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Review #1, by Guest Chapter Two

1st August 2013:
Please update soon!!

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Review #2, by marauderfan Chapter Two

30th July 2013:
So... I decided to keep reading, since you've just got this new chapter up!

Poor Lily, that party was a disaster! Nate is awful, what is he even doing there? I hope he got kicked out after that. It's clear Finn cares about Lily, but not quite in the idealistic way she wants. Five years is a big age difference when you're that age, but it seems like a lot less when you're older, so I have high hopes for her when she comes back from her travels :)

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
It was. Nate was in Al's year (and house) at Hogwarts and friends with him (I'm using the term friends really loosely here). He was mainly there because Potter's knew how to throw a party so every would want to go and him being Al's 'friend' was his excuse for being there.
(And he ran out after his encounter with Finn)
The age gap is one of the reasons Finn doesn't want to be with Lily at this moment in the story (that and the fact that she's James' little sister)
Let's just hope when she comes back, Finn won't still think the same - seven years is a long time.
Thanks again for reviewing. :)


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Review #3, by marauderfan Chapter One

30th July 2013:
Hello, here for the review swap!

I really liked this! You've done a great job with Lily's character and introducing your OC. I think it makes a lot of sense for Lily to go travelling - I can totally understand how she'd get tired of being known just because of her surname, it must get tiring!

One thing I see a lot of in next-gen stories is James II being just like James I, trying to get a girl who doesn't like him, but this is the first I've seen Lily II just like Ginny at that age, with a long-lasting crush on someone who just sees her as "his friend's sister". I really like the parallel! Especially her sending him Valentine's cards... at least she thought to do it anonymously, instead of sending him singing ones! ;)

This is a lovely first chapter! I know not a lot happened but I really like all the background up front there, it's like all the things Lily is remembering as she sees Finn again (lol... Finnegan again? Ok, done rhyming) for the first time. Can't wait to see where this goes, I think you've got a wonderful start!

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
It can get tiring for Lily just to be recognised for her surname, there's more of this is later chapters.
I can imagine Lily being just like Ginny but it would have been a lot more embarrassing if they were singing Valentine's - I don't think James would ever let that go.
Thanks again for reviewing (and I love your rhyming ;))


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Review #4, by Ray Chapter One

13th June 2013:
Really good start! I can't wait for the update - Finn sounds pretty mysterious and handsome:)

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing and for your comment! :) Unfortunately, the second chapter was rejected and I'm busy learning my French Oral (EPP - scary stuff) so I don't have time to edit/rewrite it. BUT, the edited chapter should, hopefully, be up in two weeks, once my oral is over.
Thanks again for reviewing!


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Review #5, by Lululuna Chapter One

8th June 2013:
Hello! :)

As a first chapter, and especially your first fan fiction, I think this works very well. It's nice to read a Lily II centric fic, as I feel that stories focusing on her brothers or Rose are much more common! I really like how you've portrayed her here, she really comes across as a believable, ordinary young woman with insecurities, but who also makes things happen for herself. I like how she tried to escape the fame her family has in England, and how she often feels upstaged. She seems so down to earth and relatable, especially when she realizes she's not looking her best when seeing Finn, or her tendency to blush furiously.

I like the combination of Lily's backstory and the current action, it flows very smoothly. Can I just point out what an excellent name Finnegan O'Donoghue has as well? I really enjoyed her little crush on him, and am interested to see how it plays out now that Lily's back. I really felt for her when he didn't recognize her in Potions... unless he did and just was playing hard to get... and because he was the teacher... but I mean, come on Finn, of course you remember her!

I also appreciated the little details you added in to explain things about the wizarding world, like the establishment of the Leavers Ball for students, and why Lily had to arrive at the Ministry. They help make the story more realistic, and also add nice little insights into the wizarding world and next generation realm which we all love so much. Great job with this, and good luck with the upcoming chapters! :D Thanks for the swap! :)

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
I haven't seen many stories with Lily Potter II as the main character so when I read the story this is based on, I thought this would be perfect for her. I can't imagine Lily being perfect and loving all the fame that is given to her with her surname so I tried to make her seem, well, normal. I'm glad that came across to you as a reader.
It flows! That was one of my biggest worries when writing the chapter so I'm happy it does. As for recognising her, Finn is going to reveal a few things in the upcoming chapters...
I'm glad you liked the details, I thought adding them would help the story flow better instead of jumping right in and also help the reader understand the back story better.
Once again, thank you for your lovely review and for the review swap. :)


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Review #6, by blackzero Chapter One

7th June 2013:
Honestly a well written chapter with solid background story . Hope to see an update soon. I only disliked the male surname

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I am going to post the next chapter in a few days, I have written it but I need to check over for any grammatical errors.
About the surname, I was looking for an Irish surname, so I googled them (non-Irish person here) and it was the first that came up where I didn't already know someone with that surname. If I find different surname I like, I might go back and edit it.
Thanks again for reviewing! :)


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