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Review #1, by potterfan310 A Favour

26th June 2014:
Hi again!

I was intrigued about which house Lizzie is in and I wanted to say Hufflepuff but another part of me was thinking Gryffindor? I can't believe I got it totally wrong and that she's a Ravenclaw! Now I'm curious as to what house Dylan is in?

Two things - "Despite being in Ravenclaw, the only person I knew in the class was Veronica and Rachel." Instead of 'person' try 'people' because it flows that bit better and Lizzie name's two of them rather than one.

And - "Er, where you–where you talking to me?" - The word 'where' which is for things like where are you? Should be 'were', as in were you talking to me?

Poor Lizzie, I would hate to be in her shoes right now. Mullgrew certainly seems like a strict teacher!

Okay so I love Dom! I just get that feeling that she would be the one to wear the highest heels with her uniform despite it being against the rules and I love it!! I kind of hope that Dom and Lizzie will become friends. Then in turn it means she sees James and what have you, in the process making Veronica insanely jealous because Dom/the Weasley-Potters like her more than Veronica.

Well, well, well. Rachel is definitely not the type of best friend to have.

I'm guessing that James is the seventh year that Lizzie has to tutor. Squee! I'm excited now.

I'm really enjoying those so far and I can't wait for the net chapter!!

-Potterfan310

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Review #2, by potterfan310 Hogwarts

26th June 2014:
Hi!

After favourting, I am finally able to get around to reviewing!!

I really like Lizzie so far, I'm curious about her living with her grandparents thought, Have her parents died or something has happened to them? I think the fact that Lizzie made that drastic hair cut is a good thing! Not many OC's tend to have short hair, it's mainly long and flowing so it's such a nice change to see.

Dylan is pretty great I think, he's that typical annoying sibling but their relationship seems pretty close too which I like. I feel like sometimes in fics that siblings either hate one another, barely talk or just get along because they're family. But I think you have the perfect mix going on here. Typical teenage boy about the fact Dylan slept through Rachel's yelling.

Finding a compartment that's empty must be hard. Man James and Rachel going at and finding two people suddenly there. Talk about awkward.

Well Rachel seems like a piece of work. Getting caught with your best friends boyfriend/girlfriend's best friend can't be fun, especially sine they shouldn't be doing that in the first place. I sense drama and lots of it, me thinks. Hopefully Lizzie can use this as some sort of leverage against James and Rachel.

I got a tad confused when Lizzie said she had to find her new room mates. Normally those who get put together in first year, stay together with the same room mates for seven years. Such as Harry, Ron, Seamus, Dean and Neville all shared until 6th year and even after Harry and Ron left, they would have shared for their 7th too.

Ah-ha. My previous question about her parents has been answered! I wanna hug Lizzie and Dylan, poor things.

One teeny little thing I noticed, you missed out an 's off of 'that' - "That what Fred told me!"

Looking forward to the next one!
-Potterfan310

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Review #3, by TotallyNotVernonDursleyInDisguise A Favour

2nd June 2014:
I REALLY LIKE THIS STORY BUT I DON'T KNOW WHAT ELSE TO SAY
YOU HAVE OFFICIALLY BEEN REVIEWED
I HOPE U ARE ONE OF THOSE EPIC AUTHORS WHO CAN HANDLE MY WEIRD REVIEWS

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Review #4, by TotallyNotVernonDursleyInDisguise A Favour

2nd June 2014:
I REALLY LIKE THIS STORY BUT I DON'T KNOW WHAT ELSE TO SAY
YOU HAVE OFFICIALLY BEEN REVIEWED
I HOPE U ARE ONE OF THOSE EPIC AUTHORS WHO CAN HANDLE MY WEIRD REVIEWS

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Review #5, by Sharvi Hogwarts

17th November 2013:
Wow, that was really great! I can't wait to read more =)

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Review #6, by MERLINEXISTSWITHINMEFOREVER Hogwarts

14th November 2013:
I love this :) she's a really sweet character :D I also think her background is really lovely, even though it is upsetting
So, yeah, please write more :3

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Review #7, by Lyla Hogwarts

13th November 2013:
This is really interesting, can't wait for the next one!

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Review #8, by heartjily4ever Hogwarts

13th November 2013:
Hey there. I think this looks like a really cute, comedic story. I love Carey Mulligan, can I just say, and think she suits Lizzie ( can I call her that) well.

Lizzie is a great character. I love her drastic hair cut. A lot of main characters have lovely flowing long hair. Short cuts all the way. I've actually been thinking about cutting my hair. But back to your story. Lizzie is so cute, so motherly. Her love for her brother is just so realistic. Surely she would have at least another friend though?

James seems a bit horrible though. Not as bad as Rachel, but with your girlfriends best friend. Ouch. Is Ronnie Veronica by the way? Got a bit confused. Thought it was a guy for a few seconds.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter though. It seems good. Can't wait to hear more of the pixie cuts exploits through Hogwarts :D

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Review #9, by Leanna Drobis Hogwarts

3rd November 2013:
I liked this chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more so please update

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