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Review #1, by marauderfan All the Devils

29th April 2016:
JENNAAA. You're back AND there's a new chapter! Just so much to be happy about :D
After the misogyny at the end of the last chapter I was ready to punch Clarence, which would probably have resulted in my computer in shards on the floor so I'm glad Richard told Clarence to get out. I'm sure Rose would have done something pretty impressive and drastic in a matter of seconds if Richard hadn't interfered.

And the long-awaited story about Scorpius and Rose finally comes out! I don't know what I was expecting, but it wasn't that. Yeah, I'd be pretty mad at Scorpius too after something like that, first the animal abuse and then trying to kiss Rose's best friend to annoy Rose. But most of all it didn't really seem like that was the one event that really broke them apart. The way Rose talks about it, it kind of feels like they'd been falling apart for a bit before, and that was just what cemented it. Yeah, Rose was petty to play the Death Eater Card, because it's not relevant and probably something Scorpius hears a lot, but what he did has no excuse. Ugh. I can certainly understand all the bitterness that she still holds on to after the end of their relationship.

So at this point Richard knows that Rose is a witch. How is Rose going to know when to tell him, because she hasn't actually told him yet, she just travelled to a place further in time where he already knows? This story always makes me wonder about the intricacy of time travel and how complicated it is to go back and forth through different times and to not know what people already know about you at any given point (I hope that made sense :P )

Interesting at the end as well, I know the idea of what constitutes a scandal is a lot more encompassing in those days and certainly just sitting in the garden together is a scandal. Interesting that that is a scandal yet people were constantly cheating on each other, many men having mistresses, and many women being mistresses. It seems that no matter what Richard and Rose do, there's bound to be scandal.

Great chapter! I'm so glad to see you back and writing again :)

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Review #2, by nott theodore Hell is Empty

5th March 2016:
Hello again, love!

Aha, how typical of Rose not to remember who Nicholas Flamel is :P It's not like he was one of the keys to a mystery that had her parents and an uncle stopping Voldemort in their first year or anything :P Mind you, her history seems generally pretty rusty so I wouldn't be surprised that she's not sure who he is.

I really like the idea of Nicholas and Perenelle having come from the court in Burgundy to England for a time at Richard's request! It's probably actually a lot safer for them to be honest, with what was about to start in Europe, although it was never really safe to be magical (or even considered it) (I'm doing a module on witchcraft right now in case you couldn't tell :P). I also loved the way that you wrote the relationship between the two of them and their role in this world. It's really exciting that they seem to know some things about Rose and that she'll be able to spend time with them to learn more about the world at this time. The hints at the gold ring which I'm assuming link to the creation of the Philosopher's Stone were really cool, too.

I have one minor CC here, which was just the slight inconsistencies in their speech? Nicholas said 'Ze' quite a lot but 'thou' as well, which didn't quite fit with the same sound, but that's just a minor detail.

It was so sweet to see Richard returning to Rose, and the way that she was so happy to see him - as if she was trying to live up to the sort of person that she'll be in the future when she's around Richard. But even though it wasn't exactly socially appropriate at the time, I loved the way that Richard acknowledges how different she is, understands it, and is even happy to react to it. The earlier section when we saw him with Edward before the battle was really sweet, too - I'd love to see Rose and Edward meeting at some point in the story!

I honestly don't know how you manage all the different timelines and work out what's going on with them. I'm so curious how much Rose has actually told him (or the future version of Rose, anyway) and what he knows about - what she knows, even, as I assume she'll learn a lot more in the future...

The ending... I... Ugh. I know you warned us that there was some extreme misogyny at the end of this chapter, but even so, it just made my skin crawl to read that ending with the Duke of Clarence. His behaviour was probably very typical of men at this time, especially men of his status who believed they could have anything they wanted in life. It really grates to read it (and I can imagine how hard it would have been to write) but it's so accurate for the period and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next. I imagine Richard won't be too happy when he finds out what's happened, but I'm pretty sure that Rose will succeed in taking care of herself before that. The only problem might be if George sees her wand and realises that she's actually a witch...

This was another great chapter, and I think I've actually managed to catch up with all your WIPs now, so I can say that I'm looking forward to the next update! :D

Sian :)
For the HPFF Review-A-Thon

Author's Response: Hello again! :)

I imagine Rose hearing the stories at some point, but either getting bored at the details, or just forgetting the name :P Although her remembering Flamel, and being able to tell him things about his future, would be far more problematic...

I'm glad you liked seeing Flamel and Perenelle! :D It was so fun to write them! I'll go back and work on their speech when I have time. Honestly, it's been so hard being consistent that if I do a major edit I'll probably just "modernize" (so to speak) all of the different dialects and accents. :P

I hated writing that scene! But... I do think that it's important to acknowledge the kind of behaviour that men get away with, and especially did in societies like 15th century England. So it was cathartic to write, if also making me super angry. Is that weird? :P

Thanks so much for another lovely review!! :D

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Review #3, by nott theodore Valkyrie

5th March 2016:
Jenna! It's been far too long since I read this story, and I really missed it. But I'm snatching a few spare minutes (I should probably be essay writing) for a good cause, so I'm excited to get back to this!

I've actually just finished reading a novel which tells Cecily Neville's story, so it's great to get back into this again, even if it does start a while after the book ended.

I loved the fact that you threw us right into a really turbulent and dangerous time in the Wars of the Roses (I mean, the whole period was dangerous, but the eve of a battle even more so) and Rose isn't really prepared for that. It meant that we were right back in the thick of things and experienced some of the confusion and disorientation that Rose experiences when she arrives in new places without knowing what to expect, even for someone reasonably familiar with the events from this time.

Dillie was such a great addition, too - it's so alien to think of a ten-year old child being out on the battlefield preparing to serve one of the commanders, but it's something that still happens now in some parts of the world. I thought you did a great job of capturing his fear of what might happen in the battle, even though boys were trained to expect it, and then his superstitious reaction to Rose's appearance.

The way that Rose is planning her trips now to go and see Richard again is really worrying. Obviously she's much better prepared for the time that she'll be spending in the past than she was on the first occasion it happened, but even so, it's really worrying that she's choosing to go back in time. The fact that the potion and Apparition caused her pain this time is even more worrying. I wonder how many more times she's going to be able to go back in time without becoming seriously ill - as she seems to be in the prologue.

The difference in Richard's behaviour was really marked and I loved seeing him receiving her much more lovingly, the way that he did when she first travelled back in time to Barnard Castle. I'm kind of intrigued whether she's visited again in the time between her first appearance (at least, for Rose), because he seems much more aware of the fact that she's not going to be able to stay forever and to be more loving towards her. The two timelines are really interesting to read and see how they intersect.

I know that Richard's going to have to survive this battle (unless Rose's appearance changes history) and I'm really intrigued to see what happens between them afterwards.

The ending was great, too! I'm curious about whether all of the soldiers knew that Lord Arcanus was actually a wizard, especially because this was a period in European history when witch trials and witchcraft theory was becoming much more prominent. But I loved the fact that you incorporated another character from the series, especially since Nicholas Flamel was a real person and we know so little about what he was actually doing. I'm really intrigued to find out more about him and what point in his life he's at, too, and how he's going to fit into the whole story. The Dementors were a great inclusion, as well.

Reading onto the next chapter! ♥

Sian :)
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Author's Response: Hey Sian!!! :D Thanks so much for these awesome reviews! They really inspire me to get working on this story again, hehe.

I'm going to PM you and ask which book it was, that sounds right up my alley.

Yes! Writing these chaotic times was quite hard for me as I only know about what it's like to be in that kind of conflict zone from stories, but I tried to imagine what it would be like to see a little piece from it even if you didn't know quite what was going on. I really enjoyed writing Dillie and going into someone else's POV who isn't one of the main characters, and it was fun imagining how an outsider would see Rose and how weird that would be.

At this point Rose is feeling very reckless and like nothing can affect her. She's very self-centered in that way and doesn't really think about the consequences. It's almost easier to write a character like that because I can just immerse myself in her lack of conscientiousness.

I'm glad you're enjoying the timelines, they are SO hard to keep track of, especially when there are scenes I haven't written myself yet.

They definitely wouldn't know that he was a wizard, although Richard might have more of an idea. Thanks so much for the great review! :D

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Review #4, by nott theodore Wishes

9th January 2016:
Hi again, Jenna! Yay, I'm slowly catching up (procrastinating essay writing means a lot more time for HPFF again, haha, although I should not be doing this :P). I've missed reading about Rose and Richard as well, so it was great to see them again in this chapter and know I have two more chapters to come after this!

The opening of this chapter was so much fun - I really love finding out about people's head canons for the Weasleys, particularly the next generation, so it was great to read about the relationships between all of them here, especially because it made sense and segued into the narrative. It made me laugh that Molly was so frustrating to Rose, but I loved the way you captured the family dynamics - even though they all do things which irritate each other, and they're very different too, they all still love each other.

I can totally imagine George trying to embarrass all his nieces in front of guys, though :P

The superstitions about the fountain were so fun to read about as well! I feel like they're the sort of thing that grow up around a lot of different traditions and I liked Rose's down to earth perspective on how they started, trying to get people to give more money to St. Mungo's. The idea of using the Atrium as a meeting place was great, too - it's always brilliant when people add to the small parts of the Ministry we know about for their stories.

Kean was such an interesting character, too. I can't help wondering if he'll become more important later on, or if he's just one of the characters making up the fabric of the Ministry. He was a lot of fun, anyway, and I liked how Rose got on with him instantly; I got the reference to King Solomon as well, and I really liked the idea of someone using that with a pair of hags arguing over a cat :P

Is there something going on with Cecelia? I couldn't quite tell in this chapter, to be honest, but the way that Rose described her behaviour was enough to make me curious about it. Rose didn't exactly seem to suspect anything, but maybe I just have a suspicious mind from all your other stories :P

Argh, why does Rose never pay attention to all the important things that people are telling her? It's so frustrating to watch her preparing to go away again, even when she's read all of the information from Archie's research and found out that it's actually more dangerous if it's taken deliberately, but at the same time it's really compelling and I can't not read about her doing it, if that makes sense. But I feel like her planning might not help - I mean, how is she going to explain what all those objects are if she goes back to that period? How is she going to stop herself being accused of witchcraft (even though she is a witch) when she turns up with all these products that even the richest people in the land don't own? And how is she going to guarantee that she'll go back to Richard's time? I mean, so far she's been quite lucky and it seems like they're being drawn together in a way, but at the same time I don't think she can guarantee that she's going back there. Then what will she do?

Even though Rose is really headstrong and doesn't necessarily think about the consequences (at all) of her actions, I really do love her as a character, though.

Hermione was awesome here, too! I love her being a mum and answering back to her kids when they think they have smart replies for her, although I feel like constantly mentioning she was the best in her year might not be a very good thing for them. And I'm curious about who the prisoner is, because she really hates them. Of the people who survived the war, one I think she'd really hate is Fenrir Greyback, so maybe it's him?

Richard's section was really interesting, too - I felt kind of sorry for him, to be honest, the way that he's quite a brooding character and because of his status he can't really confide in anyone about how he feels. I love the way you write Nick, though, composing the poems and love songs to ladies the way that he later composes a poem about his own death - he's such a vivid character and it's great to see him as part of this story. The way that you portrayed the atmosphere at court was really interesting, too; I liked the way that they were pretending to be polite and dignified but there's a lot of double entendre and bawdiness behind it all, because they really weren't as far from attitudes today as we often think. I'm looking forward to seeing Rose and Richard together again soon, but I can't help feeling it might not be a good thing for either of them...

Sian :)

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Review #5, by LittleMissAutumn Hell is Empty

7th January 2016:
Nicholas Flimmel! He has the sorceror's stone! I completely forgot who he was, but I've recently introduced my little sister to Harry Potter so the other night we watched the first one that mentions him. I think it's really clever of you to introduce him into your story. Richard's brother is horrid. Hopefully he comes back into the room before Rose actually whips the wand out and does something that she might regret later. Your writing, as always, is a marvel. Update soon please and happy new year. :)

Author's Response: Hello! :) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! :) I'm glad you were excited to see Flamel - it's so fun writing minor characters like him into the story. I will try and update soon, thank you! ♥

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Review #6, by marauderfan Hell is Empty

26th December 2015:
Hi Jenna! I was so excited to see a new chapter on this again :)

Haha, Rose doesn't remember where she's heard the name Flamel before... I find that quite realistic, actually. I mean, I'd been imagining she was going to have this kind of 'aha!' moment but it makes perfect sense that she wouldn't. After all, she didn't spend six months trying to figure out who he was in order to save the Philosophers Stone - she probably just saw him on a chocolate frog card or heard his name in passing during a class at Hogwarts. And she didn't seem to show any recognition of Nicholas de Mimsy-Porpington either, maybe she never did know his full name! I'd believe it. :p

Nicholas and Perenelle were such a wonderful addition to this chapter and I loved Rose's meeting with them! It's super cool to see other magical folk, especially as this precedes the Statute of Secrecy by about two hundred years so it's interesting to see how visible magical folk are in society and how much they're still trying to hide (because this is, I think, the heyday of witch burnings.)

Also, this chapter raises such interesting questions about Rose's future/past self visiting. So she doesn't have to deal with explaining it all to Richard, because she's already done so - but how much has she said, and about what? Did she leave anything out? It may not be too difficult to deal with at present, but it means she has a lot of sleuthing to do to figure out what to say because at some point in her future she's going to come back and have to say the right things. I just love this aspect of the story :D

Clarence, such a jerk. Ugh. Sadly I guess this isn't too abnormal behaviour for the time period :( I hope Rose breaks his arm.

Awesome chapter and I can't wait to read more. Keep up the great work!

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Review #7, by marauderfan Valkyrie

10th September 2015:
JENNA ♥ HI and also ksfhjdks I am so excited to see an upeate on this! and also congrats on your 100th review!! and also sorry for any typos as this is a phone review. okay, and now onto the story.

It's so different seeing Richard like this, which I assume is because of how long Rose was gone and how often Richard thought about her, he's especially affectionate now that he knows she won't be around forever. In this scene he was a lot more like the first time Rose met him for that brief moment.

Your ability to set the scene is really amazing and as always I loved the historical details in this one, as well as how you set up the dementors! I didn't think anything of the mist at first, or Rose being grumpy, but it just tied together so well. Great writing.

Nicholas Flamel - wow, that was a huge surprise! I forgot he'd have been alive at that era as well. And that makes the story so much richer, all these little canon things you add and how much overlap you've created between the HP world and the muggle world of that time period.

I love this story! (i probably sound like a broken record, but it's true) Wonderful chapter.

Author's Response: KRISTIN!!! You are the sweetest and so kind for reviewing this and I have no excuses for not responding until now for the 100TH REVIEW!! WOW!!

I'm so glad you found it interesting to see how Richard has changed. It's quite tricky writing them on different timelines but leaves a lot of freedom for character development.

The dementors actually kind of snuck up on me, I was writing about the mist and had this eureka moment of of course there were dements! I'm so pleased you liked that part.

Nicholas Flamel is one of my favourite random historical characters because he was actually a real person and its cool to think how he would interect with the Muggle and magical worlds throughout his very long life. I wish more people wrote about him!

Thanks so much, you lovely! ♥

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Review #8, by LittleMissAutumn Valkyrie

1st September 2015:
AH YOU UPDATED! What's going to happen to Richard?! He's going to survive the battle, right? He has to survive, they've barely been reunited again! I'm just as confused as Rose but I like Richard better this way where he openly admits his feelings for Rose. They're like two star-crossed lovers and it's driving me crazy. They need a happy ending! D;

Update soon please!

Author's Response: Hello!! :D It's awesome that you like this story, that makes me so happy! I can promise you that he survives this battle, because Richard's part of the story more or less correspond with the real Richard's history. I'm actually glad you're confused, because Rose is, and she's still figuring out the whole time travel thing. It's so fun for me but really challenging to write them on these separate timelines, hehe.

Thank you so much for the amazing review!!! You're awesome, and I plan to update soon!! ♥

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Review #9, by patronus_charm Wishes

28th June 2015:
House Cup 2015 Ė Ravenclaw

Hey again Jenna!

Haha, I liked how you went into the intricacies of the Weasley family and how there was almost a hierarchy within them as it was almost like that with the original Weasley family in the HP books. Oh, Molly, I can just imagine how annoying she would be so poor Rose for having to deal with her!

Another thing I really loved was how you went into detail about all the myths and superstitions regarding wishing in the Fountain of Fair Fortune as some of them were pretty funny and it did make me wonder if they was any truth behind them because in Harry Potter magic is real, so whatís the difference with wishing? I loved Cecilia too as she really made me laugh and I could see exactly why her and Rose got along.

Ew, ew, ew is all I can say to Molly as she really is annoying and she has that horrible ability to bring up awkward facts in front of friends so boo to her. I loved how Choís son made an appearance as that literally made my day as he seemed pretty funny about how he brought up how Cho and Harry dated as that was cute! ♥

Oooh Rose is taking her next to the past very seriously, I hope she manages to get back there without any damage to herself but I just have an ominous feeling about this. Oh well, for now we get to see more sassy Hermione who seriously had me cracking about how she expected Hugo to do the summer reading, I think she was the only one who ever did it, bless her! I do wonder who the prisoner is, Iím guessing some prominent former Death Eater?

Richard really is someone who needs their love to always be there and itís actually kind of sweet if a bit sad how much he misses her. Iím so excited to go back to the past though I have no idea what cover story Rose will give for her disappearing for months, it had better be a good one!

Another fab chapter and I canít wait for more! ♥


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Review #10, by patronus_charm Missing

28th June 2015:
House Cup 2015 Ė Ravenclaw

Hey again Jenna!

That first section with Richard was adorable, lovely and heart-breaking all together! ♥ It was just so sweet to see him be the classic romantic and pine over Rose in that way. I liked how you compared him to Edward and George as that really showed how genuine and real his love towards Rose was. Thatís why it was all the more sadder when he found out she was gone as you could really feel his heart break, especially when he realised she hadnít said goodbye to him as I just wanted to give him a hug then. But no, Richard, donít forget her! Sheís trying to come back itís just a lot more complicated than you realise.

Aw Dennis Creevey is in this story! ♥ I really do love him so Iím so glad that heís in this! Hahaha, I didnít think working in that department would be that interesting, but from just hearing the stories of Creevey and Hazlehurst I can imagine no day is a dull one. Aw, Baubles though, I do feel quite worried about the cat and I hope that Baubles was eventually found.

Ooh somethingís changed with Archie, and thatís not just to do with the magical philosophers (though I love the idea of there being such a thing!). I can see why he would be cautious if the whole Queen Victoria scenario played out but that would ruin all the fun Rose could possibly have. Though I donít approve at all of her stealing those potions as I have a feeling that nothing good at all will come from this and sheíll only get herself into more trouble as they could just be tester potions or dangerous or something. Hmm, I have a feeling something very bad will come from this.

Another fab chapter! ♥


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Review #11, by patronus_charm A Closed Circle

28th June 2015:
House Cup 2015 Ė Ravenclaw

Hey there Jenna, I finally have time to catch up on this wonderful story! ♥

Hahaha, well that was a dramatic arrival to say the least! Iím not sure if I feel should feel sorry for the state Rose arrived or just laugh at her because she just seems to be so pitiful. I wonder what was up with Scorpius though, because yes I get that Rose arriving in clothes from centuries ago and looking a bit bewildered is strange, but he seemed oddly cageyÖ

For some reason, I really enjoyed the St. Mungoís scene because itís just quite fun to see how different parts of wizarding society work. It was such a contrast to from the craziness of being with Richard because here everything seemed so orderly and they had a cure right away. Scorpius staying with Rose was interesting too, especially as he denied anything between him and Lucy. Hmm, weíll just have to see I guess.

Aw, I love Hermione! She really is all-knowing I swear and if she had seen Rose in the dress she would have been able to put two and two together right away. It was sad to see what was happening to Arthur and that they would probably have to sell the Burrow but I guess thatís sadly just what happens when you reach that stage in life. Another quick thing I loved about Hermione was her sass regarding Malfoy as I wouldnít mind if he got a Bludger in the face either. :P

Oooh the last scene was strange! I mean, I found it really weird that Rose could find out all these facts about the people she was hanging out with so it must have been even stranger for her to have everything about their lives out in the open for her.

Ooh this was a great chapter and Iím intrigued to see what happens next! ♥


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Review #12, by LittleMissAutumn Wishes

10th May 2015:
This is by far my favorite story that I've come across on this website. The idea is so original and I love how you've written Rose and gone back and forth between her and Richard. I have a gut feeling that Scorpius is going to end up going back in time with her in one of those adventures and it is NOT going to be pretty. Also, there's something up with the inmate who's trying to get parole. Maybe they have to do with the feeling Rose and Richard had when they were looking at the stars but there's definitely a connection. Also, is Sir Nicholas going to end up being Sir Headless Nick, the ghost of Hogwarts? oh so many questions...

I can't wait to read more! Update soon please! 10/10

Author's Response: Hey there!! Wow, what an AMAZING review!!

I'm so honoured that you like this story. It's so special to me and I absolutely have loved working on it, so it's so lovely to get such lovely feedback.

I'm glad you like the adventures and are noticing all the little details and mysteries. It's an awesome feeling as the writer to know that readers are wondering and asking questions.

Thank you so much!! This made my day when I first received it and is making me smile so much now!! ♥

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Review #13, by marauderfan Wishes

1st May 2015:
egads it's a new chapter! *pounces*

The pigeon incident gets a mention again. Gah, you just keep drawing out this suspense. I MUST KNOW. :P

I love all the superstition about coin throwing into the St Mungo's fountain. It all just sounds so wizardy - stuff that's really silly but makes sense in a world that doesn't take itself seriously anyway.

I am really curious if there's something weird going on with Cecelia in that scene. Of course, I'd probably be embarrassed if work colleagues came up to me while I had stuffed half a sandwich in my mouth, but it seems like (or at least Rose thinks) there's something else going on. Huh... Anyway, I really like the friendship between Cecelia and Rose.

thinking of the special potion I had taken from Archieís flat the day before and feeling increasingly sure it was the right decision. -- ROSE. WHY would you think that. >__< I'm also not sure how I feel about her getting so much stuff prepared to take with her. On one hand, that's great that she's planning ahead and self sufficient and has all she needs. But on the other hand, does she really need to bring makeup to the 1400's? It sounds like more trouble than it's worth, haha. Bringing any stuff from the future to the past just sounds kind of unwise to me - like what if it gets into the wrong hands? How is she going to explain all that stuff?

but yeah somewhere in there she also mentioned something about her tie to the 14th century - how DOES she know she'll end up there? What if she ends up in the 1700s instead? Or like, the Pleistocene epoch and England is full of glaciers and mastodons? SHE HAS NOT THOUGHT THIS OUT AT ALL.

Wow, those are some harsh words from Hermione about that inmate. Is it Fenrir Greyback? I can't think of anyone else she'd hate that much.

Aw, Richard is doubting himself and pining for Rose. Absence makes the heart grow fonder, I guess. I enjoyed seeing this group again though. Lol, Sir Nicholas... I guess he's not really known for his eloquence. I can't believe you wrote out a whole song, too! I am sort of curious about the rest of it :p

Anyway, like all the others, this was a fantastic chapter and I'm so excited to see what happens next!!

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Review #14, by nott theodore Missing

6th March 2015:
Hi Jenna! I've been away travelling but I saw that you'd updated this and now that I'm back, I wanted to stop by - I love seeing this story updated!

The opening section with Richard was so interesting! I thought you captured his character really well, and I was really intrigued about whether you were going to show what happened in the past after Rose had left. I was certainly getting the impression that Richard was beginning to feel something for Rose but was constrained by his own notions of chivalry and societal conventions - the way that he was unlike his brothers in that respect, and wanted to respect Rose, was really sweet. The opening to this chapter made it clear that he really is growing to care about her and he wants to act on that interest, which still retains some of the fascination of the fairy lady that he remembers from his childhood. It was so interesting to see the way that he did all that was in his power to try and find Rose and was so terrified that something had happened to her. I really wonder what his reaction will be like when she returns to his time, and especially at what point in the relationship both of them will be at in their own time.

Rose seems to be getting really frustrated with her normal life in the present day again, and it's kind of worrying how much she thinks about returning and finding a way to go back to Richard. Part of me can understand why she wants to return, but with all of the other information that we discovered in this chapter, it's very reckless of her to do so without considering the consequences!

Even in her boredom and disinterest in her return to work, I loved all of the details that you included in the section about the Floo regulations, like the fact that the fireplaces had to be checked on a regular basis, and the different complaints and call outs that the workers in the department get. I also really enjoyed the working atmosphere you created for her, with the dynamics between the two men that work there, treating her so differently - Dennis seems really sweet and kind, whereas Hazlehurst doesn't appear to care much for her because he knows that she doesn't really want to be there.

The news about Archie getting caught in the Floo network as he tried to Apparate was really interesting to read, and I can't blame Rose for taking the opportunity to go along and see Archie again and hear what he has to say about it. I only wish that she'd actually listen to some of it, too...

Hmm, I don't know if I'm interpreting this right, but with the clues about the length of Archie's beard and the way that he looks so tired, plus got caught in the Floo network while he was trying to apparate (after being out with two Muggle friends, which seems kind of convenient) makes me think that he too has been travelling in time as part of the Department of Mysteries' experiments into the time travel potions. If he has been, he definitely seems to have considered the consequences much more than Rose (although since he was part of the team developing the potion then he should be more aware of them, I suppose) but also to have been kind of badly affected by it. I wonder whether he and Rose might meet in the past at any point, too...

The conversation with Archie about time and time travel was so interesting to read - I loved all of the consideration and detail that you'd put into that, about the different ways that time could be affected, about what the nature of time actually is - it was fascinating to read, and definitely something I was intrigued in, even if Rose didn't pay enough attention to it!

I can't help but wondering what the ending of the story about the cat was, and whether Archie was trying to tell Rose the story as a sort of warning to let her know the consequences of what might happen, particularly if he knows that she's taken the potion but doesn't know where she's been with it. It's fascinating to think of all the different consequences something so tiny might have! And I'm intrigued about whether we'll find out who that dog belonged to, actually.

Part of me is wondering whether, in letting Rose go to the bathroom, Archie knew that she'd go snooping and he wanted her to find the potion. I don't want to think that he'd do that, particularly with the different (and extremely worrying) notes that accompanied his study of the potions, but he already looked the other way so that he 'didn't see' Rose stealing the first potion.

I'm so intrigued about what's going to happen next, particularly because I'm sure Rose is determined to go back to somewhere in Richard's timeline, and I think it could be even more dangerous this time...

Sian :)

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Review #15, by marauderfan Missing

5th March 2015:
Hi Jenna! I was thrilled to find another update on this story! It really is one of my absolute favourite stories on the archive.

The beginning part with Richard is so great. I love seeing his thought process and how he views someone from the future like Rose, and all the different pressures of society on him and how his peers would behave in similar situations. You write the historical aspect of this story so well and I love it.

Most of all I love how much depth you've gone into with the time travel! I was just glued to the screen during Rose's conversation with Archie. Besides the fact that I got a really bad feeling when Rose decided to visit him (because I knew she'd end up sticking her nose into something), I loved that conversation they had about sending a cat back in time, and the different interpretations of how time works, whether it's predetermined or in flux - gah, I just love that stuff and I found their discussion so interesting and I'm glad you went into all that detail. Awesome.

Oh no! Rose is thinking dangerous thoughts at the end there! Uggghh. Not only did she steal a potion (this could really get Archie into trouble), but the kind of flippant, entitled attitude she has about it all is very worrisome. Didn't the notes say something about it being most dangerous when it's deliberate? And I'm willing to bet that the piece of the story Archie hadn't gotten to yet is the mkst important. Rose is really blinded by her own obsession at this point and I really wonder how things are going to end up when she goes back.

this story is addicting. Keep up the awesome work!

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Review #16, by Charmnight39 A Closed Circle

24th January 2015:
I am loving it. I am a history buff so I love being transported to that time period. You do a great job though showing the modern items that we would miss.

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Review #17, by nott theodore A Closed Circle

23rd January 2015:
Hi, love! So you just seem to be updating everything at once right now and I have no idea how you manage to write so fast and post such great chapters, but I'm very jealous and trying desperately to read and review so that I don't get behind again :P

I was so happy to see Play the Devil updated again! I've missed this story and Rose especially, and it was great to delve back into things here. And even though it's been quite a while since you last updated, because of Rose travelling back to the present day in this chapter it didn't feel like we'd missed out on very much at all.

I really liked how much was going on in the twenty-first century - how there seemed to be so many more people and things around Rose that she had to deal with, compared to the world that she's just left. It really emphasises the differences in the time periods.

The first scene between Rose and Scorpius was really great! So much to comment on but I don't have a lot of time so I'm going to have to try and type quickly because we both know by now short reviews seem to be impossible for me :P I'm still thinking that Scorpius cheated on Rose because of the mention of Cecelia and the way he seemed to shut up a bit then, but it was interesting to see that the sting has gone out of him being around and Rose is seeing him a bit more objectively (well, she's still getting irritated by lots of things he does but slightly more objective than before) because she's developing feelings for Richard and what Scorpius did to her doesn't hurt so much now because of that.

I really liked all the little quirks and aspects that you gave to his character in that scene, since we haven't really seen much of him yet although he's been mentioned quite a bit. The hypochondriac thing definitely sounds annoying! But I'm fairly certain that he's being sneaky about something - didn't he pick up the vial of potion? I'm intrigued about why he said no and what he's going to do with it. And also how Rose will get back to the past again because she must do after other scenes that we've seen.

The scene in St. Mungo's was great, and I especially loved the different ailments that the other patients were suffering from :P It made me laugh that the witch was getting annoyed with their stupidity and directing other people to go in first when she could see their illnesses weren't serious - I feel like that's definitely something a bored receptionist would do! And the donkey thing made me laugh too!

Aw, it was so sweet to see how emotional Rose got to see her mum again, even though her mum couldn't really understand it. It did a great job of emphasising the way that time passes for Rose but not for the others in the present day, and I'm really intrigued about what would happen if Rose ended up spending months in the past - would it translate as just hours in the present day?

Hugo was quite sweet to Rose in the scene between them - a lot sweeter than I was expecting for a teenage boy, but I loved the way that he also got a little protective and then couldn't really care when Rose started telling him about the boy that she'd met. That fit his character so well.

We don't often see the internet making an appearance in stories like this unless it's a wizarding version, but I love Rose knowing enough to head off to the library and use the computers, although it was still obvious that she didn't know what she was doing completely because she couldn't work the mouse properly and didn't know what it was called. But I love the idea of her heading to wikipedia to find out what she can about the people she's met. I am impressed that she resisted clicking on Richard's name, though, because I'm not sure that I would have been able to!

I really enjoyed this chapter and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next, whether people notice that something's changed about her and if she's going to return to the past soon or not!

Sian :)

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Review #18, by missatron Prologue

23rd January 2015:
Hi again! I'm dropping by to read this - it looked interesting, so I thought that I'd take a peek!

I really, really just adore your writing style! It flows brilliantly throughout the whole chapter and is such a breeze to read. Honestly, if I had the time, I could read it all day. Your descriptions create such vivid images in my mind, it's impossible! I loved the quilt metaphor, very imaginative!

I love the idea that Rose is effectively dying from going back in time, but she doesn't actually regret it. It makes the start seem so powerful, strong and emotive. I loved how your jumped straight in with telling us what is going on. Your characterisation of Rose is such a unique one - I'm used to her being quiet, studious, not someone who is in love, clever and a criminal. I like how you have taken a character who already exists and made her your own.

You kept some information from us too. That makes us want to know: who is HE? What significance does he have? Is there a complicated backstory? You're leaving me in the dark, which is driving me insane!

A great read!

Missy ♥

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Review #19, by marauderfan A Closed Circle

22nd January 2015:
Do mine eyes deceive me or is this a NEW CHAPTER?!?! :D :D YES IT IS AND I AM SO EXCITED

Ooh, I'm really curious what happened between Scorpius and Rose. I'm also under the impression that it was not entirely Scorpius' fault, as we're seeing this all from Rose's likely biased perspective. But he clearly did something, because he acts like he regrets it. What I can't figure out is whether he's trying to help her because he actually still cares a lot about her, or because he's trying to make up for whatever transgression he did.

The twenty first century seems far busier. I love how you showed this through Rose feeling like just a number being processed at St. Mungo's.

It's nice seeing the Weasley family again though, and like Rose, I feel like it's been so long since I've read about them here, but for Hermione and Hugo it's only been a day since last time they saw Rose. Hermione's reaction to Rose being extra sentimental was funny.

Hahaha, Rose looked Edward up on Wikipedia. I seriously forget about the existence of the internet in fic, it's like two separate worlds, but this is happening like present day so of course even magical folk would have some knowledge of the internet. I am SO impressed with her self control though, and the way she didn't click to find out about Richard - I would not have been able to avoid clicking and finding out anyway! I'm the person who sometimes reads the last page of books before I actually get there and potentially end up spoiling it for myself. It's literally the worst habit.

This was such a good chapter, and I love how it delved into a bit of the complications of time travel, how Rose finally realises how serious it is (when she's debating clicking to find out more) and that knowing things can be dangerous. And after all that she still wants to return to the past. I guess she hasn't learnt her important lesson yet... that'll come when she seriously messes something up, I guess :p

Loved it!!!

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Review #20, by BellaLestrange87 Rose

21st December 2014:
I just lost what I wrote due to accidentally going back, so I'm going to try again. I'm beginning to think that I should write my reviews in a word processor and copy and paste them into the box.

I loved the relationship that Rose her parents, and the banter between them. The part where Ron accidentally exploded the coffeemaker made me laugh. It's so like Ron, being too heavy with the magic, and Hermione having to show him how to do the spell properly and not break the coffeemaker. I can remember Hermione lecturing Harry and Ron in their Hogwarts years about Hogwarts and stuff she read in Hogwarts, A History that they never bothered to learn about.

"The pigeon incident in June"? Ron, what did you do? Although, considering he had to perform a Confundus Charm just to get his licence in the first place, can't have been anything good. Especially if he got it revoked.

I really liked Richard's part. He's clearly in love with his woman - Rose, as I now know. I did notice that he specifically mentions that she's a witch. I think back then if you were a witch you got burned at the stake. If Rose told him that they obviously trust each other enough for her to put her life in his hands.

The final paragraph was excellent. There was one mistake Rose did not make. Did Rose make a lot of mistakes? Was one of these mistakes the action that set in motion how she ended up in the mid-to-late 1400s in the first place? Or telling him she was a witch? Maybe he didn't care, but I'm sure he probably had sterner-minded advisor who thought differently. And yes, most people probably don't want to know that they have two or three years to live. :)

I only noticed three things that I think I should point out to you:

'"You will be the only one who thinks so,Ē I inform her through a mouthful of toast.' You slip into present tense her, and the rest of the chapter is in past tense.

In his younger days he had enjoyed chasing after occasional the dark wizard or two, though now he was mostly resigned to paperwork. after occasionally the dark wizard or two

I answered a memo about a faulty Portkey found in Derbyshire and by promising Mssrs. Hazlehurst and Creevey would be on it as soon as they were finished with their current task. in Derbyshire by promising Mssrs. Hazlehurst

Overall, this was another excellent chapter!

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Review #21, by BellaLestrange87 Prologue

21st December 2014:
This has been on my Reading List for a while and I haven't started it. And, since I've promised myself that I'm going to review every chapter of everything I read from now on, you should expect a lot of reviews, both on this and on The Girl From Slytherin.

I really liked the first section, where you talked about time and their quilt of... well, time. (Bad descriptor.) The fact that they get angry at people who manipulate time ties in perfectly with Hermione's comment in the third book about wizards who mess with it and the fact that bad things happen to them. Also, that whole bit is really poetic and nice and just well done.

I liked how you described the growing use of technology, and how it's made us worse towards nature. It's something we sometimes look at with a blind eye, or just ignore altogether, and I like the fact that Time is clearly not ignoring it.

I loved Rose's section. So many unanswered questions come up here - who is this lover of hers? Scorpius? How did she come by that necklace? Why is she breaking into the Department of Mysteries and stealing Harry's invisibility cloak? That reckless time a few months ago that she described: was it the source of all this trouble?

That final section was also amazing. This clearly doesn't seem to be a very happy marriage. Since these two people appear to be very rich, is very accurate - from what I know about the late 1400s, arranged marriages among rich families were very common. Have to preserve the money, I guess. What I also noticed that was period-accurate was how the wife automatically curtsied to her husband. You really did a good job here bringing out a sense of the times, of how the man was always in charge and basically controlled the woman's life.

I love the sense of foreboding at the end: the man has only a few years to live, and there is a small pendant around his neck, the same pendant that Rose described as missing from around her neck. I strongly suspect that the necklace has something to do with her being feverish and diseased and why he is dying.

This was an amazing first chapter! (Because I have no idea how to end reviews any other way.)

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Review #22, by patronus_charm Starlit Night

1st November 2014:
Hi again Jenna! Iím just trying to catch up on your all stories today :D

Wah wah wah that moment with Richard ♥ wah wah wah so many feels ♥ wah wah wah it was so perfect ♥ I really loved it as they just opened up to one another and even though it was only a little bit it just seemed to have revealed so much. Roseís comments about Hugo made me laugh so much about how he was a brat as it was a nice touch to add in a bit of humour to the otherwise serious section. I feel so bad for Richard because he does genuinely seem to want to marry for love and have someone he really cares for, itís just obviously a little hard in those times to find someone like that and even though heíll sort of have it with Rose, I know it obviously canít last because of the whole time travel situation. Wah, that section was just so angsty!

I really loved how Richard taught her the history of the English kings and Iím impressed by how you managed to condense it down but make sure that all the facts were still there as it couldnít have been an easy job! Richard seemed so sad when he was recounting that story for some reason, I canít help but wonder what he was really thinking and feeling and whether he wanted to be king at that moment in time or whether he got the urge later on in life. Hmm, so many questionsÖ.

Bahaha, poor Rose forgetting about all the social customs of the time! She must have made Callumís day apologising to him though! I really love all this time Richard and Rose are spending together as they really do seem to be learning about one another as well as learning from one another too and itís so cute and adorable and just wonderful! ♥ There was another comedy scene with Apollo who is, indeed, a very adorable war horse! But the elbow grabbing and looking at the stars moment was my favourite bit of the whole chapter because of the feels! ♥ Though the whole someone walking on your grave feel did creep me out and I hope this isnít an omen.

But wah, why did Rose have to go back to the present? Just as she and Richard were getting so close she had to leave him, oh well, I guess I can find out more about her and Scorpius now! A great chapter and sorry for this rambling review, because itís even leaving me feeling confused :P


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Review #23, by marauderfan Starlit Night

21st October 2014:
I'm so impressed with the historical background in this story - you must have done a lot of research. It's what really sets this story up well and makes it feel real, all these things are happening on such a rich historical backdrop. Not only the succession of kings and who's related to whom, but the societal things as well like Rose thanking the servants out of habit, or accidentally apologising to them - it continues to remind me just how out of place she is even after so long in the past.

Hmm. I think Scorpius cheated on her. Based on the short discussion of him in the beginning of the chapter, and then about halfway through when Rose is lamenting things that suck in the modern day, like bad haircuts or adulterous partners. It's a clue! Scorpius cheated on her... with a hairstylist :p ok, scratch the last part, but. that is what I think. :p

I loved the scenes with Rose and Richard together, particularly when they went to the stables and Rose was so forward with him and still playful - it's always amusing to me to see Richard try and step out of his natural formality and how Rose brings that out.

Wow, the end has me wondering and guessing all sorts of things. That bit about the starts creepily glowing like a face was so eerie and definitely held some dark sense of foreboding - first something strange going on with Richard, and then weird signs in the sky, and I feel like the "walking over your grave" comment was actually pretty important. I'm sure Rose didn't mean it literally, but... I'm sensing a lot more meaning in it than she probably intended. Ahh and then all of a sudden Rose is back in the twenty first century! In the middle of the night when she was sleeping! How did she get there? I thought it was only Apparition that caused it. Did Scorpius find the potion in her bag and bring her back? Omg so many questions, I guess I have to be patient and wait and see :p

Awesome chapter, Jenna!

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Review #24, by nott theodore Starlit Night

3rd October 2014:
Hi Jenna! Ah, I was so excited to see another chapter of this story up, and just when I've got internet (although it's still very temperamental) back!

Yay for Rose and Richard alone time! I've been excited to read some more of this, because as good as the other chapters have been I really enjoy reading about the two of them together and seeing the way that their relationship is slowly developing. I really liked the way that Rose went out to go and find him and didn't just sit there and let things happen around her as I imagine most women at this time would have been expected to do. It's great that you're still highlighting all the differences - however small and insignificant they might seem - between Rose's world and the one that she's found herself in. She's more than a bit incongruous in this setting, and although she's making the best of it and seems to have been accepted for what she is, it isn't easy to keep up the pretence. Small things like the scene with the servant who's so surprised that she even acknowledges him make this so much more believable and help us to fit in with Rose better, because we identify with her character much more than the others (at least, I do :P).

Anyway, Rose and Richard time. Yes, thank you! I liked their conversation and the fact that Richard is still so restrained and formal with Rose and can't help but be surprised by how 'forward' she is - after their first meeting (well, Rose's first meeting), I can't help but wonder how they'll progress to that stage in their relationship! I'm really intrigued whether or not, eventually, Rose will tell Richard the truth and explain fully all her lies and what the reaction will be then. It was great to see Richard talk about his siblings and family as well, and start to open up to Rose a bit more.

The historical background was interesting! I already knew about it of course, but I think it works well to help readers place this time in history and put Rose's appearance in context, as well as making sense to be included since Rose doesn't really know any of the history either.

The scene in the stable was really cute! I liked the way that Richard gradually warmed to Rose and she managed to get him to take things a little less seriously over the course of them spending some time together. Although he's still surprised when she takes hold of his elbow :P

I actually really enjoyed Rose's introspection in this chapter as well. I think it's the first time that she's really shown the same sort of introspection in this story, as before she's probably not been entirely honest with herself about certain things, but I think it's great to show that, like she says, her time spent in the past has changed the way she thinks about things and forced her to look at herself a bit more. And she's realising that she's starting to fall for Richard!

Hmm, the scene with them watching the stars was really sweet. I liked the closeness between the two of them and the reminder again that this England is very different to the one that Rose has known, but also the fact that she's starting to be conscious of whether or not she can mention Astronomy without being suspected of witchcraft or something. And then Richard has the funny turn! I'm curious about what it was that caused that, as I'm really intrigued to see how you'll link it in somewhere else in the story (I think I know your writing well enough by now to believe that will happen!). The 'walking over your grave' comment was really interesting too, I'm wondering if that will have some sort of impact on it...

And the ending! I definitely wasn't expecting her to be pulled back to the future the way that she was but in a way at least Scorpius didn't go back into the past as well and meet Richard and challenge him to a duel or something :P I'm so intrigued by how she got pulled back to the future and whether it was because of Scorpius or just because the potion was wearing off in her system... I guess that I'll have to wait and see!

Sian :)

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Review #25, by GingeredTea Richard

1st October 2014:
First off, I know it has nothing to do with you, but that chapter image is awesome. :)

From the very opening of this chapter, I could sense the portrayal of a man trying to distract himself with a simple morning routine. You managed to do this so subtly and so well that while it was an immediate 'sense' I had, the thought did not exactly cross my mind so bluntly until he admits to himself in the story that he is trying not to think of Rose.

Then you begin this sentence: "Agnes had let him be the highwayman". This especially long one stands out clear as a run on thought of the character and does so perfectly!

"Richard liked to internally boast of his denial of fate." Generally I find when someone has to internally boast anything, it's because they're trying to convince themselves.

Somehow, Richard's old world speech/thought patterns and actions brings a new level of humor to his awkward interactions with Rose. I found myself laughing quite a few times!

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