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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Pheonix Potioneer Platform 9 and 3/4

14th July 2013:
This is a good story! Looks like you started it at Albus's fifth year. Not many people start then.

I like your personality of Albus- he seems like a good kid. I also like how made Hugo to be some book-smart kid, that's very funny. Not many people portray him as very smart.

Hmm, your Scorpius is interesting. Quite a few stories have Scorpius and Albus as best friends, so I really like how you made them enemies. Very unique!

You have a few mistakes with past and present in this story. Most of it is past tense, but in the second paragraph, you said "misses" instead of "missed". Also, in the 12th paragraph, you didn't put the first quotation mark around "Albus".

What?! The Lightening Rod costs 800 galleons! That's a ton of money! I'm surprised Draco was even considering it. I like the name of the broomstick though, that sounds like an excellent title.

So, it looks like Albus is best friends with Cedric. The second he was mentioned, I assumed he was named after Cedric Diggory, but I didn't realize he was Krum's kid! I'm actually surprised Krum named his Cedric, I didn't know Krum liked Cedric that much. Krum respected Cedric though, so I supposed he was rattled by Cedric's death. I also suppose Krum felt guilty about cursing Cedric.

It's nice that you mentioned the ages of the cousins for future reference. Everybody has them as different ages.

Good job for your first story!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try to fix the corrections

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Review #2, by HEDWIG Red Robes and Red Flames

10th July 2013:
AMAZING: I do feel sorry for Kyle, I do hope they become friends again...

Author's Response: Thank You! You'll just have to wait and see.

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Review #3, by HEDWIG Albus's Prediction

9th July 2013:
Very good. I like Fred and Jame's humour . Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you for the kind response!

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Review #4, by HEDWIG The Announcement

9th July 2013:
Amazing! I did not see Bucky nor Teddy as teacher coming!

Author's Response: Thank you! I like to throw in little twists

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Review #5, by HEDWIG Platform 9 and 3/4

9th July 2013:
Amazing! Just like J.K, though isn't HArry an auror and Kingsley Shacklebolt Minister for Magic? LOVED the idea of Cho and Krum, keep it up!!

Author's Response: Yes, Harry is an Auror! And Kingsley was minister of Magic, but this is 24 years since he took the position, so I pictured him retiring by this time. And thank you for the nice review!

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Review #6, by HPFANFOREVER Platform 9 and 3/4

22nd June 2013:
Wow! I'm really enjoying it so far, but maybe there's too much background info you could cut out (the bit about Draco being nicer, for one example). Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you! It means a lot to me, and more chapters are coming. Ill be sure to watch for your suggestion as well.

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