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Review #1, by Lululuna Basic Beginnings

9th January 2014:
Hi Janelle! :)

Ooh, I like this a lot. The flirty fluffiness and hidden emotions are wonderful, and really cheered me up after working on my dark story all day. :P I really like Sophia so far, she seems really feisty and goofy, but also with this darker part to her personality which I'm very curious to find out more about. It's great how you can write darker characters - like Walburga and Annibel, whose lives are very serious and dangerous, and then also have a more light-hearted story like this one.

So Sophia is a Lestrange?! That's such a twist. I'll admit I was pleasantly confused throughout the story about who exactly she's related to. At first I was shipping her and Scorpius together until I realized they were siblings of some sort - awkward :P - but was a bit thrown off when she called the Malfoys by their first names. But if she's a Lestrange, then maybe the Malfoys are raising her if she's a cousin of theirs? But then who are her parents?! I'm also really curious to find out if her friends know about her Lestrange heritage, I imagine there would be some rather bad blood between the Weasleys and the Lestranges so I'm very curious to find out more!

Ah, I'm so happy she fancies Louis! That's adorable, and he sounds so dreamy, although I'm curious to get to know him a little better as it sounds like he's playing with Sophia's emotions a little, whether intentionally or not. They had some really adorable moments on the train, and I like how she was teasing him a little as well.

The hound comment was interesting. Hmm, do we perhaps have some more illegal animals running around the castle at night? :P

I was wondering, did something happen between Soph and the Wotters? Because at first she seems like she really dislikes them and that people are staring at her for some reason involving them, but then she's quite happy to see Lucy and some of the others. I'm not sure if you discuss this more in the first chapter but some hints about who exactly she's avoiding and echoes of her resentment when they come into the compartment might make that a little clearer. :)

At this point I have no idea who I want to ship Sophia with - Louis? Albus? James?! But that's a good thing. I really love all the male characters, and especially the description of Freddie and how he has his own broom closet. Too funny!

This is more just a personal preference but does Sophia have a particularly strong swearing habit? If that's not an important part of her character (I know she is not exactly a good influence :P) then I do think her swearing was a little distracting, and I think swear words are always more impactful when used sparingly. Something to consider would be subbing out the F-bombs for other swear words, the kind JKR might use in the books. This would also help the story and dialogue sound more British! For example (ah I don't want to accidentally make this more than 12+), the Brits use milder swears like things involving "pants", "blood" turned into an adjective, "sod" instead of the F word, things like that. Or even bringing in Merlin and some baggy piece of clothing as a special wizarding swear - "Merlin's soggy socks" and so forth. :P Just a suggestion, so feel free to ignore me. :P And if you have no idea what I was going on about with these swear words then just PM me, haha. :)

Anyway, this was a great start to your story and really brightened up my day! :D Well done! :)

Author's Response: Hi, Jenna!

I've tried hard to vary in my different stories, so I thought I'd write this one! The problem is that I think I do better with dark ones though ;D

For the sake of the readers, I won't answer your questions, but their answers will all be revealed and I hope that everything will be clear as the story progresses.

I'll definitely go through and brit pick this. It's been a good while since I last edited these chapters, so I will have to go back through :p thanks for pointing it out, though!

Thanks so much!

-Janelle


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Review #2, by DumbledoresArmyRocks Crazy Companions

5th January 2014:
Hey, this is your 2nd prize review. I really enjoy this story. Sophia is an awesome character and I love the way she addresses everything and everyone. She has this attitude about her that I love. I also love the way the characters interact. And her love/ hate relationship with Louis. I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

-Janelle


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Review #3, by LittleLionGirl Basic Beginnings

12th September 2013:
Wow. I really did enjoy this. It is nice to have more of an understanding of the "Three Stooges" early on and the distinction as to how they all act. Obviously some more background will have to be added with Luce, Scrop, and Al but you are off to a nice start. You fixed your format issues! Trust me when I say you have came a long way. I know this is still just the beginning of your amazing work though. Cant wait to see you make it all the way :)
XOXOXOXOX,
LLG

Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate it! I have come a long way since DWLBASTDWM. One thing I did learn is to not choose such a long title! But yes, it will definitely be more in depth and detailed than my first one. Thanks hun!

-Janelle


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Review #4, by Haley Basic Beginnings

4th September 2013:
i love it so far, it's really well written!

Author's Response: Thanks!

-Janelle


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