Reading Reviews for Seventh Year at Hogwarts
  
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Review #1, by Leonore Journey to the common room. Or maybe not

4th October 2013:
Definitely not too much scene setting at the start - an interesting read right from the beginning. Personally, I would prefer the bold text only to be used in headers and "non-story" sections, using italics for emphasis in speech, but I guess that's just what I'm used to and it's up to you.

Keep up the good work.

Leonore

Author's Response: Thanks I shall try that for my next chapter


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Review #2, by Rumpelstiltskin Journey to the common room. Or maybe not

4th October 2013:
It's definitely and intriguing plot. I'm not a huge fan of Hermione Granger *dodges large pointed objects* but your summary drew me in.

I always enjoy people's versions of the aftermath of the second Wizarding War.

I'll be looking for your next chapter!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: Thanks ~Jasmine


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Review #3, by Leonore The Return

30th September 2013:
So, your first story? I'll do your first review.

These new sleeping arrangements are a nice twist. I can see this getting interesting. I'm not really a fan of Dramione but so long as it's done well I'll put up with it.

You do have the odd small grammar error which spoils the flow slightly. In places like (...knows what she's doing," replied Hermione.) you could lose the capital after the speech, if the bit on the end is not a full sentence.

Also, third paragraph, you described the headmistress as "a mad" - I guess the "a" was because you changed the description or something and failed to spot it.

Keep writing and your style will improve with practice. It's not too bad at all now. This is a very promising first chapter, and I'll be interested to see how it continues.

Leonore

Author's Response: Oh thank you! I'll try to capture those errors better. Thanks for the criticism it is very appreciated!


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