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Review #1, by adluvshp When you left the last leaf fell.

6th March 2014:
Blackout Battle!

I liked the idea of this, of Sirius having married, and it was interesting how this was from that girl's point of view.
Your writing style was nice too as it showed the manner of Lucy's thoughts after losing Sirius.
The way she reflected on the memories of their first kiss and their wedding was also touching and sweet.
I liked your portrayal of Sirius as well, like how he wasn't afraid for his own life but was afraid of losing his loved ones.
I noticed a lot of grammar errors and typos in this though. You have misspelled a couple of words too. I think it could do with a re-read to smooth this out, or a beta.
Your writing certainly has room for improvement and your ideas are good so I certainly hope you continue to write more stories.

Good job on this one =)
Cheers,
AD
(AditiDraco95)

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