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Review #1, by Oregonian Scene Five

9th May 2015:
Hi, Cassie. I picked this story to review because it had the fewest reviews of all your stories. It really is unusual because it’s five chapters of pure emotions. And furthermore, the main character in Ron, the guy who could never think of the right thing to say. But in all this talking to himself in his head, he proves to be a pretty eloquent fellow.

By concentrating on his feelings, you show him living entirely “in the moment”, what the gurus nowadays call “mindfulness”. He concentrates entirely on what he is seeing, experiencing, and feeling at this very moment. He’s not thinking back on his exciting life up to this point, nor speculating about the future years. Of course a story like this has to be written in the first person.

At first I didn’t know where the story was going, and I just luxuriated in the mass of little details that make up the scenes, but then it became clear that we were headed for emotions of a different sort, as the final three of the five chapters dealt with Ron’s dying, death, and afterlife observations of his family and friends. I liked the detail of the red button which Hermione could push when she was finished with her good-byes, and Ron’s awareness of everything, even after he appeared to be in a coma. The presence of the ghosts, especially Fred, made a smooth transition from this life to the next, complementing the smooth transition of Ron, who never stopped talking and observing, even as he passed the boundary.

This is certainly “no happy ending”, but it is interesting that you chose, not a resurgence of Death Eaters or a mishap in Ron’s occupation, or even a falling-out between once loving partners, but just a senseless, random piece of bad luck, totally unexpected and unpredictable, the sort of thing that could happen to anyone. Just in case we thought we had any guarantees in life…

An unusual subject and an unusual treatment. Nice work.


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Review #2, by LilyEPotter Scene One

10th February 2014:
That had to be about the sweetest way that Ron could have proposed. Though I can certainly understand Ron's point of view concerning the rollercoasters. There's nothing quite like the safety bar not holding properly. :(

What a perfectly sweet wedding! I couldn't help chuckling at their vows, especially Hermione's when she acknowledged that Ron could be dense. :)

Author's Response: Ah, I love roller coasters! Haha. But I've been on a few scary ones before.

Thank you for leaving a sweet revieW

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Review #3, by Broken Butterfly Scene Five

19th July 2013:
WOW> That is all I have to say about this. It is just wonderfully amazing. I really like how the story begins on a happier note, marriage and Pregnancy and then comes crashing down for a really realistic reason. The Idea of giving Ron a Brain tumor is just really creative because while its realistic, it something people going around saying will never happen to them... The story really showed how imperfect life really is and how thinking that it is will give you a rude awakening you would rather not have had. I love Ron's POV in this because it really gave an aspect to the story that wouldn't be there without it. Thanks for submitting this to the No Happy Ending Challenge... stay tuned for the results coming up soon.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for that review! I was left a little speechless the first time I read it =)

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Review #4, by Ron 4 Hermione Scene One

18th July 2013:
Wow, that was so nice! The vows were something really special and I could just picture them two standing there saying them! You wrote that beautifully!

Your characterisation of Ron was perfect, from not saying the speech he had prepared and then feeling nervous before the wedding. You had him down perfectly.

Your descriptions of Hyde park were so realistic, you had everything. Sights, sounds, smells and that's not something a lot of people include but I could really envisage Hermione and Ron wandering around, it was so realistic! The whole scene was great, I loved the little details about Hermione's childhood because you don't normally hear about her childhood since she's a muggle but I like the detail you've put in!

This was a great chapter, can't wait to read the next one! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad I was able to get him down just perfect =)

I was able to cheat a little bit because I've been to Hyde's Park though, =) I wanted to be able to add it in because I knew I could add in those little things. That fair is beautiful though.

I hope they were/are up to your expectation!

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