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Review #1, by BitterSweetFlames A Shade of Bleak

18th December 2013:
Hi there. Carla here from the review tag over at the forums. I don't really think that this chapter is quite boring. I really liked the way you built the first part of the chapter --- the bleakness of the imagery at the start coupled with the longing really strikes a nerve. Then there's the contrast of the joy at the end... Of course, I wish I could read about Barty but that's a different chapter, I know.
Anyway, good luck with this story. I might also maybe get a beta.. there were a few typos though none too glaring.

---Carla

Author's Response: Hi!

I really wasn't sure about this chapter- I was worried that it wasn't engaging at all. Barty will be coming up shortly.

I was waiting to see if I'd continue with this story before I got a beta, but I think I might end up doing that soon!

Thank you for your lovely review!

x Ely


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