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Review #1, by adluvshp Part 1

17th March 2014:
Blackout battle 6/10

Hello! I think this was a very good insight into the night James and Lily Potter died. I loved your portrayal of James and Lily. Their love for each other and particularly Harry was so evident.

I also liked how you started this with the scene showing how normal that night was. The terror that James suddenly felt when things abruptly changed thanks to Voldemort's arrival was very well described.

Lily's fear and determination to fight for Harry's sake was also spot on. I think you wrote her last moments very well. Her quick thoughts on Peter were also understandable.

All in all, I think you did a very good job of writing this and I liked reading it.


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