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Review #1, by English Critic The End of an Era

22nd July 2017:
You are an excellent author, and coming from me that is extremely high praise. I manage to find fault with nearly every piece of writing, even the best English teacher's work. You do very well in forming your story to give the ideal aspect of suspense, love, adventure, and the importance of friendship. Your work is exceptional and deserves the credit for it. I think that all your readers agree that we can expect great things from you. I expect to be reading more from you in the very near future.

Author's Response: I am positively flattered! I plan to continue writing whenever time and life allow, unfortunately that less often than I would like. Thank you so much for the kind words. They mean a great deal to me.

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Review #2, by Hufflepuffbutt Losing Control

10th July 2017:
As I was reading the 1st couple of chapters I was like this sounds really familiar and than it hit me.THIS IS MY FAVORITE SERIES! haha! Don't care, reading it again and putting it in my Favorites

Author's Response: Oh thank you! So glad you enjoy it!

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Review #3, by MotekElm The End of an Era

9th January 2017:
Great story. Draco is a bit too nice and changed. But overall good Dramione

Author's Response: I can appreciate your sentiment on Draco. I wanted to reflect what I felt would be the result of the scared little boy finally being able to break free from his past and how that would shape the man he became.

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Review #4, by Katie Losing Control

4th September 2015:
Hi there is a great story but I do have one complaint can you please stop saying three as in the number can you actually spell it. Thanks😀

Author's Response: Sure, I will absolutely try to do that. Thanks for the review :)

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Review #5, by Murishka21 The End of an Era

13th October 2014:
Excellent ending to an excellent story. Thank you. It was truly an excellent story.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

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Review #6, by Murishka21 Time in St. Mungo's

13th October 2014:
I very much like what I am reading. I know I have left several reviews already, but you have me so excited I can't help but express it. I hope that wasn't wierd. Draco is my favorite character. Your story is an epic way for his life to continue.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

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Review #7, by Murishka21 The Battle at Malfoy Manor

13th October 2014:
Excellent. The beginning of the chapter needs some grammar work. You have many mess ups where first person point of view becomes third person. I loved it otherwise! Very exciting.

Author's Response: You are correct. As I read back over my story, there are many grammatical errors. I will go back and fix them asap.

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Review #8, by Murishka21 Christmas Morning

13th October 2014:
Oh my jeeze! Excitement coursing through me, I cannot wait to see what happens next. I have been on edge up till this point and I just fell over. You are an amazing writer.

Author's Response: Oh goodness thank you so much. I very much enjoy writing and am so glad you are enjoying my story.

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Review #9, by Murishka21 Head Boy and Head Girl

12th October 2014:
I have a feeling this is going to be a very good story. I cannot wait to continue reading it. I am ecstatic to see how their romance is going to play out. You are a very good writer.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really appreciate it!

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Review #10, by Narcissamalfoy394 No use crying over spilled ink

15th July 2014:
I'm loving it. I think I know who the " old friend " is but not sure.

Author's Response: I love when people try to figure it out! I wonder if you are right?

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Review #11, by songbird0345 The End of an Era

4th December 2013:
More Draco/Hermione AND Harry/Ginny. Make it as long as possible! The I LOVE long stories I want to be kept guessing but with as much detail as possible (you know, that you can give us with the plot and such) But still! I can easily see this 11 chapter story become into a 40 chapter book. But thats just me. It was fantastic regardless!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your input! I have so much more in my head to go still on this story, trouble is getting it all written... More updates coming soon on the sequel. Thanks again for reading and for reviewing!!!

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Review #12, by S The End of an Era

29th November 2013:
more draco/hermione :)

Author's Response: Will do! Thanks for the review and thanks for reading!

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Review #13, by Nuzhat Prologue

27th November 2013:
Looking forward to it, the prologue is convincing (:
And I have a feeling that I'm gonna love this one :D
(And this is my first ever review, I'm not even a member)

Author's Response: Awe! That is so sweet! I really hope you enjoy it!!

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Review #14, by Katie No use crying over spilled ink

26th November 2013:
Cho's older too. Stick to canon, dear! It's a bit confusing for us.

You spelled Australia wrong the first time. Ans just some missing commas and stuff. Sorry, I'm a huge grammar stickler.


Author's Response: Not going to be able to change this one, as it would affect the story way down the road. So let's pretend this is AU for this fact.

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Review #15, by Katie Head Boy and Head Girl

26th November 2013:
Katie Bell would've left Hogwarts already. She's older than they are.

Also, your sentence structure's a bit off. The characters keep saying "I am" instead of "I'm". It doesn't sound natural.

Very good otherwise! Cheers!

Author's Response: I can probably change this one. Thanks for the review!

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Review #16, by Katie Prologue

26th November 2013:
You might want to edit again. You used the wrong "to" towards the middle. TOO, not TO.

Cheers! Very well done!

Author's Response: I will look at that again thanks!

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Review #17, by patronus_charm Prologue

19th November 2013:
Hello there, I’m here with your review! I have to say for your first fan fiction it is rather impressive as mine wasn’t nearly as good!

You asked me to focus on grammar issues and the biggest one here is your grammar in regards to punctuation when there’s dialogue. Here for example ‘Who could be owling me at this time of the morning”, he thought to himself.’ The grammar is nearly correct you just need to place the comma inside of the speech marks rather than outside. But here ‘“I hear not many from our year are returning.” Harry said aloud,’ as ‘harry said aloud’ is a dialogue tag meaning part of the dialogue the punctuation must represent that accordingly and to do that you would place a comma rather than a full stop after returning.

Then finally here “Oculus Reparo” Hermione had shown her skill’ as Hermione showing her skill is not related to what she said (as in a dialogue tag – said/cried/whispered) it has to be represented in punctuation with a full stop after reparo. I hope this makes some sense to you and if it doesn’t feel free to PM me for further explanation or look at some of the tutorials on the forums as they’re really useful.

I have to say I really liked Hermione’s characterisation in this story. In lots of Draco and Hermione stories she’s very OOC which bothers me a lot, but here she’s handing out their homework timetables with the joy you would expect to her which was great. Then I liked the twist of Harry and Ron coming back too and I wonder how that will mix things up.

I did find you ellipses a little too much in this story so it rather began to lose its effect, so if you try and refrain from using them a little more it might be a good idea. The same goes for the longer paragraphs as it meant that I lost my concentration after a while, so perhaps if you spilt them up into smaller ones it would be better.

I would like to see a little more description such as what they look like, facial expressions, how they move, carriage interior, but then again, this is only your first story which is already really impressive so I can’t wait to see some of your work in a month’s time because I can tell that you’ll improve a lot in that time!

I hope you find some use in this review!


Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes , I totally see what you mean. Thank you thank you!! I will continue to work on the details. You have been very helpful.

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Review #18, by SkyEcho Prologue

14th November 2013:
Hi P0tter fan! I'm here with your requested review. I like that you have everyone coming back to Hogwarts. For me, it did feel a little choppy to jump from one person's perspective to another's so quickly. But that might be because this was the Prologue. I liked that you included the letter Blaise sent Draco and let us "see" it rather than just describing what it said. I also thought you did a good job capturing Hermione's personality. I laughed at how she had already created planners for everyone!
In some places your quotation marks are slightly off and you are missing some punctuation. Some spots I noticed this are when Ron says "...and any job we want!" and when Harry says "But, the school year hasn't even begun Hermione." Maybe putting in a request for a Beta reader would help smooth these things over.
I can imagine the fears Mrs. Weasley would have watching them all go back to Hogwarts so it was nice to see that you included that.
Great start! I hope some of my comments were helpful to you :)

Author's Response: Yes, very helpful. Thank you!!

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Review #19, by molly jackson The End of an Era

20th October 2013:
Best story i ever read and it was finished too most of the stories on this site are not they leave you hanging of a cliff

Author's Response: That means so much to me! Thank you! I hope you will enjoy the next part of their story as well!! Thanks again for reading!

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Review #20, by molly jackson Time in St. Mungo's

20th October 2013:
Omg its so sad hermoine forgets about draco

Author's Response: I know :( thanks soo much for reading and for reviewing!!

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Review #21, by molly jackson McGonagall's news

20th October 2013:
Wow dracos nice to house elves?

Author's Response: I believe this is a duplicate review, but I figured I should answer it anyway. Otherwise I can't say I answer all reviews

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Review #22, by molly jackson McGonagall's news

20th October 2013:
Wow dracos nice to house elves?

Author's Response: I just didn't think Hermione would approve if he wasn't...

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Review #23, by molly jackson The Halloween Ball

20th October 2013:
Oh this chaptar is so romantic

Author's Response: Thanks! I am so glad you enjoyed it!

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Review #24, by molly jackson Losing Control

20th October 2013:
I love this chapter its halarius

Author's Response: It was a fun one to write for sure!

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Review #25, by Meuba Time in St. Mungo's

7th October 2013:
Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: coming soon! Thanks so much for reading!!

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