Reading Reviews for Fred and George: Spies Like Us
  
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Review #1, by Chazzie To Become a Spy

3rd March 2014:
Hey there!
I really liked this one-shot, it felt quite light hearted and very Weasley Twinish. It's an interesting twist to what could have happened, and rather believable due to the fact that they are so desperate to help out. They want to do something and they are a little reckless. It's AU, yes, but not terribly so. It would quite easily have fitted in with the books!
Chazzie (Review 5/10 for the Slytherin/Gryffindor Blackout)

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

When I wrote this piece after OOTP was released, I saw how the twins might be tricked into helping the wrong side from how they really wanted to help the Order throughout the book.

I find it challenging to keep the characters as canon as possible in their actions even if the situations might not be. :)

Thank you!
LEP:)


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Review #2, by marauderfan To Become a Spy

5th July 2013:
I'm glad you requested a review on this because I adore Fred and George! :D I was already laughing 3 paragraphs in when George refers to Fred as "Gred". And then when he introduced himself to the girls as Fred. So the characterisation of the twins was good. I think they might have joked around a bit more, but I suppose even mischief makers have to take things seriously once in a while too!

You asked about description as well. The description of the WWW shop is really well done, the way you add in little details among the dialogue. The rest of the story wasn't quite as descriptive, but it probably doesn't need to be if you don't want to: after all, we already know what Privet Drive and Grimmauld Place look like.

As for the story flow, I think you did it really well. The plot twist was a nice touch too - when Harry told them what had happened I realised they'd accidentally helped the wrong side, which was a neat thing to add. I agree with your A/N - it is easy to see how the twins could have been tricked because they were so eager to join the Order.

But... I'm not sure if the way it came about was quite believable. First of all I think the twins would exercise a bit more caution after receiving a vague message about dark activity, from people they don't know, particularly after Voldemort had just come out into the open.

Also, I wondered why the girls needed Gred and Forge's help at all. Clearly the Death Eaters already knew what to expect and when, because they wrote it in the note, so why did they need the twins?

Those critiques aside, I liked this piece. For being one of the first stories you ever wrote, it is really great! Nice job :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I'll see if I can't add in a little more of their jokes and a little more description in the latter half of the story.

I think you've pointed out what didn't feel right about this story. I will have to think on how to make it a little more believable. Perhaps instead of strangers, people they know in the DA that might have the connections?

I'll think a little more on this question also about why they needed Fred and George's help when they knew when and where. One answer that comes to mind is that it would be unremarkable if Fred and George were discovered by the Order to be in the area but it would be a different outcome altogether if one of the known Death Eaters were found by accident.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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Review #3, by marauder5 To Become a Spy

23rd June 2013:
Hello! I'm here for the review tag.

Okay, so I just had to read this story, because Fred and George are simply awesome! I love the image you created of their shop in the beginning. For some reason, I especially enjoyed George entering, his arms full of boxes with fake wand. I don't know why, but it stood out to me and made the whole scene seem so real!

As for characterisation, I had expected the twins to act a little bit more... Fred and George-y. You know, crack a few jokes to each other before the girls enter, and then treating the girls in a more joking way, if that makes any sense. To be honest, I felt like they just were a bit too serious the whole way through (although it makes sense that they were after the Death Eater attack).

As for the plot, it might be AU, but it was brilliant! Having them call for the Death Eaters was really unexpected, and such a twist! I did not see it coming, and it is the best part about this story! I really thought it was perfect, and I agree with you that it makes sense for them to do anything to get in the order. It's a bit strange that they can't join already, now that they are of age. Perhaps Molly is begging Dumbledore not to let them in.

Speaking of Dumbledore, I'm really glad that they turned to him, and as always, he gave them the most perfect advice and solved the situation with his wisdom. I'm sure Molly woud have been thrilled to hear that they were going back to school too ;)

All in all, this was really good. As I said, the only thing you could work in is the characterisation of Fred and George. Other than that, I really enjoyed this!! :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I've added a note to work on Fred and George's characterization a little more at the beginning.

It seems like Molly didn't want any of her children to be in the Order, even though Bill and Charlie had joined.

With the Extendable Ears and how they kept trying to get information all throughout the book, I wondered how they would be as spies. :)

If I remember right, I think that having them call the Death Eaters instead of the Order was a "what if" question. :I

Dumbledore always seems to know just the right answer. And yes, Molly would have been thrilled when she heard they wanted to finish school.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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Review #4, by APerkins To Become a Spy

22nd June 2013:
Hi, really essy to read, well written and enjoyable. Still struggling with the whole accepting written orders from 2 people you dont know the names of situation though. I kinda just wanna slap the pair of them :P
Well done

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Under normal circumstances, they wouldn't have fallen for the situation. But they wanted more than anything to join the Order of the Phoenix and leapt at the chance to do so without thinking.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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