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Review #1, by adluvshp Hatred of Hogwarts' House Elves Holiday Decorations

6th March 2014:
Blackout battle!

This was a cute little piece. I enjoyed your portrayal of James very much.
The idea of house-elves planting mistletoe and putting the "charm" on it was hilarious and it was adorable how James got stuck under it.
I was highly amused by the parts where James is thinking what he could be doing instead of being stuck. It made me chuckle.
I also enjoyed Frankie's characterisation. It was very different from how we've seen Neville and I liked that.
The kiss scene had just the right amount of hormones and post-kiss-awkwardness in it haha.
The dialogue was over all quirky and fun to read, and the story idea pretty cute.
The best part of this was the ending. It wasn't cliche at all (thank merlin) that they'd suddenly want to go out or something - things went back to normal (sort of, at least for the time being) and nothing happened too fast, and that was good.
All in all, I enjoyed this as it made for a fun and refreshing read.

Good job!
Cheers,
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Thanks!

This is my first go at writing from the boy's point of view, well, main story wise anyway, and I was terrified I'd get it too one sided or completely unrealistic, so, thank-you again for the review, means a lot.
xxx


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