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Review #1, by Lostmyheart Haunting Dreams

10th May 2014:
Hi again! :)

This was a little longer than the first (I'm not really sure, but it felt like it), and it was quite interesting.
I don't really know what to say, because it's obviously a sad chapter, a very sad part of Hermione's life.
I know that you probably didn't intend to write it that way, but because you didn't really describe how Harry was, he seemed a bit indifferent about his best friend's unexpected death.

I enjoyed reading your story, and hopefully you'll have the third chapter up soon. I would love to read it :)

- Lostmyheart

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I'm really glad that you liked the chapter. I hope to fix that bit with Harry soon or at least explain it better. Thanks again!

~Slytherinchica08~


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Review #2, by Lostmyheart Prologue

10th May 2014:
Hi!

I thought I'd pop in and take a look at your stories, and to my greatest joy you're a Dramione writer as well!
I must say that it made me quite happy, mostly because I've been getting a lot of 'I won't read any Dramione story' at the forums and it made me feel a little alone with my love for the pair.
But that's not a bad thing, I know we all have each our preferences :)

I liked this start of your new story. I have never read a story where Ron dies and Hermione finds new love. So it was kind of refreshing to read. I like reading new plots.

I could totally imagine Rose being angry with her mother for finding a new man, after her father's death. I would be angry too, if it happened to me. And I think you portrayed Hermione's worry quite well :)
I'm looking forward to read more about their relationship and how they ended up together :)

I enjoyed reading this chapter.
- Avi

Author's Response: Yeah there is quite a bit of the whole I wont read dramione but there are also a lot of people who will. Honestly dramione is my OTP so you will always have me to talk to! I'm really glad that you felt this was original! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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Review #3, by academica Haunting Dreams

1st January 2014:
Hey Erica, here again from Review Tag!

Another very good chapter! I can see that Hermione had a lot of grief about Ron's death, poor thing. No wonder Harry asked someone to look after her (especially given that he needed to look after his wife, who just lost another brother). I thought you did a great job of showing some very realistic aspects of grief, like her "barely registering" Harry patting her back. I also liked the moments that were pure canon Hermione, like her insisting that Harry needed to get back to his own family.

I think it's nice that Ginny and Hermione used to comfort each other when their husbands were away. It saddens me that their interactions will never be the same after the events of that night.

I did see some more typos and small errors here, but I'm sure you'll get a beta on them soon.

Great work! Looking forward to the next!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Thanks again for another wonderful review! I will hopefully go back sometime soon to fix those mistakes! I'm glad that you continue to like this story!

~Slytherinchica08~


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Review #4, by academica Prologue

31st December 2013:
Hi Erica! Here from Review Tag :)

I really like how the story so far seems simple and yet very complicated. On the one hand, Hermione seems like she's taking things one day at a time, which she should given what she's been through and the fact that she has children to raise. On the other hand, the subject matter obviously makes the situation more complex. I definitely think it would be realistic for Rose, who seems like daddy's little girl, to reject the idea of her mother starting a relationship with Draco--or with anyone, really.

I do think with a pairing like Dramione, where there are indications in canon that the pair wouldn't have naturally materialized, the burden of proof is on the author to make the ship seem realistic and to make its onset make sense. Perhaps you're going to get to that later, but I didn't feel like I clearly understood from this prologue why Draco would help Harry out (although I can make some guesses), why Harry would ask him to interfere in Hermione's life, and how Hermione and Draco would get past their obvious conflicts. It seems like the relationship we see here is a big step in the future from where we left them at the end of the series, and I would have just liked to get more of a sense of how that occurred.

I also noticed a few typos and grammar snags, but I'm sure your beta will catch them and smooth them out when it comes time for him or her to look over the chapter in more detail.

Good start :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm really glad that you liked this first chapter and can understand where I'm going with this! I will hopefully go back and fix those mistakes that you found! Thanks again for the review!

~Slytherinchica08~


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Review #5, by bookworm530 Haunting Dreams

27th November 2013:
How devastating! Poor Rose was only 4 years old. Nicely written...I look forward to more. Update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate it!

~Slytherinchica08~


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Review #6, by Selene Prologue

14th November 2013:
Oh my goodness, can you see my excited flailing from here? I already want so much more of this story. For a NaNo story, this is dang good! Its so captivating and is a plausible Dramione idea. I have so many questions already hon, which is good since it will make me check this EVERY DAY! I'm pretty sure these questions will be answered later in the story so I'm just going to have to wait, aren't I?

1) How long were Hermione & Ron married?
2) How old are the kids?

I found one grammar error, you had pull threw instead of pull through but its not too major. I know what NaNo is like.

Good luck on NaNo dear, and I cannot wait to read more of this!

Author's Response: Selene, your support for this story is what really makes me continue on! I'm so glad that you have stopped by already and have left me a review! Wow, only that one mistake, I would have figured this chapter would be riddled with them! The kids are very young and I dont think that it follows the actual series.. if it does, that will be very impressive since I just pulled ages out and went with it. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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Review #7, by bookworm530 Prologue

14th November 2013:
Interesting start, look forward to more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope to have the next chapter posted by next thursday, if not a little sooner! I appreciate you stopping by and reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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