Reading Reviews for The New Pride of Portree
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Review #1, by BellaLestrange87 Epilogue

19th May 2015:
Hello! Apparently I'm one of those people who leave one review at the end of the entire novel. I'm also on my phone, so please ignore any typos.

This whole story was awesome. I loved the bickering between everybody, especially the team banter. A lot of the jokes your characters said made me laugh out loud (and I can't give you any specific examples because there were too many).

Molly and Fitz have a wonderful, realistic relationship. I love how even though they're dating (and then married) they still bicker with each other. I like the way they came together, too - worrying about what the other person thinks.

Considering I've read all of your next-gen novels + Unsinkable, I feel bad that this is the first review I've left you (and probably shorter than usual, too).


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Review #2, by slytherinchica08 Drills and Defense

17th May 2015:
My enjoyment of this story continues. The last bit in particular was my favorite what with them both sort of admitting their feelings for each other, or at least fitz wondering if there ever might be a chance for the two of them. I really like how he is finally willing to listen to Molly about different drills they might do and other coaching ideas like watching old matches to get ideas.

The flow of the story has been really nice so far and I never notice how long a chapter actually is. Instead I'm sucked into the chapter and before I know it, the end of the chapter has come. I very much look forward to reading more.


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Review #3, by slytherinchica08 Flight and Family

17th May 2015:
Another fantastic chapter. Your description is really beautiful and you do an absolutely great job of switching between point of views, it's really seamless. The characterizations are also really well done and I've enjoyed each new person youve introduced us to. I think Hugo is great and love that he wants to research more about fitz and the spell damage, it gives me hope for him that maybe he will be able to fly again like he used to. I also loved the sister interactions between Molly and Lucy. It was really sweet and was something that I could see two sisters who know and love each other very much doing. I also loved that molly admitted her attraction of fitz to her sister. This was a great chapter and I can't wait to read the next.


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Review #4, by slytherinchica08 The Dreaded Ex

3rd May 2015:
Ah Mariah Waldman, that's the name that I was trying to think of last chapter! I'm so glad you mentioned that right away in the beginning or I would probably have gone insane trying to remember the name by myself. Ah see, I thought that there was some kind of entanglement between the two (Fitz and Mariah that is) but to be honest, I only thought that things went as far as dating but didn't realize that they had actually been married and are now divorced... that definitely makes things rather interesting between the two.

I thought that the chapter was very enjoyable and I love how the characters are developing. It was nice to see Molly interacting with her other teammates and see how she handles them and how her personality changes a bit. She is very funny though, what with color coding everything including her liquor bottles. And I thought that the ending was a nice sweet little touch. It was very enjoyable to see a rather sweet interaction between Fitz and Molly and the slight butterflies that are already beginning for her. I'm very much interested to see where the rest of this story will go! Great Job!


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Review #5, by slytherinchica08 The New Lineup

3rd May 2015:
I love how much the characterizations are really shining through in this chapter. You can really tell that Molly much prefers to have things all in line for her, everything planned out and just as it should be. Where as Fitz is much more a take things as they come, bitter personality. Of course, he definitely has reason to be bitter considering the one thing that he really loved and enjoyed doing was taken from him.

I definitely find myself sympathizing with both of them, Molly in that Fitz really seems to just kind of shove her by the side feeling like she is just trying to step on her toes when really she just wants to help devise the best plans for a winning team. And I also understand why Fitz feels the way he feels. He wants to prove himself as well and doesn't want someone to come along and do his job for him.

I'm very much interested to see where this story will go and how these characters who were thrown together with half the amount of training time will be able to pull through the season. It will also be very interesting to see how things will progress between our two main characters and how they will be able to put aside the bitterness that they both hold for each other at the moment. And it also seems like there is going to be another wild card in this story as well, in the shape of one of the reserve players.

Anyways, this was another great chapter and I really enjoyed it. I'll be along to read and review the next chapter soonish!


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Review #6, by hg2000 An Off Day

2nd May 2015:
I like seeing Meghan with this guy. What's the deal there ?

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Review #7, by slytherinchica08 The Harpy With the Mohawk

30th April 2015:
Figured I would start off my reviewing challenge right by finally coming by sand reading this story. And boy am I glad I did. I had completely forgotten just how much I enjoy your characterization! Each person that you introduce is completely fresh compared to what we are normally presented with and I think it's absolutely wonderful. I also really loved how we got a look into more then one persons view, I think that it really adds to the story and helps me understand the characters much better. I thought this first chapter was really well done and did a great job of settng up the story. It gave me enough information to feel comfortable with the world you were presenting as well as leaving many open questions that I want answered and making me interested to read more of the story to find out. I feel like this review is rather rubbish but as I'm about to fall asleep I figure I'll leave it here. Great chapter!


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Review #8, by The Basilisk The Harpy With the Mohawk

24th March 2015:
Hello WTM! It'ss the Basilisssk.

I absolutely love this story, goodness me! You're a wonderful writer and if I could scoop up your writing talent and run off with it I definitely would. Alas, that's not an option. Instead I'll just read your work. :P

One of the things I love about your writing is that everything is so well rounded. You know the saying "jack of all trades, master of none"? I'd call you more of a "jack of all trades, master of all", haha. From the way you have a nice mix between humour and angst, while still making everything believable; to the way your characters develop in a real way, letting us get to know them and empathise with them to the point where it seems like every one is a MC and we want a story for all of them, and it emulates real life where you are constantly aware that each and every person has an important backstory, even if we don't know it; to the way the words just flow, making for light, easy reading. (Holy heck that was a long sentence.)

You are, without question, one of my favourite authors on the site.

(Molly and her mohawk, oh my gosh. I can just imagine it now! I'm only giggling a little...)

(I've decided to post 44 reviews over the next little while. Each one of them has a character at the bottom. If you can find all 44 reviews (not all are out yet, so keep your eyes peeled) and rearrange the letters into a quote from Harry Potter and PM it to WriteYourHeartOut on the forums you could win a donation to HPFF in your name! There's a topic in the Off Topic Section if you want to collaborate your efforts!

Anyway, I'm very glad to have gotten the chance to read thisss, ssso thank you for the amazing read.
The Basilisk


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Review #9, by Shinicha The Harpy With the Mohawk

27th November 2014:
Great! I love stories that are set in one universe :) I'm sorry to keep my reviews short - your stories are perfect anyway, so I hope it suffices to say: love it!!

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Review #10, by RupertsPheonix Epilogue

2nd November 2014:
Aaaah! What a perfect close to a great fic! I have so enjoyed reading this!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the story :D

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Review #11, by Pasty Epilogue

26th October 2014:
Fantastic - I think this has been my favourite story of yours so far. Looking forward to reading what you write next!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it.

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Review #12, by knitting_goddess Epilogue

23rd October 2014:

Yeah, I'll leave it at that. You're a wonderful and talented writer, and your stories always draws me in completely, please never stop writing :)

Author's Response: Aw thank you very much! I really appreciate the kind review :)

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Review #13, by reviewghost Epilogue

20th October 2014:
I think this is my first time reviewing this story. This is the first of your stories I stumbled upon. It had 8 chapters at the time. Since then, I have read all of your stories (at least I think I have), and I love them all. Of course, I didn't realize that this was a continuation of a universe until I read your other stories, but I really enjoyed reading them and discovering more about the world you write about. You have the best Molly/Arthur story I've read, one of the best Rose/Scorpius, etc. You also wrote some of the first fan fiction in general I ever read. I guess I just want to say that I loved your stories and I've been with this one for a while, but I kind of rambled. Sorry, I do that. Anyway, your work means a lot to me (and this review is coming from someone who doesn't really review) and I wanted to say that. I have had a lot of fun with Rose and Molly and Lucy and Roxanne and everyone your write about. You know what? I revise my statement. I really just wanted to say thank you, for writing your stories and introducing me into this, the continuation of Harry Potter. So, thank you.

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Review #14, by ThestralPrincess Epilogue

19th October 2014:
aw, love the ending. :D Also love the mention of Johnny Lupin :) Looking forward to see what you write next!!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

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Review #15, by PetrificusTotalus Flight and Family

19th October 2014:
Only time for a quick review before I read the next chapter! Loving this so far, excited to read on! :)

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I hope you enjoy the story. :)

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Review #16, by Snuffles Epilogue

19th October 2014:
I meant babies 7 and 8 (in Done).
BTW. Please give us another story. You got me addicted

Author's Response: I'll try to get another story out soon! I've got one half-written from Scorpius's POV, hoping to have that done by Thanksgiving. :)

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Review #17, by Snuffles Epilogue

19th October 2014:
This was so cute! Your characters sound so real. I can't picture the Wealey family in any other way than the way you write them.
Just a little doubt: I didn't really get you time line in this story. I read all of them (more than once, I have to confess - chuckles) and if in this story Victoire has only five kids, where exactly does it fits (time wise ). Because she is going to babies 6 and 7 isn't she? Xoxoxoxo

Author's Response: Ah, I must admit, my timelines in Next Gen are a little fuzzy. I make a bit of effort at having it all fall into line, but don't be surprised if it doesn't always match up. Whoops. It started that way in JAMR because Rose was so vague about things like how old the Lupin kids are or how long she and Scorpius have been together, and then I had to nail down exact dates after and it just. Well. It's timeline-ish.

I'm glad you like the story and my version of the Weasleys! Victoire goes to babies 6, then 7 and 8. Because she and Teddy are crazy people lol. Thanks so much for reviewing.

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Review #18, by coolgf Epilogue

19th October 2014:
Omg. This is so cute. Now on to James, Albus, Lily and Hugo. Thank you. You can do it, more please.

Author's Response: I've got an idea I want to write that would be a lot on Lily and Hugo. Hopefully will start writing it in earnest soon! Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #19, by beatergirl21 Epilogue

18th October 2014:
I adored this whole story, the ending was lovely! It was fantastic all the way through and I can't wait to read whatever you do next!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate the review and kind words :)

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Review #20, by knitting_goddess Leverage

17th October 2014:
Oh my deary me, I've got this really nice warm fuzzy feeling in my tummy! :D I just seriously hope they don't mess this up, please don't make them mess this up... Happy endings for everyone!!

Author's Response: I do love a happy ending! I'm glad you liked the chapter :) Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #21, by Penelope Inkwell Therapy

16th October 2014:
Hello hello!

So, first off, I may have mentioned it before, but I love how the team reacts to Fitz and Molly's relationship. And I really enjoyed how Fitz reacted to their put it in the most confusing way possible ; ) Anyway, it's adorable.

Another thing I really like is that you have Fitz and Molly really talk. They've got passion, but they're also just comfortable with one another, discussing things like Molly's feelings on seeing her old teammates, stuff like that. Normal relationship stuff. That's something I feel like it's easy to skip over when you're plotting out a relationship arc, because there's the temptation to only deal with the BIG ISSUES, but the small ones are also hugely important. It makes them seem much more grounded, like they can really make a go of it, and that makes me happy.

Finally, I thought that scene between him and Mariah was very well done. You created an atmosphere in which we were able to feel more charitable toward Mariah, maybe recognize that she isn't all bad, while still remaining kind of wary of her. And I think that's exactly what Fitz feels, so props on really bringing us to that place during the scene. I liked how you had Fitz realize that even though Mariah had been kind of awful, she hadn't always been. And he also takes responsibility for his failings, realizing that maybe he hadn't always been the best husband. Sometimes break-ups are one party's fault, or even (as perhaps is still the case here) mostly one person's fault. But usually it's a two-way street, and when a relationship falls apart, usually both parties have a hand in that, in some way. I'm glad to see Fitz own up to that. It shows maturity, and I think it will help him move on from some of his bitterness.

Also, glad to see that he's going to therapy. I think that'll be a big help. Actually, a team therapist sounds like a *brilliant* idea. If you ever wanted to do a spin-off one-shot, I think it would be so awesome to just have scenes from the official therapy sessions of the Pride of Portree. I would sooo want to read that. So much room for comedy (and serious moments too, of course, but so much humor potential).

Aaand Mariah's going back to Tutshill. That is such a relief. Nice to see some things wrapping up nicely, after all Fitz and Molly have been through. Now, to just deal with McCormack...


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Review #22, by coolgf Leverage

14th October 2014:
This is so great ! So great ! What happens next , a wedding ? Please.

Author's Response: Oh not right away, but of course! I love a classic romantic ending. :)

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Review #23, by ThestralPrincess Leverage

11th October 2014:
YAY! That is all I have to say. :)

Author's Response: Woohoo! Thanks for the review :)

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Review #24, by Rachel Leverage

10th October 2014:

As usual this story continues to be amazing - I'm so glad McCormack came to her senses!...even if she did need a shove from Ballycastle :D

Author's Response: McCormack is secretly a softie when she gets emotionally attached. ;) And she is sensible, so she wants to keep both Fitz and Molly on board. Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #25, by B Leverage

10th October 2014:
Best leverage ever.


Author's Response: lol! Glad you liked that! Thanks for reviewing.

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