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Review #1, by Cannons Chapter the First

3rd December 2013:
Hi, I just punched the random story button and I came here so I though I would leave you a review.

I think that this is a promising start to your story. It is rather short so I would defiantly post a longer chapter next time. There are lots of ways that you can go because it is a very intriguing and unique plot idea.

I think if you expanded on some points and also write numbers instead of putting '7' you would have a solid first chapter.

I would recommend if you haven't seriously thinking about the plot and how you can weave things from cannon in to your story so that it will be more relatable and believable.

For instance you have said that he was a Death Eater but not very high up so he went under the radar. You could flashback to bits where he was involved in Death Eater activities and how he decided to go after seers and what he was going to personally gain from it. Was he hoping to gain the Dark Lords recognition?

Anyway as I said this is a intriguing idea and I would like to see where you take this.

Cannons

Author's Response: Thank you that is actually really helpful.

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