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Review #1, by Infinityx Chapter One: Anguish

5th May 2015:
Hi Selene! Here for the April Review Exchange!

I absolutely love how you've started this chapter off. It's gripping and even though there's not much about the characters, the way you've described the scene and the events taking place is so amazing and it just draws me in right from the beginning. There's also a great mystery surrounding your characters because although you reveal things about them, the details aren't completely clear. I don't mean this is a bad thing - you've revealed just the right amount in this first chapter to make the reader get familiarized with how this Rebecca character is feeling, but still feel slightly confused and want to know more.

Time had not kind been to their children, and she felt each of their deaths keenly in the way only a mother, and a grandmother, could feel. And, while they were not a direct child of her own womb, something terrible was happening to a child of her own blood and she must stop it.
This part is especially intriguing. I feel like there's something more to it. Rebecca has outlived a lot of her family members whom she thinks of as her own children - and it's because of time? But if Rebecca is older to them, like a mother or grandmother, then it must mean she's quite old herself. Hmm, this is very interesting.

chasing you halfway across Cornwall
I'm not sure if this is a figure of speech or if he means he actually chased her halfway across Cornwall, because if it's true, then they're definitely not human. Which would also explain the whole time thing from the previous sentences I quoted.

Okay, so this is when James and Lily die fighting. I like how you've brought in the time period in a smooth manner as well. It fits right into the context of the story.

The emotions in this chapter are so powerful and you've written them so well. I can feel their grief at seeing James and Lily dead and you're writing is just amazing.

So, she's a part of James' family. His grandmother?

The sound of beating hearts were too unreliable
She can hear heartbeats? :o then she's definitely not human! Or she's using some kind of spell but I think the first option explains it better. If she's not human, then...maybe a vampire?




I'm going to read the second chapter now but you have to finish this story. Please.

There are a few mistakes that need to be cleaned up but I'm not nitpicking since you've mentioned this hasn't been beta'ed yet.

Love this first chapter. :)

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Review #2, by poobear Chapter Two: The Child

20th March 2015:
O.M.G Wow what a great start (sorry hi)i love this story already and i hope its going to be a long one ??. Ilove the diff angle that you have started on this and soo carnt wait for the next chapters and see were you take this and a lot more vampires in it and i would love to see becca to raise harry but i guess i will just have to wait and see. please keep up with the super dooper work you have done so far. take care and i hope to make more reviews soon by for now.

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Review #3, by Rita Skeeter Chapter One: Anguish

18th March 2015:
Hello there my dear Selene!

I'm Rita Skeeter. You may know me from such publications as The Daily Prophet, The Life and Times of Albus Dumbledore, and a few others that I can't quite keep track of. Really, there's so many that sometimes I just forget!

You may be wondering why I'm here on this thing, but I've found them quite helpful in digging up dir..I mean looking up information on my latest subjects. Especially since that meddling Hermione Granger found out about me being an illegal animagus.

I must tell you that your story was quite informative. While I pride myself in knowing almost every little detail about The Boy Who Lived, I can't say I knew much about his grandparents. This filled in the details quite nicely. Maybe I'll have to go digging for a bit of info about them now. Perhaps, a book on the tragic Potter family history through the generations.

Now because you've shared such a nice bit of history with me, I'd like to share a bit of gossip with you. There was a dual purpose to me stopping here. I'm running a bit of a contest. You see, things aren't always as they seem. If you can guess who my alter ego on the forums is, I will donate E50 in your honor to the HPFF fundraiser. You better hurry though because others have received similar offers and there can only be one winner. You have until March 30th.

Oh and I suppose I should leave you one clue so you can start some digging of your own. Unlike Rita, I'm a member of your house.

Best of Luck!

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Review #4, by CambAngst Chapter One: Anguish

25th April 2014:
Selene! I've been meaning to read this for a while. Some nights, our free time catches up to our ambitions.

I love the way you've kicked off the story. I recognize the event that's playing out, even though it's seen from a completely different perspective. You did a great job of dropping us right into the action without any preamble or pretense. I was instantly caught up in what I was reading without even half a chance to get bored. I know very little about your leading characters -- at least the ones leading so far -- and that's FINE. I can't wait to learn more about them, but that's what future chapters are for. Right now, I'm captivated by the moment and that's what a good first chapter should do.

Your pacing for this chapter was excellent. A rapid, downhill ride, interrupted only by a couple of moments where the characters -- and the readers -- catch their breath.

I saw a couple of small typos, at least I think they're typos:

-- Time had not kind been to their children, and she felt each of their deaths keenly in the way only a mother, and a grandmother, could feel. -- Time had not been kind?

-- Surely not even to Gods were so cruel to give her hope. -- not even the Gods

Otherwise, excellent writing.

You crazy giraffe, you! I am really looking forward to seeing where this story goes, and what it is about Rebecca and Amadeus that Lily had to become accustomed to. Rock on!


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Review #5, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing Chapter One: Anguish

15th March 2014:

So this first chapter was nothing what I expected but I really enjoyed it! I loved what you did here... at first I thought we were back in a founder era fic but quickly caught on that they were spirits of some description.

I thought the idea that Rebecca could physically feel pain when something happened to one of her descendents. I think it truly shows how strong a mothers love can be, something we already knew from the the books of course.

I also wanted to say your descriptions were fantastic in this... I could picture the whole thing from start to finish so great job there. The heartbreak when they reached the wreckage was so sad, I just felt gutted about their death once again so yeah. Lots of feels.

So, my only complaint? There's only one chapter! I can't wait for you to update - I hope you do soon! This was brilliant!

Lauren :)
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Review #6, by adluvshp Chapter One: Anguish

13th March 2014:
Blackout Battle 6/6

This was an interesting start to your story. The plot is intriguing and I am curious to know what happens next. I also like your character Rebecca and how she heard Harry's cry and came for him.

Her husband is also an interesting character and I like the couple from what we know of them so far. It was really sad how all their children and grandchildren are dead, and finally James too.

The atmosphere of tension and sadness ever present throughout the narrative was very good and had me reading with absolute concentration.

I liked your descriptions as they jumped straight into the action. There were no glaring grammar errors either. All in all, this made for a smooth read and a good opening for the rest of the story. I liked it =)


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Review #7, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Chapter One: Anguish

29th November 2013:
Selene! It's here! Ah, I'm so excited!

First off, I'm sorry I'm only reviewing this now. I haven't read anything during NaNo, except snippets in the Novel Nests. But I am here and I love it!

It's so sad to hear that they've lost children and grandchildren, being around for so long. And then for it to get worse because James has been killed - gah, I want to cry. *holds James tightly and never lets go*

I love that it's James who has the vampire family. It makes more sense to me because he's the Pureblood (well, maybe not in this...), whereas Lily had no idea about magic or this world until meeting Severus. Also, I can just see him as part of this world more than I can with Lily. She'd definitely be the one who joined the family.

I'm so glad Rebecca came and heard Harry's cry. I can't wait to see him grow up with vampires and how different his life will be compared to canon. It's going to be an awesome read, I can tell.

Cannot wait for the next chapter, Selene!


Author's Response: I'm terrible with review responses...

Don't be sorry, since I'm clearly responding over a year later! XD Thank you so much though! -hugs-

I suppose because Rebecca is not a witch, James may not technically be a pureblood? But there are enough witches and wizards in his family tree that I suppose he can be classified as a pureblood by modern standards. Lily on the other hand, is pureblood human. Not a drop of vampire blood in her family tree.

Rebecca is one of my favorite characters in these stories, and I'm looking forward to playing with her more. She's an important person in Harry's life and I want to do her justice.

Despite being well over a year since this chapter and review, thank you so much Sam! I hope to start writing it again soon after I've refreshed on some of the older chapters and notes I have. I'm itching to start writing again.


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