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Review #1, by victoria_anne Departed Souls

26th August 2016:
Hey Rachel!

I really, really hope you don't mind me being a creep, but when I saw you on TDA and saw that you had some stories, I couldn't resist having a peek. So many choices and everything looks beautiful! I had to eenie meeni minie mo!

I actually thought this was about James I, I don't know why. Maybe the face claim on the banner threw me off, ha ha, but at any rate, I'm so happy to see it's Albus.

Until I read it, of course.

I'm not crying, it's just allergies...

This was so haunting and beautiful at the same time. You kept me guessing all the way through, wondering what the marks were, why the ghosts were there in the first place. I didn't expect it to go where it did (that's a lie, I sort of started to guess but hoped I was wrong).

Your writing is so wonderful, and I love how time goes on and we see Albus slowly slipping into his little madness.

I'm glad I decided to go with my creep instincts! Look at all the shiny new stories I have to read!

♥ Bianca

Author's Response: Pfft, you're not a creep at all! ♥ Although "some" stories is probably an understatement, I used to live on the archives, you know? I've been debating about writing something again soon -- I do miss it.

I don't really see Logan Lerman as Albus Severus, so I usually do end up with a good old Aaron Johnson, sans glasses. I hope I didn't make you cry, though! But really, thank you for the lovely comments. I have a degree in professional writing and I'm currently seeking publication for a couple of novels, so they truly do mean a lot to me. Also -- I love writing me some crazies. No idea why.

Thanks so much for taking the time to review, Bianca! I had a lot of fun making your forums set. Hope to see you back around here before too long!

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Review #2, by Effie Trinket Departed Souls

22nd April 2015:
Hello Rachel

I am Effie Trinket, and I am here because former tribute over at the forums told me you did not attend the reaping today. Therefore you don't know that you have been chosen as this years tribute, along with a fellow member of HPFF. I am here to tell you so, and I'll even leave a review to show you how much of an honor this truly is.

This was very interesting, I must say. I don't know much about this world you're writing about, but I don't think there is a lot of stories like this one. It had a supernatural thing to do, but at the same time I was kind of creepy/twisted. I'm not a believer of ghosts myself, but I do think it's fascinating to read stories about them. And if there is such a thing as ghosts, I'm sure you will see your fair share of them in the arena, when you will be going there as HPFF's tribute.

I feel sorry this Albus. He must have had a hard time, especially since most people would not believe his stories of ghosts (me included). I do believe the war before his birth might have affected him, because I have seen a lot of mental illnesses in tributes that won the games. Katniss and Peeta are good examples of that, especially Peeta after later events after the 75th Hunger Games (you may know what I am talking about). But I would not worry, if you win the game you will get over it in time, I'm sure.

The burn marks were very interesting. I'm not sure why they were on different body parts, but - like I said earlier - I do not know much this world your writing about. And there may not have been a purpose behind it, of course.

Anyway, I think we should be heading to the Capitol now with your fellow tribute from District HPFF. I will allow you to say your goodbyes, so I will meet you at the train station in half an hour. I will like to remind you beforehand - because learned that you do need to remind tributes of this, after Katniss almost destroyed it - the tables are mahogony. Do not destroy them!

So please be on time at the train station, and - most importantly - may the odds be ever in your favor!

Best of Luck

Effie Trinket

Author's Response: This is one of the best reviews I've ever received.

Thanks for leaving it, mysterious Effie. ♥

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Review #3, by RoseOwl Departed Souls

16th March 2014:
I really liked this story, especially its ending. I love reading anything from the mind!horror genre and yours stands out very well. You descriptions and characters were easy to imagine. I just wish that it may been longer.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! This was a lot of fun to write -- I like dipping into the mental illness side of the horror genre on occasion. I'm usually not much of one for next gen, which is probably why I don't usually write long pieces in that era, but I'm happy you enjoyed this nevertheless. Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #4, by theblacksisters Departed Souls

29th September 2013:
Interesting, and very weird. It is probobly the first story most like a regular horror story I've read on this site.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm actually insanely proud of that -- dark/horror is one of my favorite genres to write. Weirdness is all-inclusive in that deal, I'm afraid, but I hope it was at least a semi-good kind of weird.

Thank you for taking the time to review! ♥

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Review #5, by patronus_charm Departed Souls

20th August 2013:
Hola, Rachel! I'm here for my part of the exchange!

As you know I am usually left in awe of your work and talent but this story really was just something else. Everything about it was so unique and wonderfully complex that it made for an amazing story! I think this may even be my favourite piece of your work. ♥

The one-shot had this brilliant supernatural air to it throughout which really highlighted Albus' inner turmoil and made me question what was really going on inside of his mind. As well as being that, it also had this almost creepy air to it which acted as a great prelude to the ending scene where everything merged together and was great rounding up to the story.

The choice of Albus being the one to face this was a great one because he always seemed a little odd to me, and that he would reflect more on the war and the past than the others. By having those ghosts too, made me wonder whether this could have actually happened to them all.

More on the ghosts! I really liked how they all appeared one by one because it was as if you were trying to say without one you couldn't have had the complete story and that was a really nice touch. I'm still mildly confused about why their burns one in those specific places but it was a good confusion and helped me understand what Albus was going through even more.

The minor things in this one-shot such as Rose and Scorpius the lesson and Albus' marks really made a subtle difference to the story. I guess the best way to describe it as that it kept it grounded and therefore relatable, making me believe it could happen even more.

Then the ending! I really didn't expect that. I mean, I had thought it might occur throughout the story as there we're lots of hints in regards to his sanity especially when the potion was brought up but I never expected something so powerful. That scene really was an excellent display of your talents. There was just something about it which made me sense it in its entirety.

I'm so glad I got paired with you so I had the chance to read this amazing piece of work! ♥

Author's Response: Kiana! ♥ Okay, it's been a shamefully long time since you left this review (and I've got another of yours to answer, too!), but what can I say? Your reviews intimidate me. You didn't just win a Best Reviewer Dobby for nothing! And while I'm at it, thank you so much for nominating this story for Featured One-Shot, too!

I'm so glad you enjoyed this, too. :) I love writing about dark, twisted things, but I like to think that I'm not necessarily a dark and twisted person, and so it's sometimes worrisome because stories are always taken to be reflective of their authors, no matter how true that is or not. But getting along with minor depression and a couple of different anxiety disorders means that writing becomes my outlet for those things. I think that's why I write so much mental illness into my work. But I don't think you wanted to know all that. :P I'm IMMENSELY flattered that you think this might be your favorite of my stories!

I think of any of the next gen kids, Albus would be the one with issues, and I don't know why. But you seem to agree! I don't make a habit of writing much next gen in the first place, and the one novella I have in this era is very light, so it's something of unbroken ground for me. I'd love to return to next gen like this, though -- I sort of understand the pull after writing this story.

There's no real reason why James Potter and Snape were burned in those specific places. They were just all supposed to connect up to Lily's, but hers is somewhat symbolic. She died for love; her love protected her son. She "gave up" her heart for him, and Albus's mind would have reckoned that in some way, because I'm of the impression Harry would have told him. I don't know if that makes any sense, but it's just a physical representation of Lily and her sacrifice, imprinted on her memory/ghost form.

Thank you so much for swapping with me this month! I'd missed the review exchange, and this made me remember how fun it was. ♥

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Review #6, by Remus Departed Souls

29th July 2013:
Heya! Perelandra here from the forums! :D

Holy cow! What did I just read?!

I really, really enjoyed this fic. It certainly is different. I'm not very fond of death, in fact, it quite freaks me out, that's why I like ghosts because it gives me this idea that there's something else beyond death. I mean, we never really know until that time but still. This fic is certainly haunting. It got creepy towards the end as well, I mean, I had no idea where this was going. Part of me thought that they were there to just warn him of a future danger but no! They were there to take him away.

But now I want to know why! Why would James, Lily and Snape do that? Did they want a piece of Harry? Were they saving him from a fate that was much worse than the Elixir?

This made me sad, not only for Albus but also for Harry and Ginny and the rest of his family.

The description and imagery was fantastic. I could see everything in my head. The ghosts, Lily's haunting look, their marks. *shudders* What I liked the most about Lily was that you kept her last facial expression. Grief, surprise. Fright. I just wanted to know why they were there just so they could leave. I too would be terrified if I found a ghost just staring at me. Constantly. And things got worse for Albus when it was the three of them just staring at him. Waiting.

Really great story! Depressing and dark but still overall great read! So thank you for letting me read this.


Author's Response: You have just read one of my attempts at getting into the insane mind... which happens more often than is perhaps socially acceptable. ;) I'm so happy you enjoyed it, though! I don't know why it's become the norm for me to write mental illness, but there you have it. Death absolutely freaks me out, and so writing someone who accepts it, in the end, was sort of cathartic.

I think James and Lily and Snape -- since Snape is all about protecting the Potters -- were there to sort of ease Albus into his death, to provide familiar faces until he crossed and to get him accustomed to the idea. I don't know if he was always fated to die, or if he was just crazy and made that choice himself. That's really up for the reader to decide. :) I like to think, though, that they were sort of like his guardian angels.

Thank you for the comment about the imagery, too! ♥ I would be so terrified if I was Albus, but then, I'm not a Gryffindor or a Potter. So there's that.

Your offer to review one-shots for people -- that's amazing, you know? I really do admire you for it. :) And thanks for being willing to read one of mine again!

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Review #7, by BKL8008 Departed Souls

17th July 2013:
How can I say this? This was just 'delicious darkness', at the same time being a great thrill ride of a read, and a horrible shock as well. It's a rare piece that evokes such emotions, as to just sit here and be shocked, and say no, I hate this...when all along, the read was really enjoyable. We never see the ending coming, certainly, and it's devastating. So very well done that words just fail. I don't know what you mean by memory!Albus, but I am sad to see him go. And I only 'knew' him for about 4k words.

Author's Response: I'm so glad to see you back again, and even more to see you enjoyed this! I love writing dark stories, and this one feels different than anything I'd done before. I try and evoke emotions in everything I write, but especially in stories like this, when it's so easy to distance yourself, if you choose. (If that makes any sense at all.) Memory!Albus just comes from the fact that what he sees are technically memories, instead of proper ghosts -- but he does refer to them as ghosts, because, as he says, they do "haunt" him.

I don't have words to respond to this review properly -- only that I really do thank you for taking the time to read it at all. :) It really does mean so, so much to me. I hope you're doing well!

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Review #8, by Toujours Padfoot Departed Souls

17th July 2013:
♥ ♥ ♥ Firstly, I am very happy you did not give up on memory!Albus, and secondly, this was a fabulous fabulous fabulous birthday present and you did not have to and ♥ (hug)

I have a massive thing for ghosts. Most of my original fictions have involved them in at least some small way, and a lot of my fan fictions feature ghosts as well. Death is something I really fear because it is infinite and permanent and unknown and since I am a morbid, masochistic soul I write about it and read about it constantly. Your portrayals of the dead here, with Albus and his ghosts and Albus slowly sliding from afraid and wanting to be normal to sort of becoming a ghost even while still alive - were amazing.

I loved the charred patterns on Lily, James, and Severus's bodies, connecting together. I love that they had color and walked on the ground but emitted no noise, no footsteps. I love that Lily kept pointing at the sky, to beyond, and that her expression was everlasting death etched over her features forever, capturing her last moments in life. It was terrifying and it gave me goosebumps, so of course I loved it.

Their haunting hollowness, just standing there by Albus's bed watching him relentlessly, driving him into sleepless obsession, was skdjfkjf so chilling, so dark. It felt like shadows crept into the story itself and wrapped around Albus and wrapped around me and all I felt was cold, cold, cold.

I know I should feel awful for Albus's family, who don't see it coming - especially James, who will probably feel some sort of responsibility since he knew certain things but will of course feel he didn't try hard enough to learn more - but strangely I feel at peace with it. Albus's ghosts took him at last, after draining the life out of him for months, and I don't know if it was a decision of full awareness or an extremely addled mind, but I will consciously choose that this was Albus's destiny. Even if he's dead. Even if the ghosts weren't just Albus's ghosts but also his demons, and he lost to them.

You write darkness so well, and I think that's wonderful. It makes all the lighter bits, by contrast, very bright. And everything, as always, is poignant and beautiful and meaningful, every word deliberate. I absolutely love this story. I need to pick your brains later to see if the ghosts were real or metaphorical, and what happened to Albus after he finally journeyed to wherever Lily was pointing to.

You are the best. ♥ I LOVE YOU!

Author's Response: Of COURSE I had to -- and yes, I am already feeling bad enough that a one-shot I'd already started writing anyway turned into your birthday present. ♥ I do know how much you love ghosts just from how often you include them, and you've made me really, really interested in them through that, I think. And not only is writing crazies cathartic for getting out the inner crazy, but writing about ghosts is too, because just like you said, death and the unknown absolutely TERRIFY me. Writing about ghosts and death put those fears temporarily at bay. Is that why I write sad, crazy, death-y things all the time? Existential crisis.

And I am actually weirdly attached to my ghosts, which aren't ghosts but memories -- I'd like to explore them further, actually. (Thing # 1,485 you need to talk me out of, because now I want to do a memory!Albus novella.) There is something both creepy and comforting about the fact that your dead grandparents are watching over you, but don't we always say that to people whose loved ones have died? It just happens to be that Albus, in this case, can see them. They are sad and lovely and SO dark, and going off that color thing I've mentioned to you before, this story is almost entirely painted in shadows: Black, dark brown, dark gray, and navy blue. Cold, dark, chilling colors, and it's interesting to me that Al ends up drawing comfort from them.

(I apologize so much for spending most of this review in self-analysis. This is pretty much the least helpful thing I've ever typed.)

I adore, adore, adore that you said you feel at peace at the end of the story -- because typing it all out, and bringing Albus to his end, that was exactly how I felt. And HE was so at peace with dying, too, that it made me really accepting of having to write it. I know his friends and family will mourn him, but as far as he's concerned, that is 100% the way he wanted to go. I'm of the opinion that from day one, that was Albus's fate (although I don't necessarily believe in pre-destination as a rule).

I'm so glad you like my darkness. ♥ I love writing it, more than writing fluff, however fun that can be. It's twistier and it takes more of me, and I want to put myself into every story I write. That's something that just doesn't happen when I write romcom. My dark stories, there are bits and pieces of my personality and mindsets sprinked through them. Wee Horcrux stories!

I hope you had a happy birthday, because you of all people totally deserve it. And I hope you have many more happy birthdays, and I'll get to write you many more stories! I LOVE YOU!

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