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Review #1, by Unwritten Curse Packing

31st December 2013:
Hello hello! I have to apologize for taking two months to get to your review. I always get myself in over my head with school and HPFF and work and... well, you know the drill. But here I am to make it up to you!

First of all, I love that you used first person. Lily's character is so fun and young, and you were really able to explore that through such a personal POV. It helped me grow attached to her quite quickly. She's a spunky one!

Second, I'm really enjoying the relationship you've established between Lily and Petunia. You note at the beginning that Lily has ALMOST given up on her--but not yet. They're clearly not close, but Lily still loves Petunia, as evidenced by her deciding that if Vernon made her sister happy, she was alright with him. Such a sweet moment. Oh, and did I mention that I love how Lily calls Vernon "Vermin" sometimes (at least in her head). Brilliant.

I think you did a great job kicking off this story, and I'm excited to see where it goes from here. I was kinda, sorta expecting James to be in the cottage next door, but that's totally okay, because what I am NOT sure of is what is going to happen now! Chaos, I presume. ;) Please bug me on TGS when you update. I'd love to see what comes next.

Author's Response: It's okay, I know how busy life can get and things just seem to get out of hand and time decides to speed up.

I didn't know how to write Lily at first because she was facing a war against this enemy and there were plenty of reasons to be serious but at the same time I didn't want to write her as more serious than a sixteen-year-old no matter what the circumstances.

I'm glad that you noticed that! I didn't think anyone would. Lily would have given up on pleasing Petunia and trying to make her happy but she still loves her as a sister and wants her to be happy. Besides, if Lily was as kind as everyone in the books says she is, I figure this is something that she would think.

Chaos will always be the result whenever the Marauders (or just James and Sirius) are present. It's universal law that something happens when they're around.

I will most definitely bug you on TGS when the next chapter comes up. If you see a random PM from someone over there, it's probably me.

Thank you for the awesome review!


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Review #2, by Rumpelstiltskin Packing

8th November 2013:
I'm here for review tag!

I enjoyed Lily's wordplay concerning Vernon's name. It was quite humorous and it highlighted Lily's distaste for him. Furthermore, it touches slightly on Lily's personality. I really enjoyed her characterization in this. You've really humanized her and given her some depth beyond the typical cliched characterization. So...thank you for that!

I enjoyed your writing style. It's interesting and readable. As such, it really appeals to me. There is a flawless merge of your style with the first person perspective, allowing the reader to lose neither your skill nor Lily's personality.

My favorite part, of course, was the argument between Lily, Petunia, and Vernon on the ride over to the cabin. It was fun...and funny. Also, it reflected a true fight between siblings bringing a sense of reality to the characters.

I found the general idea quite unique and intriguing, actually. This one is going on my "currently reading" list so that I don't miss an update!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: I had quite a lot of fun calling Vernon Vermin. And I'm glad that you think she's different than your typical version of Lily. I want to make her as relatable as I possibly can while I write.

It also means a lot to me that you enjoyed my writing style. You've given me one of the best compliments that I've ever gotten as a writer!

I enjoyed writing the argument between the three in the car immensely. I wanted to show that as much as they all disliked each other they were all still family no matter what.

Woohoo! I'm so glad that you like this story enough to add it to your Currently Reading list and thanks for reviewing!


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Review #3, by Cannons Packing

24th October 2013:
Hey, I'm surprised that this hasn't got any reviews!

I just found it and thought I would take a look and it was awesome. I was excited to see a young Vernon that was really awesome! He seems just like his older self though which is a shame. :/ (but a compliment to your writing skills) I just wanted him to be a little less of a..well yeah.

Anyway the end was great, I mean what are the chances! I hope you update this because I seriously want to see how Vernon is going to get wound up by James and Sirius ( and maybe the rest of the marauders?)

ďItís fine mum, itís not like Iím going to be seeing anyone that I know there, Iíll just wash everything as soon as I change them,Ē - I loved this line, it was a 'that's what you think' moment.

This was a really nice story, her dad seems sweet as well.

Author's Response: Boy was I surprised when I saw this. I hadn't expected it.

I never really pictured Vernon as different when he was younger, just maybe less hostile towards Lily while her mother was around. I plan on making him a little bit nicer though as the story goes on.

When I wrote that line, I was actually thinking "that's what you think Lily," so I'm glad that someone picked up on that.

Anyway, I'm glad that you enjoyed the first chapter and thanks for reviewing!


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