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Review #1, by budabobo Chapter 3

21st March 2014:
Love the story so far, have read it at least 3 times this month. Can't wait for more.

Author's Response: Thank you so so much for stopping by and leaving a review! And thanks so much for your amazing praises; I honestly don't think I could possibly express how much this made me smile! I am so so glad you enjoy this story so much! Chapter 4 is all written and will be up once it's finished being beta'd! So it should be posted soon :D


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Review #2, by ohmymerlin Chapter 1

6th March 2014:
Hi there, I'm here from my review thread! I'm SO SORRY about the massive delay for this review! I didn't mean to let it go so long but...

Anyway, I'm here now and hopefully that counts for something!

So far, the plotline seems interesting enough! You wrote Ginny's emotions so spectacularly and they were so true and real! You really nailed it! I even got a bit teary!

You also asked if you were staying true to the canon characters and I can definitely say you are! The way you wrote Ginny was astounding, Harry was also amazing, and every single other person that featured in this was done so well!

You definitely have a knack for writing canon characters, and so many people generally struggle with that, so kudos!

I feel bad because this is a short review but I can't say anything except that this is a fantastically written chapter with no flaws!

It's a definite 10/10 from me, you deserve no less!

Again, sorry about the massive delay and I also apologise if this doesn't make that much sense (I'm currently battling a cold) but the point is: I really loved this chapter and you did a wonderful job of it.

Feel free to request again!

- Kayla :)

Author's Response: That's absolutely no problem, I completely understand! Thanks so much for taking the time to R&R! Sorry it took me so long to respond :/

Thank you so much for all your nice comments, each and every one of them hit on something I have been worried about and it's always nice to get some reassurance.

Thanks so much for the 10/10, you really are so so sweet!

I will be sure to request again and I can't wait to hear what you think of Chapter 2.

Thank you so much, again, for taking the time to read this and share your thoughts!

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Review #3, by lindslo2012 Chapter 3

27th February 2014:
Hey there!
Here for another requested review!
So like the other chapters I was totally just into it!
I was wondering at first who the heck that was following Ginny but then realized that she was reading something, that was a little confusing at first but I caught on! :)
I think the way you got the Jones girl to ask Ginny to tryout was pretty awesome. I could imagine how shocked Ginny was and I am quite excited that she gets to embark this next stage of her life.
I didn't know that Ginny had to leave to go be on the Harpies' team? That's new to me and I glad I learned that fact because I had no idea :)
Thinking about how Harry and Ginny will have that distance now is rather sad because of how they JUST started talking about getting back together. I know that they will make it work though because they are perfect for one another!
My favorite scene was when Harry showed up, soaked in rain with a Firebolt for Ginny. That tugged at my heartstrings a bit because it was so sweet of him to do that for her. :)
Well, another huge well done for the great chapter. Your plot is still flowing perfectly and characterization is still right on the dot.
Hope you re-request when another chapter becomes available!!!

Author's Response: Awww I really cannot thank you enough again for your kind words :D And I'm glad I've given you some new insight! Hopefully there will be more to follow as the story continues.
I totally agree about Harry and Ginny, it's rather sad and Harry is super sweet, isn't he :) That was such an adorable romantic gesture :)
I will be sure to re-request when Chapter 4 gets put up! (I just finished writing it, so once it gets beta'd, it should be up soon)
Thanks so much again,

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Review #4, by anythingcouldhappen Chapter 1

27th February 2014:
Hi! I'm here with your requested review :)

This was a fantastic chapter. I think you just hit Ginny's character spot on. Honestly her voice here is awesome. It just felt right. Her grief over Fred was heart breaking, and I think you captured that grief in a very real way.

This part was my favorite (though it had me tearing up):

"She felt as though a hole had been crudely punched through her heart and the pain of it made her want to double over. The unyielding permanence of death had never been clearer to her than it was now, and this overwhelming realization threatened to push her over the carefully constructed barrier she had built for herself."

This just so perfectly describes grief. Its like you know that someone is dead, but it's almost unreal. And then you have moments when it all suddenly overwhelms you. And you captured that. Like seriously, you just somehow managed to describe it so well. Its something I've felt many times, but I could never have described it so perfectly.

In terms of the other characters, they all seem fine so far. The flow/pace is great, and your writing is really easy and pleasant to read. I think in terms of plot, you just need to make it clear the end goal of the story. Like you can't just sort of drag the story on without setting up a conflict that needs to be resolved and stuff. Sorry I feel like I'm not being totally clear, but I don't know how else to word it. :P

Awesome job! Hope this helped!


Author's Response: Hi!

Thanks so much for your affirmation on Ginny's character and her grief. It was very difficult to write, but I somehow just knew what Ginny would be feeling, and it had to go into the chapter. Though I'm sorry it made you tear up, I'm so glad it was well received. Your kind words about that passage in particular just made me smile and feel so much better about this chapter :D

"your writing is really easy and pleasant to read." Well... you literally just made my day. It's actually kinda sad how much I worry about this, so it's a relief to read these words! Hopefully they remain true for the rest of the chapters! (Seriously, I'm internally begging myself right now!)

Thank you so much on the plot tip, that is definitely a useful one and I will be sure to utilize it here as well as keep it in mind for all things I write. Don't worry, you were being totally clear and I got it completely :D

Thanks so much again! It definitely helped and I will for sure be coming back for a re-request :D


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Review #5, by lindslo2012 Chapter 2

25th February 2014:
Here for your re-request! :D
So once again.. way to go in getting me to be hooked into your story!
I have enjoyed the intensity from the very beginning and I now want to read more!
Can I say how much I love Harry? He is always just so patient and comforting to Ginny and is such a good man to her. I love how he was there for her in the beginning of the chapter when they walked out into the day and just talked with one another when he knows Ginny is going through such a hard time. Even though JK has decided she liked Harry and Hermione better after all of her books, I still think that Harry is good for Ginny too. :)
I really liked the part when they went to play Quidditch! It was very adorable how Harry got irritated with her scoring when he wasn't paying attention. And he was still so sweet to her to go out and play with her in the first place when she just needed someone to be there.
I really enjoyed this chapter as I did you first one. I still think your plot is very wonderful and that it will continue to intrigue me! GREAT JOB once again! :D
Come back and re-request!!!
Until next time,

Author's Response: Hi!
AHH, I'm so happy to hear you say you're hooked! I was worried that it wasn't engaging enough.
Of course you can gush over Harry as much as you want! I love him, too :) He really is being so sweet to her. I know there's all that controversy going on, but I fully believe they are right for each other. 100%
I'm so glad you enjoyed the Quidditch scene, it was rather adorable, wasn't it :D
I really am so glad you enjoyed this chapter, I was a little worried about it, but your sweet review has made me rethink it!
I will be sure to re-request!
Thanks again!

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Review #6, by lindslo2012 Chapter 1

24th February 2014:
Hi there!
Here for your requested review.. and let me say... WOW!
This was a very heartbreaking first chapter. But you made it feel so real. Like I was actually standing there watching the Wesley family go through this on Fred's funeral day.
Poor George. I can't even imagine what is going through his mind.. to be so close to your twin since birth, never separating and then bam! It was all taken away from you. :(
Though I feel bad for all the rest of the family too because this sucks very badly for them and everyone who was ever close to George.
Harry reacted just like I would expect him to and you got his and Ginny's characterization perfectly, as well as everyone else's. I am glad Harry came to comfort Ginny and revealed how he's feeling.
I see no grammar issues at all and your words and sentences flow very well! I think you and your beta did a fantastic job and I hope you re-request so I can come back for more. Your chapter was very interesting from the beginning and I want to see what the next one holds! :)
Until nxt time,

Author's Response: HI!
Thank you so much for such a sweet review! It made for such an awesome ending to my day :D
As sad as I'm sure it is to read, I really am glad that you can feel the grief the Weasley's went through. I tried really hard to convey the depth of it, so I'm so happy to hear that it came across strong.
Thanks so much for your comments on the characterization. I really do want to stay true to the way JK wrote them, so I'm glad it seemed that way to you :)
I will pass on the grammar and flow compliments to my beta :D I'm sure she will be happy!
I will most definitely be rerequsting :) I can't wait to hear what you think of the rest of it!
Thanks so so much, again!! *hugs*

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Review #7, by Infinityx Chapter 3

18th February 2014:
Christy! I just realized that I hadn't continued reading after the first chapter so here I am!

This is so sad! I can't believe Ginny and Harry have to be so far away from each other. Although it can't be too bad, since they can apparate. Oh, how I wish that I'm a witch. My boyfriend and I get to meet twice a year if we're lucky and apparition would certainly make things so much easier. I hope Harry and Ginny's relationship lasts though. They're so cute together. :)

I found the pace a little bit rushed. Things seemed to keep happening one after the other and I got just a teeny bit disoriented, but overall it was truly wonderful. A bit more description would have been nice though.

I don't understand why Harry came back drenched. Was he trying the broom out? That was a little unclear.

there was no alternative. I totally understand how this feels. :( I love how close they are and how much they feel like they belong with each other. You've done a great job of characterizing them. I'm so glad that Ginny's determined to take her life in her own hands, and Hermione's being such a good friend to her. :)

I found a few commas missing. I think they were in the previous chapter.

Harry's just the cutest. :) Buying Ginny that Firebolt was a way for him to express what he felt without telling her and I think that was so sweet!

I can't wait to see how this plot proceeds. There are so many ways it can go from here and I have a feeling that it might get quite angsty. :D

It's time for you to catch the writing bug and update soon! I think this story has great potential and I'm eager to see where it goes. :)


Author's Response: Erin! That's totally fine :) I'm glad you liked the first chapter enough to want to come back and read more!

Writing Harry and Ginny's relationship is so beautiful and horrible for me! I want them to just be together and happy etc. but I know it can't be that simple at all. I'm so sad to hear about your boyfriend :( If I had the power to make you a witch, I totally would... and then I would change myself and wonder why I hadn't done that years ago :)

Thank you so much about the pace tip. I can totally see how it could seem rushed and I definitely want to change that. So thanks for pointing it out, I will be sure to pay very close attention to that as I keep writing.

Hmmm I can see how Harry being wet could be a bit confusing. He wasn't riding, he was just wet because he had been out in the rain, buying the broom. I should have made that more clear... /:

Thanks so so so much for your kind words and helpful tips :D I can't thank you enough for reading my story, let alone taking the time to leave such a thoughtful review! I truly hope I get the writing bug soon so I can speed through the rest of Chapter 4!


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Review #8, by CambAngst Chapter 1

17th February 2014:
Tagging you from the Review the Person Above You thread in the common room.

First off, let me say that your story involves my favorite pairing and is set in my favorite time period to read. I'm really pleased to have found it.

I really love the way that your story gives the characters -- and by extension, the reader -- a chance to grieve for all that was lost during the war. Far too many stories set in this time period seem to be based on the premise that everything in the wizarding world was celebrations and sunshine and puppies ten minutes after Voldemort crumbled to the flagstones. I don't think it could have been that way. Too many people died and too much was destroyed by the Death Eaters. Your version of events has a perfect sense of heaviness and realism to it.

I could go on and on about what a good writer you are. You have a really great knack for picking the right details to focus on in each scene and capturing the mood in the character's perceptions of the world around them. In the first scene, Ginny is so caught up in the comforting, somewhat inconsequential things around her. Hot chocolate and riding Ron's broom and her family's too-small pajamas and the warm, empty comfort of her bed. At this point, she's still avoiding the crushing reality of losing Fred.

The fact that she's trying to convince herself that she's already made her peace with losing Harry is perfect characterization for Ginny. Keep a stiff upper lip, tell yourself that it's what you expected to happen, pretend that it doesn't really affect you that much. For a youngest child who's led a tough life with a fair number of disappointments, that's the logical defense mechanism. Don't get your hopes up...

Gah, the funeral! Even through Ginny's somewhat shell-shocked point of view, it was almost too much. Part of me wished that you'd gone into more of the gut-wrenching details, but I don't think that would have been consistent with the way Ginny was experiencing life at that moment. She seems like she's mostly numb. Just living from moment to moment, getting by somehow. I loved that Harry always seemed to be there whenever Ginny was about to stumble. She doesn't even seem able to understand the support he's giving her, but she needed it nevertheless.

George's reaction to her failed attempt to console him was definitely the cruelest twist of all. I know that George didn't really mean it and I know there will come a time when he'll feel terrible about that one, disappointed look he gave Ginny, but at the moment I'm sure he just couldn't do any better.

Even at the end, when it's only Ginny and Harry, you didn't make things too easy for them. I really appreciate the fact that you've kept them as they should be: two very stubborn individuals who aren't especially good at expressing their emotions. There will be difficulties...

I would love to find something to suggest in the way of improving this chapter, some token thing that might help you make it better, but I can't. Everything, from the descriptions to the narration to the dialog and even the pacing was beautifully done. Excellent work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for leaving a review :D

I definitely agree that the characters needed a time to grieve the losses of everyone who died during the Battle of Hogwarts. With a story starting this at this time and told from Ginny's perspective, this was a necessary chapter to be written.

Awww that is so so sweet of you to say :D I have loved writing this story and it makes me so happy when other people enjoy reading it! You've said such nice things and they really do motivate me to keep up the quality as I continue writing!

I also agree that certain things (Harry and Ginny's relationship) needed to be done realistically. That's one I've been struggling with, since I want them to just be together forever surrounded by unicorns and butterflies, but I've forced myself to maintain some sort of reality in their relationship.

I really am so glad you liked it so much! Thanks again for leaving such a wonderful review!

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Review #9, by LilyEPotter Chapter 3

11th February 2014:
I can just imagine Molly's reaction when she learned that Ginny wasn't going to finish school and go play Quidditch instead. That everyone found a reason to leave the Burrow until Arthur got her calmed down. :)

That was very sweet of Harry to buy Ginny a Firebolt of her own, but why was Ginny so sad after making her decision? Was it because she wouldn't be around Harry? With the Floo network and Apparating, wouldn't Harry be able to see her more often than they think? Even with his Auror training?

Author's Response: Hi!!! Thanks so much for leaving a review!

I'm so glad you thought the description of Ginny and Mrs. Weasley's fight was true to their characters :) I completely agree that the other Weasleys would have fled, so I'm glad that translated into the story!

That is a very interesting question! I think that Ginny was really only sad about the Harpys right after the option became available to her. The way I see it, she had never considered any other possibilities for the next year of her life aside from Hogwarts. The fact that such a huge change had been proposed to her so suddenly just shocked her. It caused her to question everything she had thought about her future. I don't think she was sad so much as she was just scared. Once she finally came to her senses and accepted the offer, she was happy in her decision, but was still worried that she was doing the right thing and that she was prepared for what would come.

I don't think any of her emotions about accepting stemmed from leaving Harry. Of course she was sad about that, but she would have been separated from him whether she was in Holyhead or at Hogwarts. As far as her sadness after making her decision, her pouting in that moment really just came from her anger at not being able to go outside to train. (Silly Ginny!)

I'm glad you thought the Firebolt was a nice touch! I think that that was just the kind of thing Harry would do. The poor guy isn't very good at expressing his feeling verbally, so buying her a Firebolt was his only way of telling her how much he supported her and cared for her :)

Thanks so much, again, for leaving a review! It means so much to me that you not only keep reading this story, but that you take the time to share your thoughts :D I always enjoy hearing them!

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Review #10, by Infinityx Chapter 1

7th February 2014:
Hello! I'm here for our review swap.

I love how this story is set immediately after the war, and from Ginny's point of view. You've done a great job at characterizing her and I think this chapter is a wonderful start to the story.

I think you've done a marvelous job at capturing Ginny's grief. It's such a powerful emotion and I love how you've written it. It's nice that you've focused a bit on each of the other Weasleys as well. Bright clothing at the funeral seems just how Fred would have wanted it, and I think it was an amazing idea to include that but of detail.

I love the part where Ginny takes Ron's cleansweep and goes off to fly by herself. I think the Weasleys getting worried about her is such an apt reaction. It must be so hard for them to move on after witnessing so much pain and death.

Aww, Harry's so sweet. He loves her so much. It's sad that Ginny is feeling so insecure. :( And it's so nice that Harry told her about the Marauder's map. That ending was so powerful with all the uncertainty as well as love. This was such a moving chapter overall, and you've done a brilliant job at portraying all the emotions.

There are so many ways the story can go from here and I'm curious to know what will happen next. I'll definitely come back to read more. Keep writing!


Author's Response: Hi!!!

Thank you so much for the kind words! I'm really glad you enjoyed it and that you think the heart of the characters and their grief were captured well :)

I'm glad you liked the Harry scene, I was a little nervous about what people would think about it.

Thanks so much for saying you'll keep reading it! That really means a lot!


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Review #11, by maraudertimes Chapter 2

5th February 2014:

Well this was certainly a more upbeat chapter! Although Harry 'sacrificing' his and Ginny's relationship wasn't all that happy (although it was really true to Harry's canon character). But I do think the best option for Ginny would be to return to Hogwarts, given the choice, even if it meant being separated from Harry.

Although, I suppose with Gwenog Jones coming to pay them a visit, I'm guessing Ginny going back to Hogwarts isn't going to happen? Let me guess: she's going to be drafted for the Holyhead Harpies. Ooh yay!

I really liked the quidditch in this chapter and I think you wrote it quite well. The fact that Ginny made Harry stand in as a keeper made me laugh (especially when you think of the joke 'he's a keeper!'). Although I might have wanted a little bit more description with how Harry plays as a chaser. Just a curiosity thing. :P

This was a really good chapter and I really liked it. One of my favourite parts was Percy reverting back to his old self. But needless to say, this was very nicely done and I quite liked it!

Great job!

Author's Response: Hi again!!

Let me just start my saying that these reviews put a smile on my face that I just couldn't get rid of for whole minutes. Okay, moving on :)

Yes, it was a much more upbeat chapter. Of course, I don't think any of them will ever be okay with or move on from Fred's death. But I do think that they would have eventually been forced to think about other things, what with the wizarding world needing to be rebuilt and whatnot :) And yeah, Harry totally would do that... darn heroic Harry...

Hahaha interesting speculations about Gwenog Jones! I guess we will just have to see once Chapter 3 gets through beta'ing!

It really is a relief to hear that the Quidditch seemed well written :) I wasn't thinking about how it would be received too much, but the positive feedback is very nice to hear. Especially with, hmmm, maybe some upcoming Quidditch rich chapters?? I love the 'he's a keeper'! I wish I had thought of that when writing this chapter! Hmmm, Harry as a Chaser would have been interesting to see! I will keep that in mind.

Thanks so much again for your great feedback! I'm really glad you liked it!


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Review #12, by maraudertimes Chapter 1

5th February 2014:
Hiya! Really late review swap... sorry about that. Real life kind of took over there for a little while.

This was really sad, but in a really beautiful way. The way you portrayed each character's grief was, to me, very true to their canon personalities. Molly would be making everyone food or hot beverages; George would be trying to hold on to anything that would have to do with Fred; Percy would be feeling immeasurably guilty; and Ginny would be in complete shock.

And the fact that she thought that Harry would want to leave her is heartbreaking. I'm glad he made her see reason and told her about him taking the Marauders Map out and looking at her dot. I think she really needed to hear that, and it was just a really sweet moment.

This entire chapter was just so nicely written and I totally agree that Fred would have wanted everyone to be wearing bright colours at his funeral, to celebrate his life instead of his death. It was a really cool thing to add and I think it made everything that much more real and true, and in essence, more beautiful.

This was a really sad introductory chapter, but I'm really excited to read further. You've done a great job with this!

Author's Response: Hello! No worries, I totally understand :)

I'm so glad you thought it stayed true to their characters :) That's really the top priority for me as I write this story, so I'm very glad you thought that was done well.

I'm glad that you thought Harry and Ginnny's relationship played out well in this chapter. I really felt as though there would be some uncertainty in their relationship at first. But I couldn't stand keeping them apart for too long. I'm so glad you thought the Marauder's Map was a good touch. I loved when he did that in Deathly Hallows and I thought it would be a perfect thing for him to tell her in that moment. I agree, it was just what she needed to hear. Silly girl, thinking Harry didn't care about her :(

I'm so so glad you liked it and I am so touched by your kind words! I love the idea that bringing in the bright colours made the scene more real and beautiful :)

I really cannot thank you enough for your kind and inspiring words! And thanks so much for reading on!!


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Review #13, by LilyEPotter Chapter 2

30th January 2014:
How funny that both Harry and Ginny decided to be as far as they could when Kingsley came to visit based on Percy's speech. It was interesting to see Harry playing a position other than Seeker even if it was for practice. I'm curious to know why Gwenog Jones stopped by with Kingsley, but it's more than evident that she's going to try getting Ginny to join the Holyhead Harpies.

Author's Response: Yes, I did think they would both want to be as far away as possible. But I think Harry's main motivation was just to clear his head. He was naturally upset about Ginny leaving to go back to Hogwarts.

Yeah, it was really interesting to try to imagine Harry playing any other position, but it was fun!

As for Gwenog Jones... I suppose we will just have to wait and see :P

Thanks again for the reviews

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Review #14, by LilyEPotter Chapter 1

30th January 2014:
How sad as we see Fred's funeral through Ginny's eyes. Those days must have been dreadful to get through. Though I can understand Molly's fear that Ginny was missing since they'd been at war for so long.

Author's Response: Yes, and it was sad to write, as well :/

Thanks for the reviews! Especially as they were left on my birthday :D

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Review #15, by toomanycurls Chapter 2

18th January 2014:
Hello!! Doing our review swap!! Harry and Ginny's conversation is perfectly awkward and sweet. I could really see him trying to make things up like this. I mean, neither of them really can understand what the other has gone through.

haha, Mrs. Weasley is quite protective. I imagine that she kind of suspects they're mending their relationship right about now. Oh woah, I mean, it seems a bit obvious that they'd fix the castle by magic but I'm blown away that they did it so fast.

It's fitting that they'd both hit up quidditch to sort out their thoughts. I do think her going to school while he's doing stuff in the Ministry will be a huge blocker in their relationship - not like him being on the run was. he'll be able to visit.

You write the quidditch action extremely well in this part.

oh!!! I love that you ended with her meeting Gwenog Jones! I thought she might have in the Slug Club (at least Hermione made it sound like she met her there and Ginny was involved in that). but, still, it's a good dramatic ending to the chapter.


Author's Response: Hello!
Thanks so much for the thoughtful review! I'm glad you thought Harry and Ginny's conversation was good, I did struggle with it quite a bit, so I'm happy to hear that it turned out well.
You make a good point about the castle. The way I wrote it makes it very unclear and I should fix that, but in my mind, the castle isn't completely restored, but is fit enough to function. I might add that in if I ever go back and edit things. Thanks so much for pointing that out!
Thanks so much for your kind words about the Quidditch scene! I hoped it was clear.
You bring up another problem. I did think a lot about Gwenog meeting Ginny. I knew that, under all normal circumstances, of course Ginny would recognize her immediately. The Harpies are her favorite team. However, I did think (largely for the purposes of plot) that Gwenog would quite likely be scared beyond recognition (what with the war and playing Quidditch professionally). Obviously, it would have been ideal to address this before the end of this chapter, because it does seem very un-canon without explaination, but in order to leave this cliff-hanger, it had to be done. However, I do address this in the opening scene of the third chapter :D
I really cannot thank you enough for your thoughtful input!

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Review #16, by LilyLou Chapter 1

17th January 2014:

Wow, this was such a beautiful chapter! I've actually never read anything that revolved around Fred's funeral. I loved it. Ginny was perfect! Just before you said she was throwing rocks, I thought to myself 'she's going to throw something or hit something' and it's a good thing you made her throw a rock. So cannon and perfect!

The sorrow is so well written! I cried...



Author's Response: Ah! I'm so glad you liked it! I'm happy to hear that it seemed natural as well as canon :D I try really hard to make it seem realistic, so it's good to know that it's working! Though I'm sorry you cried, I'm also glad that all the emotions I tried to pour in here were received fully.
Thank you so so much for taking the time to read and review!

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Review #17, by phoenix9279 Chapter 1

4th January 2014:
Good so far hope to see more soon.

Author's Response: I'm so glad to hear that you liked it! The next chapter is being beta'd and should be up soon :)

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Review #18, by potslicker Chapter 1

1st January 2014:
Not sure where you are going, but I will read on. As long as Ginny and Harry get together and have a wonderful life together, I will be happy.

Author's Response: Happy to hear it! I shall try to live up to your expectations :)

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Review #19, by hedwidgeon Chapter 1

27th December 2013:
This is a truly lovely start to a longer fic! You're absolutely right, you can't really begin a post-battle fic without taking into account all the grief that results from the battle. I think you did a very good job with that here, I definitely got a bit teary-eyed at multiple points.

The things that stood out to me most were things like Ginny stealing Ron's Cleansweep Eleven, Harry watching Ginny's dot on the Map, details like that--those, I think, really make a fic and you're doing a great job with those.

Also, I can really see George taking over planning the funeral, and everyone dressing as they want for it. That seemed so very fitting.

Good work so far, keep writing :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for leaving a review, I am glad you liked it! I am glad that the little details stood out to you, because those are what I always love the most about stories.
I love that George's character seemed accurate, I really wanted to stay true to everyone's spirit, so I am glad to hear that :)
Thanks again for taking the time to leave a review!

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Review #20, by Doc Dave Chapter 1

26th December 2013:
That was a good story! Carry on the great work and lets hope we hear another story soon!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I am glad you liked it! Hopefully I will have another chapter up when the queue re-opens :)

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Review #21, by eternal_potterhead Chapter 1

24th December 2013:
This is really amazing! I love it!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to leave a review and I really am glad you enjoyed it :D

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Review #22, by Emilee Chapter 1

22nd December 2013:
This chapter was really good :)I thought I was gonna cry but I didn't so yay!:)

Author's Response: Why, thank you!! I am sorry to hear that you almost cried, but I am at least glad it touched you enough to elicit emotion! Thanks so much for leaving a review! :)

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Review #23, by TxGinny Chapter 1

22nd December 2013:
I think this is a really great start to a story and hope you update as soon as possible! Great job and keep writing!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I really am glad you liked it! Hopefully the next chapter will be up when the queue re-opens :) Merry Christmas!!

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Review #24, by Secret Santa Chapter 1

21st December 2013:
Ho, ho, ho! It's your secret santa here to spread some Christmas cheer!

I don't think that I've ever read a post-Hogwarts story before that starts immediately after the battle from Ginny's point of view, so I was interested straight away by that set up. For a first chapter (and a first story) you've done incredibly well here - it's a really interesting start, and while it wasn't exactly nice to read about how much pain and grief Ginny is dealing with, I thought you wrote it really well. Your writing style is one of the things that struck me as I read this chapter, because it's very readable and seems polished too. There's a lot of variation in your sentences and word choices which are just little things but make the story so much nicer and more enjoyable to read. This is definitely miles ahead of what my first story was, and if it hadn't been the only thing on your AP I wouldn't have realised it was your first story. So what I'm trying to say with that (in a very long-winded way, apparently) is that you've started brilliantly and your writing here is great.

What you said in your author's note is definitely right - you can't write about Ginny straight after the Battle without including the grief for Fred. I think that Ginny's grief has been captured extremely well here, and it's not an easy thing to do, so well done for that. Grief is such a difficult and complex emotion that it's hard to write about, because the process will never be the same for everybody. I liked the way that you played with that, and showed that all the different Weasleys are dealing with their grief for Fred in different ways. I can definitely imagine Molly trying to mother people even more, as if to compensate for the child that she has lost. I can also see George going one of two ways in his grief - either becoming a lifeless shell, or throwing his efforts into distracting himself from what has happened. Surprisingly, I haven't seen many stories where he does the latter so I really enjoyed reading your interpretation of his grief, and the way that he threw himself into planning the funeral so that he was out of the house and doing something. Even though a funeral is really upsetting, I was glad to see that in your story, Fred had been honoured the way he should have been - the decorations and the mentions of bright clothing really made me smile.

One of my favourite things here was that you included Percy and the way he felt about Fred dying. You managed to sum up my thoughts about that exactly, and I'm really pleased you included him because he's often excluded from stories like this, just because he was estranged from the family before the Battle.

Back to Ginny's grief - not only did you capture it really well, you managed to make me feel it too. That's such a wonderful thing to be able to do with your writing, and although I didn't enjoy feeling so upset and feeling her pain as I read the story, it's a testament to your writing ability. What struck me was the different stages that you managed to include. The build up to the funeral felt a little drawn out at times, but I think that served well to show us how Ginny felt about it, the way that she was dreading having to go. And then her fear when she couldn't cry - about what it could mean, whether it made her a bad person when everyone else in the family is able to shed tears for Fred. Finally, the way that she wasn't able to comfort George, and that she didn't know what to say. It's very believably written, and I think that her breakdown into tears at the end is kind of the culmination of all the different emotions that she's been feeling, and all of the different stresses that she's been put under recently.

There were some really powerful moments in this chapter, too. The part when you said about Fred wanting people to wear whatever they liked to his wedding, and then Ginny remembered that he would never have a wedding - it's the exact same realisation that hits me when I re-read the last book, and I end up sobbing at that as well. Including things like that helped make this chapter much more believable, because those are the realisations when grief hits you the most, I think, and they're the hardest to deal with.

Your attention to detail was amazing, too. I'd never thought about this before really but when Ginny went out to fly on the broom without telling anybody, I wasn't expecting her whole family to be worried. But of course they've spent so long living in fear and suspicion that it must be incredibly hard to forget that mindset and move to one where someone not being in their bed naturally means that something bad has happened to them. It's another aspect to the grief I think, as well, especially as far as Molly's concerned, because she can't bear to lose another child, so not knowing where Ginny is must be absolutely terrifying.

The ending was so sweet! I think it was a great way to end the chapter, and the contrast worked nicely with the rest of the story. The whole chapter has been a tumult of emotion for both the reader and for Ginny, but the reader has a definite advantage - we've known throughout that Harry isn't just there because of Fred's funeral, and that he does care about Ginny and love her. The fact that she was also dealing with that, and her fears about him leaving her, on top of the grief and all the other emotions she's feeling after the Battle must have made things truly awful for her. I loved the chance to see Harry supporting her and being there for her at the end of this chapter, and that Ginny realises now he's going to stick around.

This was a brilliant first chapter, and a very well done!

Merry Christmas!

-Secret Santa

Author's Response: Hello there, Santa! He he he

Thank you so much for all your kind words and praises, it really does mean a lot to me.

As far as capturing the characters and their grief, I really am pleased to hear that you thought that was done well. I really wish I could say that I had meditated for hours over each character to logically determine what each of them would do with their grief… but to be completely honest, it all just somehow came to me… I just knew what each character would do. Now, hopefully that’s a testament to my love for JK’s characters, and not a mark against my logic as a writer… either way, I am glad that it somehow turned out okay.

I am also very glad to hear that you were touched by reading Ginny’s grief over Fred. Obviously, Fred’s death is difficult for all of us to deal with, but it is good to know that I somehow managed to do justice to that grief in my writing, especially as it was from the perspective of a close family member. As sad as it is, I am also glad that the deep sorrow may be felt by those reading about it.

Most of all, I am so glad that the ending came across the right way! It’s so important to me that Harry and Ginny’s relationship is maintained with respect to the way that JK wrote it. This is obviously very difficult, as we got to see so little between them, but I am relieved to hear that it seemed genuine 

I really cannot thank you enough for all of your kind words and helpful comments. Thanks so much for taking the time to give me some feedback! You are an awesome Santa!

I hope you are having an amazing holiday season!

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Review #25, by Meri113 Chapter 1

20th December 2013:
I have to say that this is one of the best post-Hogwarts stories that I have read so far. I've been looking for one from this time period, especially one concentrating on Ginny/Harry and I'm so happy I found this. I love your writing; I think you really captured the characters personalities, especially Ginny's, George's, and Percy's. I love the part where Percy comforts George, and the thoughts that Ginny has concerning how he might be feeling, considering he was present when Fred was killed. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you for writing this. love it

Author's Response: Why, thank you so much! I'm am so so glad to hear you enjoyed it! I, as well, had difficultly finding a good Post-Hogwarts fic centered around Harry/Ginny... so writing this just seemed like the obvious choice to me :P I really am so glad you liked it and I do truly hope you keep reading :) The next chapter will hopefully be up when the queue re-opens :D Merry Christmas!

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