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Review #1, by LilyEPotter Let's Begin

31st August 2013:
I'm here for a review!

I thought that the story flow was very good as were the characterizations.

I noticed a few items. The first being the tense tends to change between present and past. I saw one spelling error - "bulgers" instead of "bludger". And the phrase "trailed by her father behind him" looks like it should read "trailed by her father behind her".

You do have how harried a mother can get while trying to take care of family and the house. And poor Ginny to get hurt because of her son's prank.

Good job!

Author's Response: Thank You! And I'll be sure to fix them when I can! I really appreciate the feed back!
-Brennings


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