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Review #1, by CambAngst Chapter One: Anguish

25th April 2014:
Selene! I've been meaning to read this for a while. Some nights, our free time catches up to our ambitions.

I love the way you've kicked off the story. I recognize the event that's playing out, even though it's seen from a completely different perspective. You did a great job of dropping us right into the action without any preamble or pretense. I was instantly caught up in what I was reading without even half a chance to get bored. I know very little about your leading characters -- at least the ones leading so far -- and that's FINE. I can't wait to learn more about them, but that's what future chapters are for. Right now, I'm captivated by the moment and that's what a good first chapter should do.

Your pacing for this chapter was excellent. A rapid, downhill ride, interrupted only by a couple of moments where the characters -- and the readers -- catch their breath.

I saw a couple of small typos, at least I think they're typos:

-- Time had not kind been to their children, and she felt each of their deaths keenly in the way only a mother, and a grandmother, could feel. -- Time had not been kind?

-- Surely not even to Gods were so cruel to give her hope. -- not even the Gods

Otherwise, excellent writing.

You crazy giraffe, you! I am really looking forward to seeing where this story goes, and what it is about Rebecca and Amadeus that Lily had to become accustomed to. Rock on!


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Review #2, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing Chapter One: Anguish

15th March 2014:

So this first chapter was nothing what I expected but I really enjoyed it! I loved what you did here... at first I thought we were back in a founder era fic but quickly caught on that they were spirits of some description.

I thought the idea that Rebecca could physically feel pain when something happened to one of her descendents. I think it truly shows how strong a mothers love can be, something we already knew from the the books of course.

I also wanted to say your descriptions were fantastic in this... I could picture the whole thing from start to finish so great job there. The heartbreak when they reached the wreckage was so sad, I just felt gutted about their death once again so yeah. Lots of feels.

So, my only complaint? There's only one chapter! I can't wait for you to update - I hope you do soon! This was brilliant!

Lauren :)
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Review #3, by adluvshp Chapter One: Anguish

13th March 2014:
Blackout Battle 6/6

This was an interesting start to your story. The plot is intriguing and I am curious to know what happens next. I also like your character Rebecca and how she heard Harry's cry and came for him.

Her husband is also an interesting character and I like the couple from what we know of them so far. It was really sad how all their children and grandchildren are dead, and finally James too.

The atmosphere of tension and sadness ever present throughout the narrative was very good and had me reading with absolute concentration.

I liked your descriptions as they jumped straight into the action. There were no glaring grammar errors either. All in all, this made for a smooth read and a good opening for the rest of the story. I liked it =)


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Review #4, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Chapter One: Anguish

29th November 2013:
Selene! It's here! Ah, I'm so excited!

First off, I'm sorry I'm only reviewing this now. I haven't read anything during NaNo, except snippets in the Novel Nests. But I am here and I love it!

It's so sad to hear that they've lost children and grandchildren, being around for so long. And then for it to get worse because James has been killed - gah, I want to cry. *holds James tightly and never lets go*

I love that it's James who has the vampire family. It makes more sense to me because he's the Pureblood (well, maybe not in this...), whereas Lily had no idea about magic or this world until meeting Severus. Also, I can just see him as part of this world more than I can with Lily. She'd definitely be the one who joined the family.

I'm so glad Rebecca came and heard Harry's cry. I can't wait to see him grow up with vampires and how different his life will be compared to canon. It's going to be an awesome read, I can tell.

Cannot wait for the next chapter, Selene!


Author's Response: I'm terrible with review responses...

Don't be sorry, since I'm clearly responding over a year later! XD Thank you so much though! -hugs-

I suppose because Rebecca is not a witch, James may not technically be a pureblood? But there are enough witches and wizards in his family tree that I suppose he can be classified as a pureblood by modern standards. Lily on the other hand, is pureblood human. Not a drop of vampire blood in her family tree.

Rebecca is one of my favorite characters in these stories, and I'm looking forward to playing with her more. She's an important person in Harry's life and I want to do her justice.

Despite being well over a year since this chapter and review, thank you so much Sam! I hope to start writing it again soon after I've refreshed on some of the older chapters and notes I have. I'm itching to start writing again.


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