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Review #1, by Athene Goodstrength Regrets

16th July 2013:
Wow! This is very striking! I feel like you really got into Lucius's mind... And it would have been very easy to make it all about his regrets, but you include good memories too, to show what he's lost. It makes it more poignant.

The imagery is very strong, and I could vividly imagine the story. I had this growing sense of dread as the story continued, and the line about the beast lowering its hood was a full-on shudder moment! The last paragraph is so sad, but you also get across the sense that Lucius is finally going to be able to rest from his dance with darkness, and that's a comfort.

The formatting on here is a little off, with big spaces between paragraphs - maybe just check it over.

Otherwise, this was fantastic. Well done.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I will look over the pharagraph thing, thanks for the tip.

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