6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Veritaserum27 Into the cave

19th March 2015:
Hi there!

I was so drawn in by chapter 1 that I decided to continue reading this story! You've done a fabulous job setting up this mystery.

Hermione is so funny - of course her first act is to scold Harry for using his real name. I could just see her wagging her finger and yelling at him.

You've also done a very nice job with the descriptions. I can feel the contrast between the setting in Australia and London. Everything seems so much brighter and open. But I also like that you've hinted at so much darkness that lies underneath.

I'm also gonna comment on the cat. It is suspicious. I'm wondering if it is an animagus - since the revealing spell didn't do anything. Especially since the cat's owner said it never went to anyone and now it's taken a liking to Harry.

Ooo - the cave scene. I was really nervous for a second, but relieved when the mysterious man turned out to be an Australian Auror.

I did find a few spelling/grammar errors. Here is an example:

...the Ministry back home are obviously watching this operation under heavily surveillance. And last nights mistake didn't go unnoticed.

I think you mean heavy surveillance. And I think it should be last night's.

Overall, another fabulous chapter - and a great read!

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♥ Beth (Veritaserum27)

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Review #2, by Veritaserum27 Prologue

19th March 2015:
Hi there!

I was just looking through the recently added stories and I saw this one didn't have very many reviews, so I thought I'd stop by.

You've got a great premise here. I can't wait to see what happens next. I really wish I had read the story summary better because I'm not sure if this is a Harry/Hermione fic or not, but now I'm really, really curious.

Great first chapter - you didn't try to cram too much into it, which a lot of authors do. You gave us just enough information to know that Harry is in Australia, post war and Hermione is coming to stay with him. It seems that Harry and Ginny just had a falling out and I'm wondering what that was about. Hmmm...

Also this dark magic is very intriguing. Great set up. I also didn't catch any typos or grammatical errors. Nice job!

This review is also done in support of the HPFF fundraiser. I'm not sure if you've seen it or not, but there is one going on to help keep HPFF online. You should check it out!

♥ Beth (Veritaserum27)

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Review #3, by Corned Bee Moonlight and love songs

4th March 2015:
Hopefully someone will kill Draco soon. So tired of having him show up.

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Review #4, by poobear Going to the Chapel

7th August 2014:
Hi another top ace chapter for you sooo good brings a smile to my face when i see a new chapter up. please keep it up its realy good. carnt wait for the next one. take care be safe by for now. Bruce

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Review #5, by poobear (bruce) After the fire

5th August 2014:
Hi just wanted to say what a great start to the story so far good mix of all things. I also like were your going with ron i never did like him (sorry)so its nice to see him being the bad guy for a change. so keep up the good work your a good writer and story teller. So i will say by for now take care and keep it coming.
Ive just read your other storys there very good too just thort you should know.

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Review #6, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Prologue

7th March 2014:
For Blackout Bingo.


I don't read a lot of single!Harry stories, he's usually with Ginny, but I can't walk away from a mystery and this sounded too good to pass up.

It was a very interesting start, to see Harry hiding in someone's garden. I look forward to finding out more about why he's in Australia and the woman we've just been introduced. Since she was introduced and not a passerby, I assume she's important, or at least plays some sort of role.

I hope to come back soon for more.


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