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Review #1, by 800 words of heaven The Scientist

17th November 2013:

This was just so lovely! All the fluff! All the feels! All the awesome!

I really truly felt for Emi. It must be said, but I had my doubts about Nick. I thought that he wouldn't deliver. It's good thing that Nick and I weren't the ones involved :P It was wonderful to see Emi's conviction hold fast.

I loved how this was mostly about the past and focused much more on emotions than physical surroundings. It really helped to ground the story emotionally, and added another dimension it all. Very nice!

All my feels are just... so cute!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! I was worried that it would be to fluffy for people to read, but I'm so happy you enjoyed it :)

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Review #2, by toomanycurls The Scientist

9th November 2013:
Hi!! Doing a RRT review.

I wasn't too sure about having a one-shot OC/OC but wow, this is amazing. :D

I love how you put a historic time that everyone understands and can remember (by everyone I mean some of us who were alive during that time period).

The way you've contrasted Emi and Nick's life on each side of the wall paints a very clear picture of how the Berlin Wall and war disrupted people's lives.

The hope and optimism that fills this dark time in history is so sweet and fresh. After reading this I feel like love could conquer all. Really amazing positive story with a dark background.


Author's Response: Thanks for the amazing review!

Most people aren't enthusiastic about reading fan fiction where they don't know the characters (which sort of defeats the purpose of fan fiction :P) but I'm glad you liked the story!

The Berlin Wall affected so many lives, not only in Germany but all over the world. Friends and family were separated from each other and the memory is still pretty fresh in people's minds. War truly does disrupt the lives of people.

I wasn't alive while the Berlin Wall was still standing but my parents were and they told me how awful times were for East Berlin at the time. I hope my story did some justice to the pain they must have felt.

Love does conquer all. I really wanted to show that no matter how bleak things seem to be, as long as there is love things don't seem so bad. Thank you for this review, it really brightened my day :)

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Review #3, by milominderbinder The Scientist

4th November 2013:
Hiya! Here from Ravenclaw review battle :)

So, first of all, I ADORE this song. I'm a coldplay fan to start with but The Scientist is like, the best song ever :3

I loved how you weaved the real historical aspects with the magical world's influences. Something often left out of HP fic is any link to the real world, and I think the fact that you've included such a significant historical event here makes this incredibly interesting and unique.

I loved your characters. I don't often read OC heavy stuff but I thought you wrote two incredible multifaceted characters here and honestly I just want to know more about them! Their story was so fascinating to me.

Well done with this story, I thought it was incredible!


Author's Response: Hi!

I really love Coldplay too and this is one of my favourite songs of theirs.

Admittedly, this isn't really one of my stronger stories, at least in my opinion. Fluffy isn't really my genre but I decided to give it a shot. I'm a huge history fan so I thought why not merge history into fiction? It's my first time trying that out and I'm glad you liked it.

I'm also happy you found the characters fascinating. They're pretty complex ones with a lot left to the reader's imagination. You've just given me the greatest compliment ever :)

Thank you so much for you kind words!

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Review #4, by academica The Scientist

26th October 2013:
Hello, here with your requested review :)

This was very sweet and intriguing. I usually have to have some reflection of canon to pull me into a story - I'm just not a huge fan of OC-heavy plots. But this one was different, and I think that's because you've clearly paid attention to the historical piece and integrated the wall also like a character on its own. I'm really interested to know what the inspiration for this story was - was it the song, or something related to history, or something else?

I definitely liked the characterization. It was interesting how you put together two people with seemingly disparate interests: you've got Nick, who's all about logic and science, and Emi, who's more of a creative free spirit. I view the ending as Emi bringing Nick into her world and asking him to show her that he can be a romantic, too. It was nice that they had more in common than might have been assumed at first.

I also liked the imagery related to their last night at Hogwarts, though I'm a bit confused - if the war broke out after their graduation and they both lived in Berlin, why was their last night together at Hogwarts? Also, it would have been nice to put a bit more imagery in about the wall and what the two sides of Berlin were actually like, because that's something that would be unfamiliar to a lot of readers.

I guess my major critique, then, would be that I felt like this was... I don't know, like it left me wanting more. I would be interested in reading a longer story that explores how Nick and Emi fell in love and what their relationship was like before the wall and after the wall was torn down. Your writing style is very nice with good flow and I think you could get more mileage out of this plot if you had the muse for it. However, this was very romantic and well done even if you decide to keep it at a one-shot length.

Nice work! Hope this review is helpful :)


Author's Response: Hi Amanda!

Thank you so much for your encouraging words. I'm a big history nut, and when I listened to the song the Berlin Wall was the first thing the sprang to my mind. I'm glad you liked it!

Thank you for the constructive criticism, I will focus on expanding the story to include more description and imagery about how Berlin was like during those times.

In the story, the war breaks out before their graduation (I've done a terrible job implying that, though) which is why they have to let go of the lives they had originally envisioned for themselves. They had to return to their families who lived on opposite sides of the Berlin Wall. They knew that they probably wouldn't see each other again for a very long time once they got home and their last days of Hogwarts would be all that they had together. I hope that clears things up a little.

Unfortunately, this story will probably remain a one-shot, so I'm really sorry that it leaves you hanging. There are quite a few loose ends which I apologize for. Thank you so much for taking the time to review the story :)

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Review #5, by Penelope Inkwell The Scientist

16th October 2013:
Oh, I did like this. You did a lovely job painting the...I don’t know, the loneliness, of Emi’s situation. I had never thought about how magic might play into something like the Berlin wall, and how the Ministries might treat that sort of thing. It makes me so curious to know more--why the Ministry made that decision, did people try to fight it? Are Emi and Nick German, and if so how did they get to Hogwarts? Why did they go back to Germany? For their families? I also love that Nick is a scientist. I think having a Wizarding scientist during that time period would be so fascinating! So *that’s* how we got to the moon! ; )

So, do they risk it? Do they cross the wall? Or do wait nearly 30 years? I want to know more!

Nice work with this. I do hope there’ll be other chapters, but either way, it was interesting to read a HP fanfic set in this time period. I’ve never run into anything like it before, but I enjoyed it.


Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed the story! Unfortunately, this is a one-shot, so there won't be anymore chapters. I will, however, do my best in answering your wonderful questions :)

I think that the Ministry of Magic was worried about the effects of magic on an already fragile part of the world. Perhaps it weakened relationships between them and the Muggle Government. Maybe the chances of them performing magic in front of muggles was higher.

Emi and Nick are German, their families have settled their before they were born. I don't think that it would be that tricky to get to Hogwarts if one didn't live in Britain. Perhaps Hogwarts provided other means of transport? Apparition or a portkey? I'm not really sure about that.

Once the Cold War began, families wanted to stick together. Emi and Nick were forced by their families to return home, to help the rest in their struggle to survive. Their families really needed them by their side so they couldn’t pursue a job outside of Berlin. Nick was much luckier than Emi, for he got the job he wanted as West Berlin gave him a lot of independence to do what he liked.

As for whether they cross the wall, I guess that is for the reader to decide :) It was nearly impossible to cross the wall, especially during the initial years after its construction. I personally thought that they would wait it out, though.

Thank you so much for this lovely review and your questions. I am sorry that there won’t be more chapters added to the story, but I am happy you found it so unique :)

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Review #6, by randomwriter The Scientist

15th October 2013:
Hello quixotic! I LOVE your pen-name :)

I also really REALLY like Coldplay and when I saw this, I just HAD to read it. I've entered the challenge too and I was interested in seeing what you've come up with. Especially because I love 'The Scientist'. I think the style you've employed to write this story goes very well with the tone of the song, even though that is slightly more melancholic and angsty. I like how this ended on a happy and positive note :)

I love how you integrated a real life historic event into your fiction. I love history and I really enjoyed how easily the two worlds seemed to mould. I think you explained how tense the situation was quite well.

I love both your OCs. They seem so perfect for each other! They're love was delicate and complex and I like how they held hope till the very end. It's so heartbreaking sometimes, but knowing that there's light at the end of the tunnel does make it so much better!

I like the sense of wonder that seemed to ooze out of this. That, and charm.

Well done :) I liked this piece!

Author's Response: Greetings, fellow contestant. I just saw your entry on the forums and fully intend to check it out. Coldplay is one of my favourite bands and the Scientist is one of my favourite songs by the band (the other is Violet Hill, wink wink).

The Scientist is a sad song, a man mourning for a lost lover and how he desperately wants to reverse time to get her back. Actually it could be about someone who did something he really regretted, but the first option worked better for me. I was listening to the song the whole time while I typed the story and like to think that some of it rubbed off into my writing. I made this story a sad tale of separated lovers. Turned out more sappier than I intended it to, but yeah.

However, I'm not a fan of sad endings (seriously, I'm all for butterflies and rainbows) and I wanted to leave a message of hope. They had a love worth waiting for and I also think that it's important to never give up on anything.

History is a great backbone for amateur writers like myself and the Berlin Wall seemed like the perfect opportunity for an angsty story. I'm so glad you liked it.

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