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Review #1, by hangingwallflower Parting Words

13th August 2014:
Hi there, here for our swap!

Wow. This truly was an excellent piece. It was short and sweet, but packed with so much emotion and so many wonderful characters. I thought you managed to portray each of the characters really well with their dialogue - Kingsley, Andromeda, George, and Harry were especially nice to read, as you stuck to canon very well. I also liked the addition of Melinda Bobbin in there, because I'm a fan of all of the minor characters in the series and it's nice to have an addition to this to show that it wasn't just the main characters who were the heroes.

Perhaps one thing you could do with this is to divide up the paragraphs a bit more, just so it's easier to read. Honestly, though, that's my only constructive feedback, because this piece was quite wonderful. Thanks for sharing and thanks for the swap!

- Jackie

Author's Response: Sorry it took me so long to respond. :/

I'm so glad that you liked it! When I get some time, I'll go through and shake up the pacing a bit. +]

Until next time!

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Review #2, by maraudertimes Parting Words

11th January 2014:
Can you not? Every single thing I read from you is heart-wrenchingly beautiful and makes me want to cry. Today is not a day for crying, but for happiness! Although, I suppose Fred would laugh at me crying over this piece and tell me 'What do you think I just told George, you daft girl? Be happy don't cry!'

Anyways, I really liked this. It was beautiful, it was sad, it was funny... It was.

Great job.

P.S. This would be longer but I can't express what I'm feeling, so just imagine me crying whilst drinking hazelnut coffee from a purple thermos and there's the rest of the review! :)

Author's Response: Ooo! Hazelnut coffee! Sounds yummy!

And I'm sorry!! I'm just no good at happy, though I am trying my hand at comical with Arthur, though that's been put on the back burner for To Have and to Hold for now. I'm glad you liked it. It took a bit of craft, but when I saw the "Almost Dialogue Only" challenge, I thought the situation was perfect. +] Where else would everyone be talking? And this way I get to visit very important people. The end part with Luna almost didn't exist. I submitted it without her poem at the end, and had to go back and change it when I realized I forgot about her.

Thanks, as always, for the review!

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Review #3, by celadon Parting Words

11th November 2013:
Hi! here from the RRT!

This was a beautiful story. You managed to make every speech dignified with no drama or sobbing. Nothing was dragged out all felt very realistic. All the speeches were wonderful. I could really feel the emotions in the air.

I love how you included a speech about an ordinary student that no one knew about. It showed that every fighter in that war was important. I'm also glad that you showed Winky's side of the story, not limiting the funeral only to wizards.

I like how Harry decided to give a speech about Snape out of all the people he had witnessed dying. I also like the fact that he wasn't overly complementary about him, agreeing that Snape wasn't the nicest person but certainly was the bravest.

When Luna recited the poem (I assumed it was Luna) it was such a haunting moment, I really felt as if at that moment the dead had passed on. To afterlife or whatever. The weight was lifted off their family and friends' shoulders; they could finally move on.

Great Job!

Author's Response: Thanks! And yes, it was Luna. The first time I submitted it, it was actually without her, and I woke up one morning thinking it was awful that she hadn't gotten to say anything, but it wasn't like her to stand up and make a speech so, this seemed like the perfect thing. +]

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Review #4, by toomanycurls Parting Words

9th November 2013:
Hi!! I wanted to review this because I also submitted something for this challenge. I only had a 500-ish word fic so I was quite impressed to see a mostly dialogue story at this length.

The topic you chose was brilliant - not just for the challenge but for something that people would care about reading.

It seemed so fitting that Kingsley eulogized Remus - they were close peers in the Order. In my head they worked together quite a bit in HBP. I love what Kingsley says about Remus finally letting himself have the things in the life that he denied himself for so long. Such a great note to make!

Andromeda talking about Tonks was so sad. :( I got quite choked up about her mentioning that Teddy won't know his mother but will come to learn about her.

George's section about Fred made me tear up quite a bit. You really capture the grief a twin would have for the other. Oh it was so fitting for him to set off fireworks at the end.

I love that you talked about a smaller character who died in the battle. Is Melinda Bobbin an OC or just a minor character? I really like the depth you gave her!

:( Dobby's eulogy was quite well done. I could see Winky mourning for him like that.

Harry's speech about Snape was quite breathtaking. So beautiful and articulate!

You weaved together such a wonderful story about the funerals after the Battle of Hogwarts. It's such an emotional piece! Great job.


Author's Response: Thank you! When I read the challenge, it was just the first thing that popped into my head, because I don't normally just write fluff, and I knew that it would be emotionally charged, and not really require much other description.

I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! I found Melinda Bobbin listed as a member of the Slug Club, but I think that her character was only in the movie, as I had never heard of her, and there was very little description on the Wiki.

OMG! Winky was the hardest by far to do. I went back again and again to try and find inconsistencies with tense, and wanted to make sure that she was easy to follow while sticking to her dialect. Very interesting indeed.

I had to add the part about Snape being a git most of the time, just to make sure that no one in the congregation (I know they don't really exist, but still... +] ) would think he was just sugar coating things. I thought the admittance of his faults would bring some sincerity to it. Thanks for the review, and good luck with the challenge!! +]

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