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Review #1, by td A Sad Begining

18th March 2014:
Quite well written..please write more!!

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Review #2, by TheGirlOnFire Prologe Part 1: An Unexpected Discovery

14th March 2014:
Hello, this is for the blackout bingo ;)

So, this was interesting. I'm not actually sure what I mean by that. It was a good fast read and it set the scene perfectly. My main issue is that some of the writing doesn't seem natural, this is very important when writing. I feel like some of Sirius's narrations weren't that clear, it was a little mixed up with the things in italics. I think clearing some of that up would improve the story. Also, there are a few grammatical errors with the dialogue that should be fixed. It's not a major issue but it helps the story to flow better. That being said, this has the potential to grow so much and if you constantly revise your story and edit it, it will help to improve your story as well as your writing ability.

TheGirlOnFirexx

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