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Review #1, by LittleLionGirl Start of Term

13th March 2014:
Hello! I am here to review on your story for the Slytherin vs. Gryffindor competition on the forums, so I figured what better than a story that is about one of the most well know competitions in the world of Harry Potter. Let me just start by saying you have an excellent frame for a story so that is great. That being said, some simple to fix errors are lurking around. I'd recommend another quick run through at some point. Trust me I am not trying to call you out in anyway since I don't actually edit my stories before I publish them- that is a later event. That being said, I edit eight, nine times and mistakes still pop up so depending on how serious you take this story is how serious you should relook at it. The background on the characters is nice and placed in just the right spots. If you really want to make the story shine I'd say a little bit more detail in some places would go a very long way. Please don't take what I am saying to heart though- I started a story like this and the first chapter fell so flat I have yet to continue...

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