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Review #1, by adluvshp Endurance

17th March 2014:
Blackout Battle 4/10

This was a very different and interesting one-shot. I liked the idea of having Katie Bell and McLaggen together.

I enjoyed your writing style and narrative. It was quite engaging and made for a smooth read. The dialogue was also quirky and appealing.

The ending was also quite sweet and made me smile. The only CC I'd give is to perhaps include a bit more description along with the dialogue. It will add more colour to the scene if their thoughts and actions are expressed in the narrative along with the dialogue.

Apart from that, this was quite good. I liked your characterisation of Katie and Cormac. This flowed well and it was a refreshing read. Good job!

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(AditiDraco95)

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