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Review #1, by AlexFan Of Crumple-Horned Snorkacks

13th July 2013:
That was so sweet! This is the first Rolf/Luna story that I've read and I really enjoyed it! There are so few fanfiction a about these two and I'm glad that you decided to write a traveling story about them.

They seemed to get along very well, Luna sounds like the perfect person for Rolf because she seems more fun and quirky than he is. I always expected Rolf to be odd for some reason but I could never explain why I felt that way. Anyway, I like your Rolf much better than the one that I imagined.

But were Rolf and Luna really together for four months?! It seemed like a day at the maximum that the two of them hiked together. I felt so sad and disappointed for Luna when she found out Crumple-Horned Snorkacks didn't exist. This big drew and wish of hers that she had suddenly disappears. I felt so bad for her.

Anyway, I think you did a great job on this!

Author's Response: First of all, thanks so much

When I was writing this, I was very worried about Luna. She has a very particular way of being written and I wasn't sure how anyone would react to my style of her because I knew I wouldn't be able to match J.K.'s. Rolf just sort of came and after I finished with him I didn't want to change him. He fit with Luna.

I wasn't too sure how to write them together. I wanted them to crisscross Sweden, but there would only be so many interesting things to be written about. But when I'm out backpacking or camping I always lose track of time, so I was thinking neither would really have a schedule.

Thank you so much!


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Review #2, by patronus_charm Of Crumple-Horned Snorkacks

13th July 2013:
Hi!

I really loved Luna's characterisation - it was really wonderful. You had her quirkiness down really well with her wanting to feel the weight of what she's carrying and her being open about her life and it was really great.

The way Luna and Rolf met was great! Of course those two would be intrepid explorers and I really loved the idea of those two exploring foreign lands together and seeing all of their adventures was really great!

One CC I would suggest is using more contractions in dialogue, because without them it made it stilted and formal and by using them it would fit them better.

I liked the idea of Rolf being a schoolmate of them because he did just seem to pop up out of nowhere whereas this gave them more of a backstory. Another thing I really liked was how Rolf seemed to be impressed with meeting Luna as it showed how awesome she really was.

That was a great one shot and really captured all of Luna's quirks!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I will remember to use contractions. I think my English teachers have finally drilled something into me...

I am always nervous to write Luna because some people write her horribly and I didn't want to be one of them. I'm glad that you felt that it was realistic and Rolf had to be someone. I couldn't imagine that he was homeschooled because Newt Scamander was a Headmaster of Hogwarts! (Found that out when I was researching.) Yeah, Luna is awesome. 'Nuff said.


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Review #3, by BluebirdBrigade Of Crumple-Horned Snorkacks

13th July 2013:
Hello, I'm here for the HC review-a-thon!

I'm a big Luna/Rolf shipper but I don't read all that many stories about them. I really liked this interpretation of how they met and got close. I think it was a really good idea actually because he gets to know Luna and he starts to like her for all her quirks. I think you also showed his sensitivity well to things that he knows don't exist. I was kind of expecting them to actually find a Crumple-Horned Snorkack by the end but I was surprised.

I actually liked the fact that they didn't find it because it made them closer as a couple, although it was sad to see Luna's childhood shatter. But the emotional realisation that they don't exist really drew them closer as a couple because Rolf was supportive and caring which was lovely to see. I am such a sucker for any romantic storyline but this really drew me in and I liked the way you added things to her character such as the fact that she wanted to feel the weight of what she was carrying - that to me was really Luna-esque.

I thought this was a great adventurous story that really added a cool twist to the travel theme. The ending really worked for me and I thought that it added a small punch of sadness to a sweet story making it bitter sweet. I love the way you wrote Rolf and Luna, they seem quite realistic although lonely people which is why I'm glad they found each other. Great descriptions and I didn't see any grammar or spelling mistakes at all - great job!

Maz x

Author's Response: Thanks so much! It's sort of nerve racking to read reviews for a story with Luna as the central character. I had trouble with the travel idea at first since to be a naturalist you couldn't just portkey everywhere or something since you didn't know where everything was. As a backpacker I knew a bit about how it went down (not really enough) so I figured that Luna would want some of the "muggle" charm to be with nature.

I think there aren't too many well written Luna/Rolf stories (at least not that I've seen) so I can hopefully broaden that spectrum! Thanks so much for reading!


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Review #4, by HeyMrsPotter Of Crumple-Horned Snorkacks

13th July 2013:
This was lovely :) I thought you wrote Luna really well, sometimes people over-do it on her looniness but you definitely didn't. I like the personality you've created for Rolf too and that he just started following her round out of curiosity. The only thing that I thought was a little OOC was Luna admitting the snorcacks don't exist, I think, especially if it was he fathers last wish, that she wouldn't ever give up searching for them but that's just personal opinion. This was well written, sweet and funny :)

Author's Response: Thank you for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed my writings of Rolf and Luna because, since Luna is a favorite character of many, it's a bit scary to write her. Especially when it is so easy to get wrong. As for Luna admitting that Snorkacks don't exist, I believe that J.K. said in an interview somewhere that eventually after years of searching she did finally admit that not everything exists. Wish I had a link for you, but I'm afraid I don't. Thanks for reading!

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Review #5, by maskedmuggle Of Crumple-Horned Snorkacks

13th July 2013:
Hey!

I really enjoyed reading this story, even if the ending was a pretty sad realisation for Luna.. but at the same time very heartwarming with Luna/Rolf's hug! I thought it was great that Luna would continue to search for the crumple-horned snorkack.. and shen she finally realised that they didn't exist.. I thought the tear portrayed her emotions and really conveyed how important it had meant to her. I also thought the plot was very realistic and believable, as were both Luna and Rolf's characterisation.

Luna really is a one of a kind character and I really loved this sentence - it just seems SO Luna! She was honest and straightforward enough but never really gave you what you wanted unless you specifically asked for it. The relationship between Luna and Rolf was also well developed - from not knowing each other to becoming well, friends! Really lovely and well written story! :)

- Charlotte/maskedmuggle
House Cup 2013 Ravenclaw

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I was a bit nervous submitting this, but I'm glad that it went over well and I'm very glad that you enjoyed it.

That quote was my summarization of what Luna would grow into. Once she cast off the awkward teenage years, she wouldn't blurt things out as much, but would still be slightly cryptic and brutally honest. Thanks for reading!


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Review #6, by nott theodore Of Crumple-Horned Snorkacks

12th July 2013:
Hello! I'm here reviewing for Gryffindor in the house cup :)

I saw the title of this story in the thread and knew I had to read it! I really liked your characterisation of Luna in this story. I don't think that she's an easy character to write but the way you portrayed her felt consistent with the person we see in the books. She was calm and collected, completely unfazed by everything and not at all bothered what people think about her. It's exactly how I imagine her to be, even once she's grown up.

I loved the reason for her travelling, with Luna on a mission to find the Crumple-Horned Snorkack. She mentions that her father's last wish was for her to find proof of the creature existing, and I think that small detail really helped emphasise how upset she would be when she had to admit that they didn't exist. It's not only a failure on her part, but also being unable to fulfill her father's last wish, which would make the knowledge even harder to deal with.

Rolf was a great character. I've always found myself wondering what sort of person would end up marrying Luna, and the way that you portrayed his character here was very realistic for me; I can definitely picture the two as a pair. While they're both naturalists and meet while travelling around Europe and searching for new and unusual creatures, Rolf seems more down-to-earth and normal than Luna. You can tell that they're both good for each other, and that they kind of balance each other out. I really liked him!

As for CC, I'd suggest a quick reread as there are a few typos and missing commas and such, although that's nothing major. This was a really enjoyable one-shot!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I think everyone when they decide to write Luna gets a bit nervous because we are all scared on whether we can do Luna justice or not. You see a lot of bad portrayals of her by other fanfic writers so I was nervous. But I'm glad that it seemed accurate.

I wanted to see who this Rolf would be like and he isn't very prominent in the fanfic world so I decided to write him. I'm glad that you think he would be Luna's guy because while I thought Neville and her were cute, they never really fit together for me. So I used the information that we had on him, and then made how I imagined a guy to fall in love with her was like.

I'm glad you liked the touch of a dying wish because I think that in the end, that's what Xeno would want of his daughter. But I also think that he would be proud of Luna no matter what. Thanks for reading!


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Review #7, by LittleLionGirl Of Crumple-Horned Snorkacks

12th July 2013:
Wow. I have to say this was very well written zipzin. Luna is portrayed just how I would have seen her; grown up but not too different. The relationship seems very realistic for her too... It is just too bad about the Crumple-Horned Snorkacks. I still think they exist though :)
XOXOX,
LLG

Author's Response: Wow thanks! It is always a bit scary to write Luna because well J. K. wrote her so distinctly. Thanks so much for the review!

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