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Review #1, by TreacleTart Riddle Me This

6th May 2015:
Hey there!

I'm here with the final review that you won from my Not So Evil Villain Challenge!

This was really interesting idea. I love that Valerie wasn't intimidated or scared of Tom at all. I think it throws him off a little bit because everyone usually cowers around him.

Instantly, when she tries to befriend him and eventually starts to fall for him, I know it's going to end badly for her. I kept hoping that she might escape unscathed, but I knew that the likelihood of it was slim to none.

It was unusual to see Tom Riddle open up to someone. Usually, everyone writes him as so closed off and private. That aspect of this was refreshing. I do have a hard time imagining him bonding with someone truly as I'm not sure he's capable of love, but I could see him feeling some sort of minor affection for her, like the type someone might feel for a pet.

I would like to offer you a bit of constructive criticism for this story. You switched POV's a couple of times and even though the voice of each character was distinct, I found it very confusing to follow. I actually had to go back and re-read several sections to make sure I understood. I would suggest maybe putting Tom's POV into italics, so that it's a bit easier to distinguish immediately. Otherwise, we really only understand who's POV it is once we get to the dialogue. I think just that little tweak would make it read much easier.

All in all, another good story! Thank you again for entering my challenge! I hope you enjoyed it!


Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I have had people say about the POV, so I've changed the way I now do it whenever the POV changes within the story. :)


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Review #2, by LilyEPotter Riddle Me This

6th March 2014:
This was an interesting look into the early life of Tom Riddle, however I did have a little bit of trouble following when the story was from Tom's point of view or Valerie's point of view. After what Tom had done at the orphanage, it would make sense that the children who had been there would have been apprehensive about him and knew exactly when he would be back, if only to stay out of his way. It's too sad that no one had warned Valerie about him before he had returned or warned her to be cautious of him. On the other hand, it didn't seem like Tom was being as careful as he had been previously concerning his homework. If he didn't want questions about his homework or his other plans, then why bring out the parchment, quill and ink? Especially when Valerie has shown to be curious. How sad that his loss of control with magic cost Valerie her life. Though this gives a good reason as to why he remained alone as well as why he was willing to allow Lily to live as Snape had requested. I'm curious if he ever got an owl about having used magic during the summer and how he explained what happened to the authorities.

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Author's Response: Thanks for the review!
I've had a couple of people complain about the difficulty of transitioning between characters on another story that I'm writing, and I am working on improving this.
He wasn't being as careful because he was starting to get feelings for Valerie, but he didn't realise-doing his work etc. with her in the room just felt natural to him after a while because of his feelings!

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