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Review #1, by Athene Goodstrength Who am I?

16th July 2013:
What an interesting idea for a story! I liked the changing relationship with Dudley... What a shame he died! But an interesting plot twist :)

The letters from everyone were really sweet and felt quite in character. There are a few grammar and punctuation problems that make this story a little tricky to read - it could perhaps benefit from being read out loud so that you can see where it sounds a little odd, or you could request a beta reader on the forums to help point out some bits you could edit.

Otherwise, this was a sweet little story - I loved the ending. Harry and Ginny forever ;)

Author's Response: Thanks!! (:

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Review #2, by BluebirdBrigade Who am I?

15th July 2013:
Aww, this was a really sweet one-shot and I'm glad that Harry was able to regain his memories rather than lose them forever because he is an important character. I love how his friends really tried to support him as much as possible through this traumatic experience and tried to help him with his memories as much as possible.

I'm glad the love of his life was able to bring him back but I was super sad to see that Dudley had died because they were finally getting along and there was no more of that childhood bullying going on between Dudley and Harry. Really loved this story, as CC i'd just go and weed a couple mistakes out but other than that I really liked it!

Author's Response: Thank you, your feedback means a lot! (:

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Review #3, by Pheonix Potioneer Who am I?

15th July 2013:
This is so sweet! Ginny brought him back. That is true love right there.

There are just a few mistakes- in the beginning of the second paragraph, there is two spaces between "just" and "one". In the very beginning, you never finished "Wake up boy!" with a quotation Mark. And occasionally there is commas missing after a line, since every time somebody says something, a comma needs to be at the end.

I never really thought about what would happen if Harry lost his memory. That thought just never really occurred to me. Very creative, coming up with something like that!

I wonder how McGonagall found out where Harry was? I don't think they read the muggle news.

The ending was so sweet, with Harry remembering because of Ginny. True love. This is a very good story!

Author's Response: Thank you so very much!! (:

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