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Review #1, by Lostmyheart One.

12th October 2013:
For the first time in months, I find a one-shot that just blows my mind. You write incredibly good, there's no denying you got talent! How you describe their feelings, the way the move, it's really good and I can easily get lost in this story. I like how you made them fall for each other, very realistic.
Incredibly cute story. 10/10 !

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Review #2, by DracoFerret11 One.

11th October 2013:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums! :D I saw you mention this story in a status or something and read it a few weeks ago. I'm just getting around to reviewing, but better late than never! So, let's go over things:

Plot: I'm such a Dramione fan! It's a problem. :) So of course I loved this so, so much! I really enjoyed the scenario. It was very realistic for me. I like when Dramiones address their own questionable-quality. And hearing the characters try to reason through things was wonderful. I think you have an interesting, believable plot. Great job.

Characterization: I really liked that Hermione's past was haunting her. I think it makes a lot of sense that she wouldn't just forget that. I did think it was a little odd that she said she WANTED to eventually forget it though...I don't know. It was just a strange moment for me. Also, I adored Draco. He was really sweet and lovely.

Descriptions: There were some really beautiful details in this story. I liked when you described them waking up in bed together and when you showed Draco trying so hard to get Hermione to talk to him. So great.

Emotions: I think you absolutely nailed Draco's emotions, but I would have liked to see more of Hermione's feelings. Hers seemed more vague and less realistic. But Draco's were really great! :)

Interactions: As I mentioned before, I loved the scene with Hermione and Draco waking up in bed together. It was sweet and realistic. I also really liked Draco sitting outside the bedroom door, trying to talk to Hermione. There was something so sweet about that.

Overall, I think this was really lovely. You did a great job and portrayed a great relationship between Draco and Hermione. I enjoyed this a lot. :)

--Emily

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Review #3, by BLONDEbehaviour One.

20th September 2013:
Hi Firefly! BLONDEbehaviour here with your requested review :)

I am so sorry it has taken me a while to get to this! I've been a bit distracted over the last few days for unknown reasons, so I also apologise if this is a bit of a wishy-washy review. I will try and make as good as possible!

I really enjoyed this story! I like how we are given a fraction of Hermione and Draco's relationship and we didn't have to go through them doing the tedious get-together and such. I also like how you portrayed such a common scene- a couple fighting. You wrote it really effectively, in a way that didn't make it feel forced or cliche.

I think with the way you briefly explained their get-together, with becoming friends and such helped keep their characterisation accurate. It is how you think they would react over time relationship-wise. I liked that we did see a softer side to Hermione. It is important that remember that know-it-all's can be vulnerable too!!

I liked the flow of it. In regards to the flashback that Draco had, perhaps italicise it or maybe a line saying 'two months ago' will help indicate it is a flashback, as I was a little bit confused for a moment there. I also think that perhaps putting the back-story a little bit earlier in the story may be effective also :) nothing major, just suggestions :)

There are a few grammar and spelling spot, that just a quick re-read will be picked up. Just extra full stops and uncapitalised letters and such :) Perhaps, also, read it out loud, as I saw some places that may be improved with a comma. In regards to the writing however, you have done a great job!

I am also entering this competition, and I look forward to running beside such a cool story!! Good luck with your story :)

Please respond to this review, thanks :)

Grace :)

p.s, I have not altered my view or review in regards to me also competing in the competition. All comments made are 100% truthful :)

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Review #4, by Dark Whisper One.

18th September 2013:
firefly,
Well, first I want to say that I really liked your use of the quote. Using the "I love you" part as the first time she says it was excellent.

I also liked the realism in your story. They would and should have these issues of second guessing themselves and trying to find things wrong. I think it is perfectly natural for these two.

I liked that he seemed to really be there for her through this little tantrum of hers. He could've just left and said forget it, but he didn't. He kept following her, which says a lot.

Anyway, great job for this challenge from a fellow Dramione fan...
Dark Whisper

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Review #5, by toomanycurls One.

18th September 2013:
I LOVE the mix of passion, anger, and tenderness. I almost died of squee when Draco had the urge to tuck Hermione's stray curl behind her ear. Mainly because it's something my husband does when my toomanycurls get out of hand - it's such a tender thing.

ah, blanket hogging - it always makes me laugh.

Really good dialogue between them about being happy. I really liked his apprehension at Hermione's response.

oooh, I like the internal conflict for Hermione given Draco's involvement in her torture. I love their conflict about being a forbidden relationship. I've never been a strong Draco/Hermione shipper but I really, really like this fic.

^_^ Thanks for the shout out!

Author's Response: I always have this image of them having a very emotionally charged relationship. Like everything would be amplified because of who they are and their history. I'm glad you related to that bit, makes it feel like I add realistic edge into my stories!

I loved writing the flash back. I think it's something that happens in every relationship.

The dialogue actually came surprisingly easy. I have always pictured them not really knowing how to deal with their feelings towards the beginning of the relationship. Their history would inevitably come up and it's not something they can ignore.

I'm glad you liked the internal conflict. I wanted to show that Hermione would never just forget everything that Draco was tied up in, that her mind wouldn't let her even if she wanted too. They will always have the 'forbidden' aspect to deal with, which for me makes it part of the appeal. The appeal being that they could overcome it, well in my eyes anyway.

So happy you liked it even though you don't really ship them. I always aim to try and make my stories plausible and getting comments like that make my day :)

Thank you for reviewing :)


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Review #6, by MissesWeasley123 One.

18th September 2013:
OMG CALLIE HI I WAS SO EXCITED FOR THIS EEEK IT GOT VALIDATED!!!

Ahem.

Man, all these reviews come out fangirling... I really need to control myself..

BUT THIS STORY OH MY GOODNESS.

Hehe :P I think you captured the beauty of their dilemma so wonderfully that it was heartbreaking to read their confusion. I'm so glad it worked out though - and I'm even more happy that you're writing again! *pssst write more Dramione!*

I noticed one slip up though:
What good his hiding behind a door going to do? - it should be is*. But that's it, Dee is amazing!

I really liked how you tried weaving in the background of their relationship and made it believable and maybe you could write a prequel or something to show how they ended up? *tries to get Callie writing more dramione in a not so subtle way*

Aanyway, what a fabulous one-shot!

Author's Response: Nadia!! :)

Awww thank you for being so excited! I was excited aboit you reading it.

Nothing wrong with a bit of fangirling, I do a lot of it myself.

I wanted to try and show that there would always be little niggles in their relationship because of their past. I'm not a Dramione shipper under the allusion that everything would be perfect. It adds a little more to their relationship and makes it all the more nice that they do work it out.

Dee really is amazing!

Lol, very subtle! I may write a little prequel or something at some point. I /really/ do want to write more, especially Dramione so if I can cook up an idea that won't rehash every other story then I might just do that!

Thanks for reviewing Nadia :)


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Review #7, by HeyMrsPotter One.

18th September 2013:
So you know I've already read this and told you how much I like it but reviews are fun so here I am again! I enjoyed reading this now as much as I did the first time, I liked the additions such as how they had become close by working together. Thanks for the shout out too!

Author's Response: Hi Dee :)

Thanks for coming to review and thanks so much for your help with it :) Glad you liked the additions!


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