!


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